i think miss urooj is trying her level best to give suggestions and also improving herself in essay writing but one thing i noted is something odd to me. that is lengthy outline. i dont think that u will be able to make such a long outline in just 20 or even 40 minutes. therefore it will be appropriate that u should revise your outline in one page only. such outlines need atleast 2 page and they will certainly make examiner angry.

so have a look at outline.