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Originally Posted by Raz
Try to start your essay with any relevant Ayat from Quran Pak which clearly suggests brotherhood, peace and tranquility. In this way you can gain the attention of reader. That Ayat should lead you towards complete essay. That Ayat should serve a purpose of Thesis statement (Hypothesis to be proved with valid arguments, evidences, explanations, illustrations and comparison during the whole essay.
Do not indulge into blame game and never jump to criticize Western block or Non-Muslims. This shows your inner feelings which are driven by your emotional state of mind which is prone to biasness. Do not out rightly blame over them for defaming or causing harm to essence of Islam. We all know, they have always played a prejudiced role but topic of essay doesn't demand to explain specifically the factors of conspiracy against Islam. This is in our unconscious state of mind that Western block is against Islam and is involved in aggression over Muslims that is why you have hurriedly turned your essay towards West and started justifying your stance as you were asked to counter argue allegations of Non Muslims.
No doubt, you cannot live without discussing west or Non Muslims in this essay because implied message of topic do require inclusion of opposite side too. It would be better if you explain fully the essence of Islam with proper illustrations and evidences and bit by bit insert the flow of opposite factors which term Islam as a religion of violence. This should be clubbed wisely with impressive linkages and justifications but directly justifying your stance in the light of West's conspiracy shows weak linkage and mismatching theme.
Ending paragraph has again resulted in a blunder which is the main cause of failure of majority of the candidates in essay. Essay topic was neither "Islam vs West" nor it was "Muslims vs West"/Threat to Islam from West. So ending your essay with following para invites the paper checker to use his guns and penalize you in result.
End of your essay should again revert back to the introductory points and should not contain your emotional message. Forget west in the end just praise Islam with valid and sensible quotes/verses/Ahadees in the prism of peace.
Work on your grammar and sentence structure because your introductory para shows your weaknesses in this area.
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Bundle of thanx.Raz bhai your comments are very useful for me.the purpose of pasting essay here serves by your comments.
What are your reccommendations to improve my sentence structure plzzzzzzz?????