@fazal.....first of all,its not exactly what you have written in your essay.
Secondly,the material presented in your essay deserves another title...which would be 'condition of women in pakistan'....most of the people including you have not addressed the word 'myth'.....maker wanna ask 'it is believed both genders are equal but in reality they are not equal in pakistan or somewhere else'.
This is what my experience says...some folks ll surely have different opinions.
Regards.

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