Dear Seniors and fellows please assess the outlines of my essay that i attempted in CS-16

Crisis of good governance in Pakistan : Need for reforms and institutional building
1. Introduction
2. Thesis statement :Pakistan is mired in severe crisis of governance. Corruption, economic meltdown,political instability, terrorism, low public services,poverty, all these factors demonstrating that Pakistan is projecting a picture of extreme poor governance at all fronts.Therefore, Pakistan is in urgent need for reforms and strengthening of institutions for making Pakistan prosperous and developed country.
3.State of governance in Pakistan
a. No rule of Law
b. Absence of independent judiciary
c. Rampant Corruption
d. Low public services
e. Absence of meritocracy
f. Frail administrative capacity
g. Decay of institutions
h. Crippled economy
i. Clash among institutions
j. Illiteracy
k. Political instability
l. Extreme poverty
m. Inactive civil society
n. Inconsistency in policy making
4.How to improve governance and institutional building in Pakistan
a. Ensuring Sound Public administration
b. Revamping Criminal Justice System
c. Introducing Local government system
d. Undertake Civil Service reforms
e. Supremacy of Constitution and law
f. Active and vibrant civil society
g. Strengthening of institutions
h. Introducing e-Governance
i. Tackling Corruption
j. Merit Based appointments
k. Robust mechanism of accountability
l. Public participation in all decision making process
m. Free and uniform education system
n. Ensuring freedom of speech
o. Consistency in policy making process
p. Strong mechanism of policy implementation
q. Invest in basic human need
r. Land reforms
5.Conclusion

Seniors please assess my outlines. thnks

nice one

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Well your data is up to the mark. But remember following things.
1. Create sections in your outline. Do not write so many sub headings under main heading.
2. Always use chronological order. Write important things first and then move in descending order.
3. Do not mess up the data. Arrange in a logical way.
4. Use 'least' instead of NO.
5. Use ABJECT POVERTY instead of extreme poverty.
6. You can write on institution building separately as well.
Pay much focus on above mentioned points( 1+2 especially).

Thanks dear for such a detailed assessment and points mentioned by you are equally important. i will work upon these points.

All these factors demonstrate that Pakistan faces serious crisis of governance.

How does it sound dear Bukhari?

Furthermore, your outline has many subheadings. They can be sub divided in to Political, legal, administrative reforms.

I think absence of 'independent judiciary' sounds derogatory. You can use " lack of speedy justice" or something else to convey the pitfalls in Legal System of Pakistan.

Best wishes for you.

Best wishes for you.[/QUOTE]
First of all Thanx Ada Umar for your best wishes for me.

[QUOTE=umair jarwar;950897]All these factors demonstrate that Pakistan faces serious crisis of governance.

How does it sound dear Bukhari?

All these factors are demonstrating that Pakistan is representing a grim picture of poor governance at all fronts.... Dear, all factors mentioned in thesis statement such as rampant corruption, economic meltdown, low public services, terrorism etc describe poor governance in Pakistan. What are characteristics of good governance? Good governance is characterized by factors such as Public Participation, Rule of law, Transparency,
accountability, Strategic vision and effective and efficient bureaucracy.

Furthermore, your outline has many subheadings. They can be sub divided in to Political, legal, administrative reforms.

Dear, i totally agree with you here. It had been much better if i would have arranged these points into various subheadings as mentioned by you.