[QUOTE=The dream of rain;1092387]Yes! you're right. But:
1- its true education and skills play eminent role. but "Illiteracy and skills" do not cause economic crisis, suchas Falling FDI, Current account deficit, currency devaluation, to name a few. AS you want to judge these on the ground mentioned.

2- "Deplorable healthcare condition is the effect of economy crises/woes." obviously true, but not relevant as per my point of view. You should not venture into such avenues which are too down the isle.

P.S. the views are based on the advice that its all about economy so you're suppose to write from economic perspective. Coz i have never seen any economist voicing "such concerns."
Hope i didn't tense you. Keep your spirits high![/QUOTE]

i read out outline and introduction. Outline is a bit lengthy. Your critique of the essay may be right but how can you say that education does not affect economy. By Looking at the economic condition of Europe and South Asia, you will know how illiteracy is hurting our financial sector. Remember! Europe's Industrial Revolution was the result of Renaissance ( revival of knowledge). So, effective education can help us cope with the said issue.

[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1092388]May be i am wrong but let me quote a passage from dawn for your clarification.

SHANGLA: Divisional president of Pakistan Peoples Party Afsarul Mulk said on Sunday that [B]the Pakistan Tehreek-i-Insaf-led government had failed to deliver [/B]during last four years in Khyber Pakhtunkhwa despite its tall claim of change.
As per the highlighted line the PTI govt had failed to deliver. Likewise, we can write Media has failed to deliver not has been. You can check further through google.[/QUOTE]

In this sentence you will notice that reason is mentioned that is completing the sentence. For this type of sentences you can use "has/have" only. But for incomplete sentence "has/have" been is used.
Check this "[I][COLOR="Red"]had failed to deliver during last four years in Khyber Pakhtunkhwa despite its tall claim of change[/COLOR][/I]."
In this sentence reason is mentioned that completes the sentence.

[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1092391]i read out outline and introduction. Outline is a bit lengthy. Your critique of the essay may be right but how can you say that education does not affect economy. By Looking at the economic condition of Europe and South Asia, you will know how illiteracy is hurting our financial sector. Remember! Europe's Industrial Revolution was the result of Renaissance ( revival of knowledge). So, effective education can help us cope with the said issue.[/QUOTE]

Apologize. I added "do not" by mistake.
Literacy and skilled education are important to overcome the economic crises.

Education System of Pakistan
1.Introduction
2.Importance of education
i.Education is necessary for socio-economical development.
ii.The foundation of every state is education of its youth .
iii.Education must be the first priority of every nation.
iv. Education without experiment is just a waste of time.
3.Pakistan Education Problems
i.Poverty
ii.Gender disparity
iii.Political interference.
iv.Old techniques and lecture methods.
v.Terrorism and Madrassah's
vi.No equity in course content.
vii.Lack of funds.
viii.Lack of proactive planning .
ix.Theoretical Knowledge.
4.SUGGESTIONS
i.New schemes for poor families.
ii.No gender discrimination.
iii.High budget share for Education.
iv.Implementation of unique course content.
v.Political stability.
5.Conclusion

Seniors please check this outline.It is my first try...

it is better to categorize the way forward to overcome the economic crisis and skip the effects.

[QUOTE=azam shahzad;1092482]Education System of Pakistan
1.Introduction
2.Importance of education
i.Education is necessary for socio-economical development.
ii.The foundation of every state is education of its youth .
iii.Education must be the first priority of every nation.
iv. Education without experiment is just a waste of time.
3.Pakistan Education Problems
i.Poverty
ii.Gender disparity
iii.Political interference.
iv.Old techniques and lecture methods.
v.Terrorism and Madrassah's
vi.No equity in course content.
vii.Lack of funds.
viii.Lack of proactive planning .
ix.Theoretical Knowledge.
4.SUGGESTIONS
i.New schemes for poor families.
ii.No gender discrimination.
iii.High budget share for Education.
iv.Implementation of unique course content.
v.Political stability.
5.Conclusion

Seniors please check this outline.It is my first try...[/QUOTE]

Great effort! Topic is "Education system of Pakistan" so avoid to write "importance of education". You only need to write details relevant to Pakistan's education system. You need to describe Pakistan education system. Write education structure of Pakistan.
Hope this helps.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092397]In this sentence you will notice that reason is mentioned that is completing the sentence. For this type of sentences you can use "has/have" only. But for incomplete sentence "has/have" been is used.
Check this "[I][COLOR="Red"]had failed to deliver during last four years in Khyber Pakhtunkhwa despite its tall claim of change[/COLOR][/I]."
In this sentence reason is mentioned that completes the sentence.[/QUOTE]

Ok. i agree to your opinion

[QUOTE=azam shahzad;1092482]Education System of Pakistan
1.Introduction
2.Importance of education
i.Education is necessary for socio-economical development.
ii.The foundation of every state is education of its youth .
iii.Education must be the first priority of every nation.
iv. Education without experiment is just a waste of time.
3.Pakistan Education Problems
i.Poverty
ii.Gender disparity
iii.Political interference.
iv.Old techniques and lecture methods.
v.Terrorism and Madrassah's
vi.No equity in course content.
vii.Lack of funds.
viii.Lack of proactive planning .
ix.Theoretical Knowledge.
4.SUGGESTIONS
i.New schemes for poor families.
ii.No gender discrimination.
iii.High budget share for Education.
iv.Implementation of unique course content.
v.Political stability.
5.Conclusion

Seniors please check this outline.It is my first try...[/QUOTE]

My analysis
1. socio-economic not economical
Just write importance but not its sub-headings
3. education without experiment ....... are you supporting education or experiment. To me, it is incoherent
4. Pakistan Education Problems. This heading should be like state of education in Pakistan or problems of education in Pakistan
Poverty, gender discrimination are causes of downfall not problems
Old techniques and lecture methods. Yes this is a problem but make it brief: old teaching methodologies
4. if you are quoting problems, you should also provide reasons behind them
There are some mistakes in last portion as well. You should re-write it.
Seniors will help you further.

Emerging power of Social media: Prospects and Problems
 

[B][CENTER]Emerging power of Social media: Prospects and Problems[/CENTER][/B]
1- Introduction
[B]2- Prospects of Social Media[/B]
[COLOR="Blue"]2.a. Emerging power of social media in Politics[/COLOR]
[I]i. It acts as democratic agent
ii. It promotes political stability
iii.It is used to start political campaigns[/I]
iv. It is used to say formal statements by Statesmen
[COLOR="blue"]2.b.Emerging Power of social media in Society[/COLOR]
[I]i. It creates awareness and maturity among the masses
ii. It is source of formal and informal education
iii.It works as social activist for the human rights
iv. It curtails the crimes in society
v. It is source of news
vi. It is source of entertainment[/I]
[COLOR="blue"]2.c. Emerging Power of Social Media in Economy[/COLOR]
[I]i. It helps in starting new businesses
ii. It promotes business
iii.It develops business connections
iv. It provide access to international market
v. It is fastest, cheap and reliable source of communication[/I]
[B]3- Problems of social media[/B]
[I]a. It can be used to defame a person for personal interests
b. It wastes time in irrelevance
c. It weakens family bond
d. It can fragile morality
e. It can adverse impacts on health
f. It can promote terrorism, extremism and violence
g. It is declining reading habits
h. It endorses vulgarity in society
i. It spreads fake news and propaganda
j. It lacks the privacy
k. It a source of online frauds and harassment
l. It is Imposing of Western culture[/I]
[B]4- way forward to overcome the problems[/B]
[I]a. Gradual reduction in use
b. Strong vigilance of parents over their children
c. Increase trend of sports and extra-curricular activities
d. Capacity enhancement of regulatory institutions
e. Implementing existing and new laws
f. Curbing terrorist hiring over social media
g. Owners of social media should curb fake news
h. International cooperation[/I]
[B]5- Conclusion[/B]

“[I]Social media is the ultimate equalizer. It gives a voice and a platform to anyone willing to engage[/I].” ( Amy Jo Martin)

Social media is emerged as largest and most influencing platform of modern world for exchanging information and engaging the large number of masses in different ways in their daily life. Social media is the set of online websites or communication channels that exchange or transmit information to large number of masses. It has got highly significance in daily life as it is the cheapest, reliable and fastest medium of communication. It is accessible in every corner of world and used by all age-groups. It is very common for its uses in businesses, trades and connectivity people worldwide. It promotes democratic norms, provides political knowledge, manages rule of law, and stands as voice of innocent and oppressed people. It creates maturity, builds awareness, and keeps the masses updated to contemporary world. It assists in running the machinery of government, emerging social evils and exposing culprits. It provides educational and professional training, establishes business relations, overcomes the unemployment, boosts religious teachings and entertains the people. As a coin has two faces in the same way social media has some problems as well besides positive prospects. It can be used in threatening the people and targeting them for personal benefits. It can be used to spread terrorism, extremism, social anarchy, hate speeches, and vulgarity. It can be used to harass the women and blackmail people. It weakens family bonds, causes health issues, and destabilizes traditions and cultural values. It is the source of propaganda and fake news, doing online fraud and fragile morality. There are number of solutions that can be implemented to overcome the problem created by social media.

[COLOR="Red"][B][I]Please evaluate and suggest me improvements.[/I][/B][/COLOR]
 

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092514][B][CENTER]Emerging power of Social media: Prospects and Problems[/CENTER][/B]
1- Introduction
[B]2- Prospects of Social Media[/B]
[COLOR="Blue"]2.a. Emerging power of social media in Politics[/COLOR]
[I]i. It acts as democratic agent
ii. It promotes political stability
iii.It is used to start political campaigns[/I]
iv. It is used to say formal statements by Statesmen
[COLOR="blue"]2.b.Emerging Power of social media in Society[/COLOR]
[I]i. It creates awareness and maturity among the masses
ii. It is source of formal and informal education
iii.It works as social activist for the human rights
iv. It curtails the crimes in society
v. It is source of news
vi. It is source of entertainment[/I]
[COLOR="blue"]2.c. Emerging Power of Social Media in Economy[/COLOR]
[I]i. It helps in starting new businesses
ii. It promotes business
iii.It develops business connections
iv. It provide access to international market
v. It is fastest, cheap and reliable source of communication[/I]
[B]3- Problems of social media[/B]
[I]a. It can be used to defame a person for personal interests
b. It wastes time in irrelevance
c. It weakens family bond
d. It can fragile morality
e. It can adverse impacts on health
f. It can promote terrorism, extremism and violence
g. It is declining reading habits
h. It endorses vulgarity in society
i. It spreads fake news and propaganda
j. It lacks the privacy
k. It a source of online frauds and harassment
l. It is Imposing of Western culture[/I]
[B]4- way forward to overcome the problems[/B]
[I]a. Gradual reduction in use
b. Strong vigilance of parents over their children
c. Increase trend of sports and extra-curricular activities
d. Capacity enhancement of regulatory institutions
e. Implementing existing and new laws
f. Curbing terrorist hiring over social media
g. Owners of social media should curb fake news
h. International cooperation[/I]
[B]5- Conclusion[/B]

“[I]Social media is the ultimate equalizer. It gives a voice and a platform to anyone willing to engage[/I].” ( Amy Jo Martin)

Social media is emerged as largest and most influencing platform of modern world for exchanging information and engaging the large number of masses in different ways in their daily life. Social media is the set of online websites or communication channels that exchange or transmit information to large number of masses. It has got highly significance in daily life as it is the cheapest, reliable and fastest medium of communication. It is accessible in every corner of world and used by all age-groups. It is very common for its uses in businesses, trades and connectivity people worldwide. It promotes democratic norms, provides political knowledge, manages rule of law, and stands as voice of innocent and oppressed people. It creates maturity, builds awareness, and keeps the masses updated to contemporary world. It assists in running the machinery of government, emerging social evils and exposing culprits. It provides educational and professional training, establishes business relations, overcomes the unemployment, boosts religious teachings and entertains the people. As a coin has two faces in the same way social media has some problems as well besides positive prospects. It can be used in threatening the people and targeting them for personal benefits. It can be used to spread terrorism, extremism, social anarchy, hate speeches, and vulgarity. It can be used to harass the women and blackmail people. It weakens family bonds, causes health issues, and destabilizes traditions and cultural values. It is the source of propaganda and fake news, doing online fraud and fragile morality. There are number of solutions that can be implemented to overcome the problem created by social media.[/QUOTE]

[COLOR="Red"][B][I]Please evaluate and suggest me improvements.[/I][/B][/COLOR]