@Sabah Hunzai
aoa dear i have some mixed comments,so pls dnt be offended.ur aproach is good but not thorough.there is a lot that can be add to the outlinee.e.g Pakistan's perspective,its global effects,its effects on pakistan...then do elaborate the current approach.

as to the grammatical mistakes,i did find some but since im not an expert,won't comment on them.some expert should better help u in that.

lastly about ur coclusion,the most striking thing in ur conclusion is the part where you put queston.you can further beautify ur conclusion by raising more such questions.
Good luck

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