Originally Posted by sadafnoorelahi

dear, i think watever you wrote is not much relevant with the stated topic.as in the later part of the paragraph,there has been a shift from computers to technology.in addition,i felt certain grammatical errors are there.the beginning of paragraph is quite well written, but the last part is very carelessly attempted.you forgot to use commas after suddenly, and before but. morover,i have heard that one should attempt in paragraph with words like "i,you ,me etc" but i am not sure if that is a rule or not.