Wednesday, December 14, 2005
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assalamOalaikuM
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Originally Posted by TiDus
Naakaam hasratoon kay siwa kuch naheen raha
dunya may aab dukhoon kay siwa kuch naheen raha
dunyaa meN ab duKhoN ke siwaa kuCh naheeN rahaa-very nice-
Aek umar hogaye hay kay dil ki kitaab main
kuch khushk patiyoon kay siwa kuch naheen raha
aik u'mr ho ga.ee hay keh dil ki kitaab meN
kuCh khushk pattiyoN ke siwaa kuCh naheeN rahaa
Yaadain kuch istarah say sima-aat pay cha gayeen
pichlee rifakatoon kay siwa kuch naheen raha
sima-aat...? ,,is it samaa.a't(sense of hearing)?if it is, then it looks odd here ,as how can be memories dominant on sense of hearing ?
Lub see liyee tu apnay he kamray may yoon laga
khamoosh aaeenoon kay siwa kuch naheen raha
kyaa baat hai ? very nice
Jazbay tamaam kho gaye lamhoon ki dhool main
aab dil may dharkanoon kay siwa kuch naheen raha
it is also a great thought-
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I have said on the same rhythm during typing as:
jaa to rahaa hay soo-e-Haram :Shah: too magar
dil meN tire butoN ke siwaa kuCh naheeN rahaa
Your contribution was very nice--But two fields were weak 1-pronunciation,2-Roman text (writing urdu in english alphabets) -We shouldn't ignore our language in the love of the language of our ex-masters- Please do write the name of the poet also-
regards
yasir
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