@ Dr. Atif:

Sentence No. 1:
... made up of (as pointed out by Dr. Hassan)

Sentence No. 3:
Springs must emerge from 'depths' not 'depth'.

Sentence No. 4:
"cool, green, shady place" can also be a "pleasant place"... which is called oasis. I find this incorrect. It should rather be 'thus forming an oasis'.

Sentence No. 5:
'abode' is not a verb applicable here. makeshift/foldables - don't do this. Use one appropriate word. Remember: You are precising. The original text says in search of 'grass and water', but you mentioned only grass. Use a word like 'food' instead.

Sentence No. 7:
you have used 'and' twice in the sentence. replace the first one with a comma.

'and care them'... you it should be 'care for'
'feel proud riding them'... I am not sure but I think a preposition may be missing after proud... so make a safe sentence like 'proudly ride them' or 'feel pride in riding them'.
avoid contractions like "Don't" in formal English. Use do not.

Sentence No. 8:
'goods' as already pointed out by Dr. Hassan.

This time your title is better. You overwrote again, or perhaps there's a

problem with your pen. Buy a good-quality ink pen now so that it becomes

smooth till you finally sit in the exams. This was however a better attempt.

For improving your handwriting, you should write slowly with the aim of a better handwriting. Pick up speed when your handwriting starts getting beautiful. You should give some time to handwriting practice. It's also important.

All the best.

Regards,

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"The race is not over because I haven't won yet."

Adil Memon
Police Service of Pakistan (P.S.P)
37th Common Training Program