Fair Critisim please on my Essay "Disaster management and government preparedness"

[xeeshanqureshi]

DISASTER MANAGEMENT AND GOVERNMENT PREPAREDNESS

“Climate change is already here, the era of prevention is over, now we have to find ways to mitigate the damage” - Dale Jamieson

1. INTRODUCTION
1.1. Definition
1.1.1. Disaster
1.1.2. Disaster management
1.2. Pakistan – A vulnerable country to disaster despite sincere efforts
1.3. Global development towards disaster management

2. TYPES OF DISASTERS
2.1. Natural disasters
- Floods, earthquakes, droughts, tsunamis, cyclones
2.2. Man-made disasters
- Accidents, urban & forest fires, civil conflicts, oil-spills

3. MAJOR DISASTERS IN PAKISTAN SINCE INCEPTION
3.1. Major flood events in Pakistan
- 1973, 1988, 1992, 2010, 2014
3.2. October 2005 earthquake

4. GOVERNMENT INITIATIVES TOWARDS EFFEVTIVE DISASTER MANAGEMENT
4.1. Legislative efforts
4.1.1. National disaster management ordinance, 2006
4.2. Institutional efforts
4.2.1. National disaster management commission (NDMC)
4.2.2. National disaster management authority (NDMA)
4.2.3. Provisional disaster management commission (PDMC)
4.2.4. Provisional disaster management authority (PDMA)
4.2.5. District disaster management authority (DDMA)

5. NATIONAL DISASTER MANAGEMENT AUTHORITY (NDMA)
5.1. Disaster risk reduction – making communities resilient
5.1.1. Policy initiatives
5.1.1.1. National policy on DDR
5.1.1.2. National disaster management plan
5.1.1.3. Disaster risk insurance
5.1.1.4. Policy on climate change
5.1.2. Institutional initiatives
5.1.2.1. One UN joint program
5.1.2.2. National institute of disaster management
5.1.2.3. Satellite early warning system
5.1.2.4. Basic early warning system
5.1.2.5. Awareness raising workshop
6. INTERNATIONAL COMMUNITY EFFORTS FOR EFFICIENT DISASTER MANAGEMENT
6.1. World conferences on disaster risk reduction
6.1.1. First world conference – 1994
- Adopted Yokohama strategy nd plan of action
6.1.2. Second world conference – 2005
- Adopted Hyogo Framework of Action (200-2015)
6.1.3. Third world conference – March, 2015

7. JAPAN – A ROLE MODEL OF EFFICIENT DISASTER MANAGEMENT

8. MAJOR CHALLENGES IN DEALING EFFECTIVELY WITH DISASTERS
8.1. Resource constraints
8.2. Dedicated budget line
8.3. Delayed rescue operations
8.4. District level capacity
8.5. Land use planning
8.6. Under equipped civilian institutions
8.7. Absence of local government
8.8. Lack of communication among DMAs

9. WAY FORWARD
9.1. Reducing disaster risks
9.2. Capacity enhancement of NDMA
9.3. Disaster responsive force
9.4. Land use planning
9.5. Local government
9.6. Efficient early warning system
9.7. Quick rescue operations
9.8. Strong construction design
9.9. Equipping civilian institution

10. CONCLUSION

[xeeshanqureshi]

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redmax, naveed bhutto, tasswur, tashfeen

please comment on my above essay, if you read this post.

[aimalkhan]

Dear friend you diverted your essay outline towards irrelevant materiel. for instance: predict and suggest attracting motivator grab the attention of your reader then, in next phase follow good thesis statement and try to prove yourself; your statements with authentic source_ statistics, number, figures, statement by authorities and quote famous quotations by famous personalities. And in concluding paragraph; reworded your thesis statement and predict your clincher with the best finishing.

[sadafnoorelahi]

mashaALLAH. commndable effort. but i think that you should have written about disater managemnt in more detail. in addition, i with my with scarce knowledg opine that there is no need of separate heading of international efforts. you will write it in essay, but not in outline. very good piece of information.

[Metlo]

Everything irrelevan except suggestions which is not good enough to pass.
This essay should focus on three main headings; key components of disaster management, the govt preparedness and suggestions.
The most important thing in essay is the measure of RELEVANCE, all other is secondary requirement..
Disaster management has three key components;
1, risk reduction
2, preparedness
3 response
In pakistan, no serious attention is paid to risk reduction,
our preparedness is inadequate,
and our response is in shambles.