DPO sb,

Introduction should always be eye-catching and impressive.It should conatin meaningful sentences which directly hit the given topic. No stray sentence is to be penetrated into ur first paragraph.
-Always use short sentences in ur discourse.
-Pay attention to the correct use of punctuation and articles.
-The grammatical errors are punished.
(you have used long sentences and hav committed punctuation errors in your every first Paragraph)


Regards

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Irfan Ali Samo
Police Service of Pakistan