Half knowledge is a bad thing. - Complete Essay (Please review)
 

AoA Seniors, Please review my essay. Let me know your suggestion and please do not forget to give me marks out of 100. Thanks in advance. :dd

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wsalam. i am junior .
i think ''A Little knowledge is bad thing'' will be correct to say .

i have not read your essay thoroughly but u should have given examples in every paragraph to justify stance .it will make your essay lengthy and attractive.

Your flow in expressions are good. But improve your outlines, It probably wont work. Give examples to justify the statement. I am also having half knowledge :D

Thank you so much @Whitehulk and @Greenboat for your comments.

[QUOTE=Whitehulk;1014171]wsalam. i am junior .
i think ''A Little knowledge is bad thing'' will be correct to say .

i have not read your essay thoroughly but u should have given examples in every paragraph to justify stance .it will make your essay lengthy and attractive.[/QUOTE]

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[QUOTE=Greenboat;1014179]Your flow in expressions are good. But improve your outlines, It probably wont work. Give examples to justify the statement. I am also having half knowledge :D[/QUOTE]

I will keep that in mind and will try to improve my outlines. I have tried to give examples to justify the statements in serveral parts of the essay, but I will review it again for sure. Thank you @Greenboat and do not hesitate to add anything else you have in mind. I will be thankful to you.