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What we call progress is Largely Deceptive


According to this statement what one says progress is Deceptive. The word progress means moving from down to up. A country can make progress socially, politically and Economically.

In Developed countries they provide such opportunities to their people so that they could live a comfortable life. Moreover, in Developed countries there is a better Education system and after one completes his education he gets a job easily because their product and service sector is developed and it provides better employment opportunities to their country’s people. Moreover, due to the revolution of Transport and Communication system it becomes easy and cheap for one developed country to facilitate other country. Research is one of the reason due to which developed countries have made progress. Through research Developed countries have discovered many laws and invented many things. Today such facilities are available for one, which one has never thought of before. But those facilities are limited to only Developed countries only. Whereas, the people who are living in Developing countries have no food to eat. The employment rate is very low. Moreover, the prices of goods, which imported from foreign country, are so costly that a middle class man cannot afford to pay. Whereas, one of the problem of Developing countries is there is no political stability; due to which every new Government in the beginning makes promises but fail to give desired performance.

So the real progress would be when not only Developed countries but also the Developing country would stand as equal in Economical and Technological resources.

You have well written the expansion. You paragraph gives an insight, into some knowledgeable reading, correct grammar and good flow of words.

I have not practiced expansion much as yet, but from the top, I found certain areas where you can improve.

Such as very simple things like 'developed' country, is not spelled with a capital D. It is a common now, and if you want to emphasize on a particular work you may write it in inverted commas but don't put a Capital unless its a proper noun.

Rest is all good.

I will try to give my shot below

While one reading this expansion,couldn't easily get the theme "deception".. How one can call "Progress... largely a Deception"... Where deception lies in progress????while just comparing the developing and developed counties in terms of "Opportunities"...

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