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Old Saturday, April 24, 2010
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Originally Posted by Zeeshan Hyder View Post
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Freedom and Power Bring Responsibility
Sovereignty Leads to Opportunity and Challenges

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Today, however, with the great efforts and struggle India has observed to have independence and when all the world sleeps at midnight, the people of India awakes to life and freedom. Although, this freedom made us to be able to dedicate the services of those who gave their life in the war of independence that proved to be a larger cause of humanity.

The new Indian history which marks the India’s independence celebration brings the opportunities and challenges to be accepted bravely and wisely, particularly to exploit the efforts and struggle of our great leaders by virtue of them we are able to breathe in sovereign state India.

Freedom and power brings responsibility that rest upon this Assembly that represents the people of sovereign India. So it is this assembly’s (representatives) responsibility to lead India towards success and prosperity.



@Zeeshan Hyder

Dear Zeshan!
You have not expressed the thoughts which have been expressed in the given paragraphs. the given Paragraphs are about some thing else. you have written some sentences from original paragraph which i have underlined. you have crossed the word limit. the title is starting phrase of third paragraph which does not concludes all three paragraphs. you have put word in bracket, there is no need to do so. Dear try it again.
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