Originally Posted by SPRR

@amannan

Pakistan, defense budget vs Education budget
Pakistan - A comparison of the Defense and Education Budgets.

Our Pakistan is going backward acutely, the reason is the low education standard.
A major reason contributing to the decline of our beautiful Pakistan is the low standard of education.

One can have a look at the new budget of 2013-2014 and it’s abstruse to elucidate Government strategies.
The latest budget of the year 2013-2014 highlights the governments abstruse strategy.
NOTE: As a reader/examiner, it really destroys us when flowery words are ineffectively used. It is always better to go with words with which you can make more sense.

Our Government is burgeoning the defense budget whereas in juxtaposition the education budget is untouched.

Defense budget has been escalated by 15 % which makes 627.2 billion. In contrary to this, our education budget is increased by only 0.1 % which is startling. In this epoch where every nation is enhancing their Education standard and industrial advancement our demagogues are spending more on Defense, which is of no use. To be frank Government should spend some of the budget for educational purposes, so, our country can increase the standards of education and can emulate with other countries.

COMMENTS:
1. Ineffective usage of learnt vocabulary in some sentences.
2. Sentence structure can be improved.
3. Need to put in more facts to make the argument credible.

All the best.
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