Dear Alihashmat, yours is an outstanding attempt. Balanced and well-organized. I could hardly find a room to suggest you anything to improve. However, I will urge you for the next time to make an introduction of the essay as well. It will be a useful practice. I request you to check my outline of 2nd essay. And do attempt this topic also. For your this attempt I am giving you 50/100..

Dear your attempt is good. However, it is not without flaws. I am trying to point out what is lacking in your this attempt. First, you have not mentioned the causes of growing population. Secondly, some of the points which you suggested to control the rate of birth are vague: it is unclear how agricultural development or increase in industrialization can help in reducing the growth of population. Moreover, you have missed to include awareness campaigns, establishment of birth control centers which can provide useful information and incentives to the masses to control the rate of birth. Despite these shortcomings your attempt deserves appreciation, for you have rightly underscored the factors which make growing population a threat to our prosperity, progress and stability. You should also make introduction while attempting your next topic. For your this topic I am giving you 45/100. Just keep it up. I am sending my attempt please check it.

I firmly believe that our combine efforts will fascinate others to join our endeavor. Just don't let your burning zeal go down.