Dear Seniors and fellows please assess the outlines of my essay that i attempted in CS-16

Crisis of good governance in Pakistan : Need for reforms and institutional building
1. Introduction
2. Thesis statement :Pakistan is mired in severe crisis of governance. Corruption, economic meltdown,political instability, terrorism, low public services,poverty, all these factors demonstrating that Pakistan is projecting a picture of extreme poor governance at all fronts.Therefore, Pakistan is in urgent need for reforms and strengthening of institutions for making Pakistan prosperous and developed country.
3.State of governance in Pakistan
a. No rule of Law
b. Absence of independent judiciary
c. Rampant Corruption
d. Low public services
e. Absence of meritocracy
f. Frail administrative capacity
g. Decay of institutions
h. Crippled economy
i. Clash among institutions
j. Illiteracy
k. Political instability
l. Extreme poverty
m. Inactive civil society
n. Inconsistency in policy making
4.How to improve governance and institutional building in Pakistan
a. Ensuring Sound Public administration
b. Revamping Criminal Justice System
c. Introducing Local government system
d. Undertake Civil Service reforms
e. Supremacy of Constitution and law
f. Active and vibrant civil society
g. Strengthening of institutions
h. Introducing e-Governance
i. Tackling Corruption
j. Merit Based appointments
k. Robust mechanism of accountability
l. Public participation in all decision making process
m. Free and uniform education system
n. Ensuring freedom of speech
o. Consistency in policy making process
p. Strong mechanism of policy implementation
q. Invest in basic human need
r. Land reforms
5.Conclusion