A candidate mail me this story, i comment on it, Seniors also requested to comment to help 2010 aspirants in their prepration.


1. A male and a female r discussing any matter

story:

It is start of November, winter is approaching with dry, sunny and pleasant days. Ayesha, who belong to a humble khan family of Kpk, is a young ambitious girl. She just cleared written portion of css 2010 and preparing for interview. Her father is a professor and he is very co-operative and loving. In the picture, Ayesha is sitting with her father and both are having a productive discussion on various economical issues and their solutions. Such type of discussion is very necessary for grooming and confidence building. Parents should spare time from their busy routine and must involve their children in routine affairs as well as national and international affairs.

Correction;

Dont use words like dry.

Such words like

SUNNY, PLEASANT, YOUNG, AMBITIOUS, CO-PERATIVE, LOVING,GROOMING, CONFIDENCE show healthy expression.

Dont mention exam related anything as u wrote she cleared written portion of css.

any person with normal speed can write upto 114 words in 5 mints.

Length of story should b 100 plus words.

It is good attempt.

Try to use such type of words in ur stories;
confidence, devotion, enthusiasm, energetic, aptitude, passionate, exploring ideas,
U should mention positive points of ur personality in others characters
As u can write Aysha is very confident, energetic lady..............

She has aptitude to explore new ideas..................

Make such type of sentences.

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