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Originally Posted by mustansar~hussain View Post
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Pakistan has been fighting in the war on terror for the last one and a half decade. Having been a non-NATO ally she has confronted with militancy. Militant groups such as Talibans, Al-Qaida & ISIS have been enemies of our country. According to the militant groups, Pakistan is deemed pro-American and pro-enemy of Muslim-e-Ummah. As a matter of fact, the drone attacks have not only devastated terrorists, but hordes of innocent people have been killed. It has destabilized the whole South Asia and world politics.

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Please do not incorporate "red colour", as per forum policy, one can not use red colour except moderators.

As a matter of fact, drone attacks have not only devastated terrorists but hordes of innocent people have been killed. It has destabilized the whole South Aisa and world politics. On account of such scenario, the militant groups incite their innocent people in Afghanistan, Pakistan, Egypt and Syria to fight with Pakistan army & western world.
[Irrelevant: Seems like topic is : Role of drone attacks. Or, role of militants.]


On account of such scenario, the militant groups incite their innocent people in Afghanistan, Pakistan, Egypt and Syria to fight with Pakistan army & western world. On the other hand, India, who is one of the biggest enemies of Pakistan, since its inception, is trying her best to destabilize our country. She has been a supportive source to incite Balouch rebellions & militant groups. She does not miss any chance to fuel the fire. Recent attack in France is a case in point that was also depicted to nexus with Pakistan by India. On account of this scenario Pakistan is passing from a very sensitive epic, due to unwanted militancy in Pakistan, many innocent people have been killed

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It is the need of the hour to take considerable steps to root out terrorism from Pakistan
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Yes, the drone attack is also a part of militancy in Pakistan.


Pakistan's front line role in war on terror & confrontation with militancy

Pakistan has been fighting in the war on terror for the last one and a half decade. Having been non-NATO ally she has confronted with militancy. Militant groups such as Talibans, Al-Qaida & ISIS have been enemies of our country. According to the militant groups, the land of pure people is deemed pro-American and pro-enemy of Muslim-e-ummah. As a matter of fact, the drone attacks not only have killed terrorists but also hoards of innocent people have been killed. It has destabilized the whole South Aisa and world politics. On account of such scenario, the militant groups incite their innocent people in Afghanistan, Pakistan, Egypt and Syria to fight with Pakistan army & western world. On the other hand, India, who is one of the biggest enemies of Pakistan, since its inception, is trying her best to destabilize our country. She has been a supportive source to incite Balouch rebellions & militant groups. She does not miss any chance to add fuel to the fire. Recent attack in France is a case in point that was also depicted to nexus with Pakistan by India. Because of prevailing circumstances, Pakistan is passing through a very sensitive episode, due to unwanted militancy in our country; many innocent people have been killed. In addition to that, terrorism has adversely affected our country greater in intensity and larger in scale. It is the need of the hour to take considerable steps to root out terrorism from Pakistan. Although it is a global problem, it can be eliminated with the improvement of socioeconomic and political stability.

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