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Originally Posted by hadia Khan
Precis:
There is the need of hour to understand Democracy and Dictatorship in terms of their influence on the state property. two problems are associated with state property. Those who own the property within a government becomes too powerful and their subject turns to be mere puppet in their hands. They hide the truth from the mob. It reflects the weakness of the society and is a perplexed issue for the whole society. So the state ought to be understood, without that one could not understand the society.
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where is "Title" ?
"There" should be replaced by "it".It is the need of hour.
"Mob" doesn't suit here.
nature of state proprietorship should be understood.
I appreciate your attempt but you need to practice it more.
Good Luck.
Quote:
Originally Posted by vacas
Precis: Comprehension of democracy and dictatorship is significant due to their disparate mode of property correspondence for state property. The one who controls the state’s land and income becomes all powerful through employment of might muscle and compulsion and act as absolute monarch. The mysterious question of know how of controller is perplex and is always secreted by whole social structure all over the personage history. This ownership signifies the shortcoming of any society which when further exposed could alienate and tender both non socialized and socialized stake so people prefer not to ponder over this delicate issue. Complete apprehension of state ownership nature is associated only with knowledge of instincts of society. (Total Words – 112)
Title :- Understanding State proprietorship
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Precis's purpose is to make passage easy to understand
You replaced easy word "understanding" with a comparatively difficult word "comprehension"
And there are many other such words in your precis.Kindly keep in mind,you have to make things simpler not more complex
Frankly speaking,the original passage was easier than your precis.As it's your first attempt so you can improve it by practice.
Keep it up !