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Originally Posted by abbas khan 119
Sir, i have to ask that how much an essay is penalised for irrelevant material if the question has been completely answered.
I wrote my essay on women sportspersons as the new ambassador of soft image of pak. My stand on this was: women's participation in sports is more or less the extreme form of liberty which arises out of the socio-politico-economic rights that have been given to them. It, thus, reflects the gender equality in a society. I also mentioned in essay that women can participate in sports only if they are entitled to free will. I answered the question completely, but then shifted on problems of women sportspersons. I tried to correlate them by writing in last that the problems of women persons should be resolved so that a soft image of pak can further be projected. I am, however, not satisfied with my essay.
Kindly analyse it and give ur invaluable suggestions so that i can avoid this mistake in future.
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Sorry brother i saw your query late. Well I am not an English professor or something but while preparing for CSS i came across this one tip. let me put in simple words.
As far i can recall, the topic was: The women sportsperson are the new ambassadors for promoting soft image of Pakistan.
I don't know how you approached it, but the stress should be on promotion of soft image (like whats a soft image? what is Pakistan's image abroad? how can the women sportspersons improve it? and the of course the SWOT (strengths, weaknesses, opportunities and threats) to women sportspersons).
Take any essay topic and underline the important words in it:
Can
women be
equal to men in
Pakistan? Discuss only equality in the context of Pakistan. Define equality and highlight how you want to discuss it.
What are the
socio-economic securities for women in
Islam.
The women
sportspersons are the new
ambassadors for promoting
soft-image of
Pakistan
The essay should always revolve around the main points and the other examples can be given to support your arguments.
i hope I am clear enough on this.
Sorry.. to completely answer your query. Remember it is easy to explain a topic in 50,000 words than in 500 words. secondly, the irrelevant material may drown your relevant points. During the exam you may never know that you are venturing away from the main topic. So one should try to be concise and relevant. It will also reduce the grammatical and spelling mistakes
