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Artificial Intelligence is a tool, not a threat.

Outline

1. Introduction.
Thesis Statement: "AI is a great tool created to ease our lives, not to threaten it."

2. Defining the term "Artificial Intelligence"

3. Artificial Intelligence is a formidable tool for:
- enhancing agriculture.
- buttressing healthcare sector
- imparting quality education.
- correct forecast of weather.
- seeking psychological consultation.
- abating crime.
- improving aerospace technology.
- boosting transportation.
- easing domestic chores.

3. Why AI is prescribed as a threat in some circles ?
- the robotic interpretation of AI, that it will end the human race.
- AI will replace humans in economic sector, thus mass unemployment.
- It will further the economic disparity.
- Its military applications will result in HR violations.
- AI is prone to cyber attacks, thus greater risk.

4. Clarifications of the aforementioned threats:
- AI doesn't mean all-robot scenario.
- new jobs will be created, as witnessed in the past, at the advent of technological advancements.
- HR are violated in very arm conflict; instead AI tools can be used to review and analyse these violations.
- All the tech-giants are united to direct AI in a positive direction

5. Conclusion.

Brother, nice attempt. You have understood the topic and have placed good effort. There are certain points need to be highlighted:

First, add numbers or alphabetic to sub-headings. they should clearly refer to the main heading.
Second, your ideas are clear but points are bit dis-organized. you need to organize them. For ex, points under 'Heading-4' should be merged with "#3." That would clarify and make logical sequence of ideas. As essay demands logical flow of ideas.
Third, for "a tool, not a threat," 70-30% would be ratio for the such a essay respectively in my view. You can change ratios as per your thoughts.

Rest is fine. If its one of your first attempts then its pretty amazing. Just need to work on organization, headings and sub-headings make them more self-explaining.

Keep asking, Keep your spirit up!
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