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please give critical feedback.
War on Terror
1. Introduction (words 100) 2. On Defining Terrorism (200) 3. Roots of Terrorism(100) • Political roots of Terrorism(200) • Economic roots of terrorism(200) • Cultural roots of terrorism(150) • Religious roots of terrorism(200) 4. Contemporary Apprach to Counter Terrorism(300) 5. Downsides of the Approach(300) 6. A Wayout for Countering Terrorism (100) • Resolution of political issues(300) • Promotion of cultural and religious pluralism(200) • Equality of nations through economic reform policies(200) • Empowerment of International organizations(200) Conclusion (206) Almost every corner of the world has been affected by terrorism. Voices have been raised and actions have been put to counter this menace. But the reality, indeed hard to digest, is its root causes, associated with big powers. It is neither self driven nor existential in its nature. It is man made and associated with issues. One can not expect for its disappearance without resolving the issues confronted by many suppressed and aggravated countries and communites. To have peace in the world, it is imperative to have a pragmatic approach for resolving issues. Issues arise out of the exploitation of power, be it in the field of politics, economics, culture or religion. Issues can not be soloved with further exploitation of power by using force. It can be resolve through dialogue. For having dialogue numerious organizations have been created on both regional and international level, but without hands and brains of their own. Strengthening international organizations and neutrality of all countries in the dialogue process is sine-qua-non. But, the question of enormous importance is, will the supper powers shed their vested interest embeddied in the global issues? If yes, then our globe will, indeed, be a worth living place again, without the element of terror. viewers please check for both structure and grammerregards Sabbah |
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Excellent attempt and excellent approach for balancing the essay. Nice strategy.
Some value adding points: 1) There are some grammatical mistakes in the concluding paragraph. These might be type mistakes. If these are not typo mistakes then please be careful about these. 2) You have not written further break up of "Introduction" neither did you provide us the introductory paragraph. I am afraid you have properly defined and then discussed "War on terrorism". Outline covers "Terrorism" to a great length on the cost of "War on terrorism". Do focus on "War on terrorism", discussing only terrorism may divert you from the actual topic. Some corrections: Quote:
Last edited by Andrew Dufresne; Friday, February 05, 2010 at 09:08 PM. Reason: Merged |
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well, i have dealt first with defining terrorism then countering efforts. from the heading "comtemporary approach to counter terrorism' onward I dealt with war on terror, its failure and prospects. thanks once again for your feedback especially pointing out my grammer mistake.
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@Sabah Hunzai
aoa dear i have some mixed comments,so pls dnt be offended.ur aproach is good but not thorough.there is a lot that can be add to the outlinee.e.g Pakistan's perspective,its global effects,its effects on pakistan...then do elaborate the current approach. as to the grammatical mistakes,i did find some but since im not an expert,won't comment on them.some expert should better help u in that. lastly about ur coclusion,the most striking thing in ur conclusion is the part where you put queston.you can further beautify ur conclusion by raising more such questions. Good luck
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thanks for your comments, to answer your above reservation, please note, the essay is about "war on terrorism" it neither says about pakistan nor its ffects on pakistan. however, while giving examples of political, economic, culural and religious roots of terrorism, i will try to jot down the relevant cases not only from Pakistan but from around the world. e.g. palestine, kashmir, tammil tigers, clash of civilization theory, end of times theory, capitalism vs communism so and so forth. would love to have your comments on gramo mistakes. regards
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Sabah you have got good approach. You are right, essay should not be limited to Pakistan only as it is not restricted in its title. It should have taste of all the relevant cases from the globe.
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agree, please don't be offend from my words. you have given me an important point, now I will safely add Pakistan among the roots of .... hehehe I had just gone though your precis but am not feeling good today, will try to comment on it latter.
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@sabah hunzai
thnk u i ll wait for ur comments. may u get well soon Regards
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Assalam o Allaikoum wrwb,,,,
here is mine of Energy Crises in and its Solution
Looking forward for comments May Allah Bless Us All Regards |
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