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Originally Posted by sidra naveed View Post
INTRODUCTION

You need to include two heading after Introducion:
Breif History
Rights of Women in Pakistan(as per the constitution)

WOMEN STATUS IN PAKISTAN
1.gender discrepancies in educational sector
2.poor security /lack of protection
3.harassment
4.lack of respect for women
5.Gender Discrimination in the Workplace
6. Prejudices and bias against women
7.domestic voilence against women
8.dowery
9.other social problems(watta satta marriages, vani,exclusion from inheritence,)

STATUS OF WOMEN ARROUND THE WORLD (why around the world...your topic is Status of women in Pakistan and not outside Pakistan...be stick to the topic)

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WOMEN IN ISLAM
1.what Quran has revealed regarding respect of women?
2. Right of inheritance
3. right of education
4.Right of marriage and( in some circumstances) a woman can initiate a divorce
5.protection of women ( men are protector of women)
This section of Islam is totally irrelevant...

CAUSES OF WOMEN ABUSE / HARDSHIP IN PAKISTAN
1.illiteracy
2.Cultural restrictions
3.women's dependence on men
4.Male Dominance Over Women
5.conservativeness and feudalism
6. poverty
7.negligence of Governament
8.absence of law and orders regarding women security
9..wrong presentation of islamic rules and laws

SUGGESTION FOR BETTERMENT OF WOMEN
1.Emphasis on Women Education
2.Gender equality
3.Confer basic legal rights
4.policy making in this regard
5.consider them dignified and respectable/ impart them dignity and respect
6.Protection of Women from Domestic Violence
7.bills passed by Governament
8.women protection act
9. legislation against social customs and prejudices

CONCLUSION


INTRODUCTION
we have seen phenomenal changes take place(erase it) across the world in recent decades,but the status and fate of women, who have been so badly treated through the centuries in almost all cultures, hasn’t changed much.Pakistan is an Islamic nation.Women in Pakistan remain at the bottom of the socio-economic ladder, and endure both physical and mental hardships at the hands of men due to social and cultural norms.In pakistan women are unfairly traeted.Education is the right of every human but unfortunately in Pakistan women are still deprived of education.
“You educate a man; you educate a man. You educate a woman; you educate a generation.” Brigham young
Women are treated as animals; they have no authority to handle their own matters.Male dominated society will be found everywhere in the world where women have to live on the mercy of men.Despite the universal protection of Islam and the rights given by the constitution of Pakistan, women are the(no need of article here) being abused by some atrocious elements of our society. Karo-Kari,Swara and Vaani are such kind of heinous(remove it) crimes that are deeply upheld by the stone-age minded people.The women in pakistan do not possess their due rights given by islam, constitution and law.the only need is to wake up pakistani people for protection of women rights.
my humble request to pointout shortcomings and other mistakes....
Your views are reasonable, but unfortunately your introduction is not integrated. Sentence structure needs improvement; and transitional words and clarity is badly missing. Try to connect one sentence with the other...
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