Originally Posted by shakeel ghori

Status of Women in Pakistan



Outline..


1-Introduction
a,, living a miserable life.
b,, gender-based discrimination is high.
c,, comparison with other countries' woman.
d,, woman empowerment.

2-Woman's status in Pakistan.
a,, low education rate.
b,, marginalized group.
c,, killed for honor.
d,, injustices against woman.
e,, less protected.
f,, stereotypes against woman.
g,, woman harassment
h,, role of woman in development.

3-Women in Islam
a,, Islam encourages woman's education.
b,, provides them fundamental rights.
c,, economic and social security.
d,, rejects all kinds of discrimination against woman.
e,,women before Islam.

4-Causes of women persecution in Pakistan.
a,, stereotypes against woman and man-chauvanism..
b,, Loopholes in the procedural aspects of law.
c,, Illiteracy.
d,, women economic and social dependence on men.
e,, feudalism and political interventions.
f,, Misinterpretation of Islamic shariah

5-Remedies for reforming the women conditions.
a,, Improving the education of woman.
b,, making them more independent.
c,, legislating laws on woman security.
d,, stern actions against those who make violence against woman.
e,, clear interpretation of sharia.
f,, removing stereotypes by educating people correctly.
g,, awareness campaign.
h,, encouraging women contribution in national services.

6-Conclusion


Introduction
The status of woman in Pakistan is low and she is living a miserable life. The incidents of violence against women in Pakistan are the matter of routine. The killing of woman for honor, acid throwing, keeping them uneducated and denying their fundamental rights are the common practices in our society. The gender-based discrimination is on high. It is undeniable fact that the women are being persecuted in many areas of country on account of their gender. Though the process of providing fundamental rights to woman and women empowerment is an on going process in other countries also, yet they have progressed a lot on this front. We are lagging behind in this regard. The woman is not encouraged to take part in progressive activities, rather they are persecuted and subjugated. The only way to get rid of such problems is woman empowerment and enacting and implementing more pragmatic and pro-women laws to ensure their security and prosperity. Hopefully, we are moving forward in this regard, yet the progress is very slow, and the evidence of this fact are the violence which are taking place against woman. They are multifarious. There is a dire need of taking all social realities into account and every kind of discrimination which is hampering the progress of country in general and of women in particular should urgently be addressed. Indeed, onus of doing so falls on the shoulder of those who have authority and responsibility of making things better. If really dedicated, sincere, and progressive steps are taken; we will be able to have a country where people will have opportunities and rights on the basis of their abilities and competence, not gender.

Originally Posted by Nosheen Bukhari

Excellent attempt...You have discussed almost every aspect conceirng the women's status in Pakistan and in Islam as well...
In introduction you compared the Pakistani women with other countries' women..Can we include the comparison of women living in rural and urban areas within in Pakistan?

Originally Posted by shakeel ghori

Status of Women in Pakistan



Outline..


1-Introduction
a,, living a miserable life.
b,, gender-based discrimination is high.
c,, comparison with other countries' woman.
d,, woman empowerment.

Originally Posted by mehjabeen karim

I also want to join in essay practice but how i start to write essay?

Originally Posted by sidra naveed

INTRODUCTION

You need to include two heading after Introducion:
Breif History
Rights of Women in Pakistan(as per the constitution)
WOMEN STATUS IN PAKISTAN
1.gender discrepancies in educational sector
2.poor security /lack of protection
3.harassment
4.lack of respect for women
5.Gender Discrimination in the Workplace
6. Prejudices and bias against women
7.domestic voilence against women
8.dowery
9.other social problems(watta satta marriages, vani,exclusion from inheritence,)

STATUS OF WOMEN ARROUND THE WORLD (why around the world...your topic is Status of women in Pakistan and not outside Pakistan...be stick to the topic)

This section of Islam is totally irrelevant...

CAUSES OF WOMEN ABUSE / HARDSHIP IN PAKISTAN
1.illiteracy
2.Cultural restrictions
3.women's dependence on men
4.Male Dominance Over Women
5.conservativeness and feudalism
6. poverty
7.negligence of Governament
8.absence of law and orders regarding women security
9..wrong presentation of islamic rules and laws

SUGGESTION FOR BETTERMENT OF WOMEN
1.Emphasis on Women Education
2.Gender equality
3.Confer basic legal rights
4.policy making in this regard
5.consider them dignified and respectable/ impart them dignity and respect
6.Protection of Women from Domestic Violence
7.bills passed by Governament
8.women protection act
9. legislation against social customs and prejudices

CONCLUSION


INTRODUCTION
we have seen phenomenal changes take place(erase it) across the world in recent decades,but the status and fate of women, who have been so badly treated through the centuries in almost all cultures, hasn’t changed much.Pakistan is an Islamic nation.Women in Pakistan remain at the bottom of the socio-economic ladder, and endure both physical and mental hardships at the hands of men due to social and cultural norms.In pakistan women are unfairly traeted.Education is the right of every human but unfortunately in Pakistan women are still deprived of education.
“You educate a man; you educate a man. You educate a woman; you educate a generation.” Brigham young
Women are treated as animals; they have no authority to handle their own matters.Male dominated society will be found everywhere in the world where women have to live on the mercy of men.Despite the universal protection of Islam and the rights given by the constitution of Pakistan, women are the(no need of article here) being abused by some atrocious elements of our society. Karo-Kari,Swara and Vaani are such kind of heinous(remove it) crimes that are deeply upheld by the stone-age minded people.The women in pakistan do not possess their due rights given by islam, constitution and law.the only need is to wake up pakistani people for protection of women rights.
my humble request to pointout shortcomings and other mistakes....

Originally Posted by Ahmed Faisal

Shakeel your attempt is commendable. However, as you know there is always room for more improvements. I would like to suggest some modifications...



IF you are discussing a,b,c,d points under introduction, so you need not write them over here. Secondly you should give a brief history of status of women right after you introduction.



One should write catchy and comprehensible words in one's outline. I would like to add some more and important points such as:
(a) Domestic Violence
(b) Dowry abuse
(c) Acid Throwing
(d) Head and eyebrow shaving
(e) Honour Killing
(f) Vani
(g) Watta-Satta
(h) Marriage with Quran
(i) Sexual Violence
(j) Sex Ration
(k) Trafficking
(l) Health Indicators



No need to add Islamic injunctions here as examiner asks you to write the status of Pakistani women and not women in Islam. one should remain stick to the point. however, you can write some of these points in your suggestion section.



I would to like to write my points and their wording...
(a) Lack of Education
(b) Poverty
(c) Lack of Implementation of Established laws
(d) Dowry system
(e) Misconception about Islamic teachings
(f) Patriarchal Society
(g) Role of Media
(h) Lack of Women’s Empowerment
(i) Role of Police




need some improvements...




Your Introduction is GOOD, but you can make it more and more interesting. As sometimes your whole essay is judged on the basis of your Introduction. you can borrow your introduction from a good article, magazine or any other source.... let us examine my Introduction:


Woman is one of the best creatures of the universe. She has been equally endowed with in terms of intellect, prudence and rights as man has been. The state of woman in Pakistan as compared to man is awfully miserable. There are many forms of domestic violence against women ranging from psychological abuse in the form of controlling behaviour, economic abuse or pressures and social isolation; physical in the form of torturing, beating or slapping, and sexual abuse in the form of forced sexual intercourse. The traditional, behavioral and social norms that are often prevalent in an Islamic state as Pakistan, creates more difficulties for women. The prevailing systems of Purdah and Izzat are misused to push the social isolation of women and thus, women are more confined to their homes. Furthermore, in Pakistan majority of women consider the behaviour and actions of men in societies as inherited normal actions which really make them more vulnerable to any type of abuse in their home. Other prominent points for domestic violence in the Pakistani culture are societal pressures, imbalance of power between men and women which keeps women as followers of those rules and regulations of society and defiance to follow those rules leads to penalties like acid throwing, honour killings etc.

Overall your attempt is plausible...

Originally Posted by sidra naveed

INTRODUCTION

WOMEN STATUS IN PAKISTAN
1.gender discrepancies in educational sector
2.poor security /lack of protection
3.harassment
4.lack of respect for women
5.Gender Discrimination in the Workplace
6. Prejudices and bias against women
7.domestic voilence against women
8.dowery
9.other social problems(watta satta marriages, vani,exclusion from inheritence,)

STATUS OF WOMEN ARROUND THE WORLD

WOMEN IN ISLAM
1.what Quran has revealed regarding respect of women?
2. Right of inheritance
3. right of education
4.Right of marriage and( in some circumstances) a woman can initiate a divorce
5.protection of women ( men are protector of women)

CAUSES OF WOMEN ABUSE / HARDSHIP IN PAKISTAN
1.illiteracy
2.Cultural restrictions
3.women's dependence on men
4.Male Dominance Over Women
5.conservativeness and feudalism
6. poverty
7.negligence of Governament
8.absence of law and orders regarding women security
9..wrong presentation of islamic rules and laws

SUGGESTION FOR BETTERMENT OF WOMEN
1.Emphasis on Women Education
2.Gender equality
3.Confer basic legal rights
4.policy making in this regard
5.consider them dignified and respectable/ impart them dignity and respect
6.Protection of Women from Domestic Violence
7.bills passed by Governament
8.women protection act
9. legislation against social customs and prejudices

CONCLUSION


INTRODUCTION
we have seen phenomenal changes take place across the world in recent decades,but the status and fate of women, who have been so badly treated through the centuries in almost all cultures, hasn’t changed much.Pakistan is an Islamic nation.Women in Pakistan remain at the bottom of the socio-economic ladder, and endure both physical and mental hardships at the hands of men due to social and cultural norms.In pakistan women are unfairly traeted.Education is the right of every human but unfortunately in Pakistan women are still deprived of education.
“You educate a man; you educate a man. You educate a woman; you educate a generation.” Brigham young
Women are treated as animals; they have no authority to handle their own matters.Male dominated society will be found everywhere in the world where women have to live on the mercy of men.Despite the universal protection of Islam and the rights given by the constitution of Pakistan, women are the being abused by some atrocious elements of our society. Karo-Kari,Swara and Vaani are such kind of heinous crimes that are deeply upheld by the stone-age minded people.The women in pakistan do not possess their due rights given by islam, constitution and law.the only need is to wake up pakistani people for protection of women rights.

my humble request to pointout shortcomings and other mistakes....

Originally Posted by Ahmed Faisal

You can not write essay at once, first you should learn how to write an essay i.e rules to write an Essay. Secondly, make it a habit to write a paragraph on any issue on daily basis and get it checked by a good English teacher. Third, Dawn is a bible of CSS, so at least read opinion and editorial page and try to make a precis of any one editorial you read.

Originally Posted by shakeel ghori

Status of Women in Pakistan



Outline..


1-Introduction
a,, living a miserable life.
b,, gender-based discrimination is high.
c,, comparison with other countries' woman.
d,, woman empowerment.

2-Woman's status in Pakistan.
a,, low education rate.
b,, marginalized group.
c,, killed for honor.
d,, injustices against woman.
e,, less protected.
f,, stereotypes against woman.
g,, woman harassment
h,, role of woman in development.

3-Women in Islam
a,, Islam encourages woman's education.
b,, provides them fundamental rights.
c,, economic and social security.
d,, rejects all kinds of discrimination against woman.
e,,women before Islam.

4-Causes of women persecution in Pakistan.
a,, stereotypes against woman and man-chauvanism..
b,, Loopholes in the procedural aspects of law.
c,, Illiteracy.
d,, women economic and social dependence on men.
e,, feudalism and political interventions.
f,, Misinterpretation of Islamic shariah

5-Remedies for reforming the women conditions.
a,, Improving the education of woman.
b,, making them more independent.
c,, legislating laws on woman security.
d,, stern actions against those who make violence against woman.
e,, clear interpretation of sharia.
f,, removing stereotypes by educating people correctly.
g,, awareness campaign.
h,, encouraging women contribution in national services.

6-Conclusion


Introduction
The status of woman in Pakistan is low and she is living a miserable life. The incidents of violence against women in Pakistan are the matter of routine. The killing of woman for honor, acid throwing, keeping them uneducated and denying their fundamental rights are the common practices in our society. The gender-based discrimination is on high. It is undeniable fact that the women are being persecuted in many areas of country on account of their gender. Though the process of providing fundamental rights to woman and women empowerment is an on going process in other countries also, yet they have progressed a lot on this front. We are lagging behind in this regard. The woman is not encouraged to take part in progressive activities, rather they are persecuted and subjugated. The only way to get rid of such problems is woman empowerment and enacting and implementing more pragmatic and pro-women laws to ensure their security and prosperity. Hopefully, we are moving forward in this regard, yet the progress is very slow, and the evidence of this fact are the violence which are taking place against woman. They are multifarious. There is a dire need of taking all social realities into account and every kind of discrimination which is hampering the progress of country in general and of women in particular should urgently be addressed. Indeed, onus of doing so falls on the shoulder of those who have authority and responsibility of making things better. If really dedicated, sincere, and progressive steps are taken; we will be able to have a country where people will have opportunities and rights on the basis of their abilities and competence, not gender.