Kindly Check my expansion
 

[B][U][CENTER]THE NEARER THE CHURCH THE FARTHER FROM GOD[/CENTER][/U][/B]

It is not only to bow down before the God. It is not only to spend days and nights in the church. It is not only about the worship. It is about a love, a pure everlasting love that makes a bond between a man and his God. If the heart of a worshipper is without love than his God is very far from him. All of his worship is in vain. Love is the only essence of life that ties a man with his God. When a true love exists in the heart of a man, then he can find his God in his heart, God lives in the hearts full of love. A heart full of love can easily pass the test of life. A lackluster heart without love cannot pass the test of life as Moulana Rumi says,”Love is from the infinite and will remain until eternity. The seeker of love escapes the chains of birth and death. Tomorrow when resurrection comes, the heart that is not in love will fail the test.”
To be a lover is far better than to be scheduled worshiper. Satan was a worshipper not a lover. God didn’t exist in his heart. All of his deification was remain futile.
Those who believe in love they do not fear God but Love God. Love is the central doctrine for them. Their religion based on love as muhiyeddin Ibn-e-Arabi says, “Hubbi deeni wa shariati.” i.e. Love is my religion and my shariat.
It is not only for Christians but for Muslims, Hindus and all other religions as well. The nearer the mosque the farther from Allah, the nearer the temple the farther from Eishwar etc. All the religions teach importance of love, without true love one cannot achieve anything in this life.

Dear all Kindly check my expansion and point out mistakes.

No army can withstand the strength of an idea whose time has come.

Society is not a stagnant entity. It is always in a process of change. Whether this change is rapid or lethargic it always goes on. With the development in modes of living and technology, the existing values and norms are substituted with the modern ones to make abreast with the changing world. Hence the people cannot be restrained to adopt new modes or customs when they become necessary. It is said that, " change is inevitable". So, the world is always in a pace of change. Development in one quarter of the world has its impact on the others. The technological advancement of the west has transformed the whole world into global village. The western culture has penetrated deeply in all societies. Not any power could halt this process whether it is hardliner Iranian government or conservative Chinese communist party. When the conditions are ripe for any idea to be accepted on the wide scale then it cannot be dumped even with the most powerful force of the world. When the Middle east citizens realized that they should have democracies in their countries, the strong military power of dictators could not stop their way. Now most of them has succeeded in establishing democratic governing systems in their states. Karl Marx presented his ideas of communism when the significant number of workers were facing the drastic financial conditions. In Russia, not any power could withstand against it. Thus we can see through these instances that new and innovative ideas that suit the most with prevailing conditions of society can never be restrained to adopt by the masses.

Please all members check it critically and let me know my mistakes.

Truth is Beauty, Beauty Truth...

These lines were used by the great poet, John Keats. He is of the view that the beauty which is the most desirable thing in this world lies in truth. So, the truth, in whatever form it exists, is beautiful. It is not just the appearance of a thing that makes it beautiful but also its impacts on human life and the whole universe. As the truth performs always constructive services preventing degradation and destruction so it possesses beauty. The existence of god is truth. He is the creator and savior of this universe. So, He is beautiful. He himself conveys this message in His divine book, " Allah is beautiful and loves beauty". While, the beauty which He likes, is the truth that lies in His creatures' heart. It is the truth behind one's actions that make them assertive before god. This truth makes things beautiful to whatever field they belong. It is the truth in any piece of art that makes it spellbinding. The truth in singer's vocal makes his song heart touching. The truth in a painter's thoughts makes his colors alive. In the same way it is truth in anybody's heart that makes him honest and sincere to others. It is the truth behind any worker's attempts that brings success for him. It is the truth in the nature that makes it beautiful and bewitching for us. We cannot find anything beautiful which is devoid of truth. Thus these two characters are the complements of each other. The poet has rightly intermingled them.



please please all fellows check it and point out my mistakes.

[QUOTE=usman khalid;451840]Very well done Zuhaib! However, what I would suggest is to reduce the use of quotations because expansion is supposed to be around 250-300 words and it cannot accomodate around 60-70 words of quotations only. At most, 2 quotations and 2 examples to support the topic or your arguments should be enough.[/QUOTE]


Dear usman,

:nono the use of quotations is depend on how long the para is. The use of multiple quotes/examples makes a para easy to understand.




syed

[QUOTE=nabilach;477904]@ Da Skeptic: V much thanks, you really pinpointed the grave mistakes rather some of these are blunders instead of mistakes:)[/QUOTE]

Pleasure is all mine, dear.. But I am not an authority on the matter.. You must consult and value what other dear members say.. You will always be welcomed to post and discuss your expansions.. Stay blessed..:D

[QUOTE=nabilach;480462]Truth is Beauty, Beauty Truth...

These lines were used by the great poet, John Keats. He is of the view that the beauty which is the most desirable thing in this world lies in truth. So, the truth, in whatever form it exists, is beautiful. It is not just the appearance of a thing that makes it beautiful but also its impacts on human life and the whole universe. As the truth performs always constructive services preventing degradation and destruction so it possesses beauty. The existence of god is truth. He is the creator and savior of this universe. So, He is beautiful. He himself conveys this message in His divine book, " Allah is beautiful and loves beauty". While, the beauty which He likes, is the truth that lies in His creatures' heart. It is the truth behind one's actions that make them assertive before god. This truth makes things beautiful to whatever field they belong. It is the truth in any piece of art that makes it spellbinding. The truth in singer's vocal makes his song heart touching. The truth in a painter's thoughts makes his colors alive. In the same way it is truth in anybody's heart that makes him honest and sincere to others. It is the truth behind any worker's attempts that brings success for him. It is the truth in the nature that makes it beautiful and bewitching for us. We cannot find anything beautiful which is devoid of truth. Thus these two characters are the complements of each other. The poet has rightly intermingled them.



please please all fellows check it and point out my mistakes.[/QUOTE]
Well, a good attempt no doubt.. My knowledge of English Grammar and Language didn't point out any mistake.. And as far as the interpretation of the verse is concerned, every one may have his own interpretation.. I may or may not agree with it.. Keep it up..

[QUOTE=Da Skeptic;480628]Well, a good attempt no doubt.. My knowledge of English Grammar and Language didn't point out any mistake.. And as far as the interpretation of the verse is concerned, every one may have his own interpretation.. I may or may not agree with it.. Keep it up..[/QUOTE]
@ Da Skeptic: bundles of thanks:-)
In fact, the verse was so confusing for me. I could perceive just one meaning from it. I hope in exam i will have some comprehensible proverb.

[QUOTE=nabilach;480755]@ Da Skeptic: bundles of thanks:-)
In fact, the verse was so confusing for me. I could perceive just one meaning from it. I hope in exam i will have some comprehensible proverb.[/QUOTE]

Haha.. We can hope only, and that we do.. Well, there has been much debate over these lines of Keats'. Many writers have extracted many themes and explanations of these lines.. We may have our own, but it must be logical and well supported, so that the examiners bless us with good marks.. ;-)

Here is my first draft on the famous lines of Keats..

[B][CENTER][SIZE="4"]Truth is Beauty, Beauty Truth...[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]

Keats, a great lover of beauty, said these lines in his poem, “Ode on a Grecian Urn”. In these lines, Keats renders truth and beauty alike. It may be called a sort of conclusion that Keats draws out from pondering over the Urn and the picture engraved over it. After pondering over the Urn and the ‘flowery tale’ carved upon it, Keats reaches to the conclusion that the beauty (of the scenes depicted on the Urn) resembles truth.

These lines refer to the importance of Art, that has the capability to give permanence, the quality of truth, to the beautiful objects liable to transition; and thus make them permanent like truth. The artist that has drawn those pictures on the Urn has captured different transitory and momentary scenes of beauty on the Urn; and this ‘unravish’d bride’ and ‘Sylvan Historian’, with its pictures, ‘dost tease us out of thought [B]as doth eternity[/B]’.

Further in the same poem, Keats says addressing the Urn, [B]‘When old age shall this generation waste/Thou shalt remain[/B]’. Again, it shows the permanence of the beauty of the works of Art and thus the beauty (of Art) is permanent as is truth.

Another trait of truth is that it appeals to our spirits far more than anything else. A truth may momentarily be bitter but it is sweet and joyful ultimately. The beauty of the Urn also titillates our senses and penetrates into our souls, e.g. Keats says,
‘ye soft pipes, play on;
[B]Not to the sensual ear, but, more endear'd[/B],
[B]Pipe to the spirit ditties of no tone:[/B]’

Thus, Keats renders beauty and truth alike in the sense that the beauty captured by the eye of Art gives it permanence and this beauty of Art contains an appeal and a stimuli to our senses and soul, just like truth which is also eternal, permanent, joyful and appealing to the spirit.

Word Count: 314

[B]Criticism will not be criticized, rather welcomed.. ;-)[/B]

[QUOTE=Da Skeptic;481017]Here is my first draft on the famous lines of Keats..

[B][CENTER][SIZE="4"]Truth is Beauty, Beauty Truth...[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]

Keats, a great lover of beauty, said these lines in his poem, “Ode on a Grecian Urn”. In these lines, Keats renders truth and beauty alike. It may be called a sort of conclusion that Keats draws out from pondering over the Urn and the picture engraved over it. After pondering over the Urn and the ‘flowery tale’ carved upon it, Keats reaches to the conclusion that the beauty (of the scenes depicted on the Urn) resembles truth.

These lines refer to the importance of Art, that has the capability to give permanence, the quality of truth, to the beautiful objects liable to transition; and thus make them permanent like truth. The artist that has drawn those pictures on the Urn has captured different transitory and momentary scenes of beauty on the Urn; and this ‘unravish’d bride’ and ‘Sylvan Historian’, with its pictures, ‘dost tease us out of thought [B]as doth eternity[/B]’.

Further in the same poem, Keats says addressing the Urn, [B]‘When old age shall this generation waste/Thou shalt remain[/B]’. Again, it shows the permanence of the beauty of the works of Art and thus the beauty (of Art) is permanent as is truth.

Another trait of truth is that it appeals to our spirits far more than anything else. A truth may momentarily be bitter but it is sweet and joyful ultimately. The beauty of the Urn also titillates our senses and penetrates into our souls, e.g. Keats says,
‘ye soft pipes, play on;
[B]Not to the sensual ear, but, more endear'd[/B],
[B]Pipe to the spirit ditties of no tone:[/B]’

Thus, Keats renders beauty and truth alike in the sense that the beauty captured by the eye of Art gives it permanence and this beauty of Art contains an appeal and a stimuli to our senses and soul, just like truth which is also eternal, permanent, joyful and appealing to the spirit.

Word Count: 314

[B]Criticism will not be criticized, rather welcomed.. ;-)[/B][/QUOTE]

[COLOR="SeaGreen"][B]Quite well!

[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE]I found the redundancy of the word KEATS.
[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE] It appeared to me like a summary of the poem.
[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE] You are good at grammar.
[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE] But, it is first draft, I hope, you shall make a good expansion out of it. :)

And, you are doing very well. You are helping and guiding others.
I am busy in preparing for entrance test.
So, I rarely appear and post.
After 14 0ct, I will be free and freed of shackles. ;)
Then, I shall contribute heartily. [/B][/COLOR]

[QUOTE=Da Skeptic;481017]Here is my first draft on the famous lines of Keats..

[B][CENTER][SIZE="4"]Truth is Beauty, Beauty Truth...[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]

Keats, a great lover of beauty, said these lines in his poem, “Ode on a Grecian Urn”. In these lines, Keats renders truth and beauty alike. It may be called a sort of conclusion that Keats draws out from pondering over the Urn and the picture engraved over it. After pondering over the Urn and the ‘flowery tale’ carved upon it, Keats reaches to the conclusion that the beauty (of the scenes depicted on the Urn) resembles truth.

These lines refer to the importance of Art, that has the capability to give permanence, the quality of truth, to the beautiful objects liable to transition; and thus make them permanent like truth. The artist that has drawn those pictures on the Urn has captured different transitory and momentary scenes of beauty on the Urn; and this ‘unravish’d bride’ and ‘Sylvan Historian’, with its pictures, ‘dost tease us out of thought [B]as doth eternity[/B]’.

Further in the same poem, Keats says addressing the Urn, [B]‘When old age shall this generation waste/Thou shalt remain[/B]’. Again, it shows the permanence of the beauty of the works of Art and thus the beauty (of Art) is permanent as is truth.

Another trait of truth is that it appeals to our spirits far more than anything else. A truth may momentarily be bitter but it is sweet and joyful ultimately. The beauty of the Urn also titillates our senses and penetrates into our souls, e.g. Keats says,
‘ye soft pipes, play on;
[B]Not to the sensual ear, but, more endear'd[/B],
[B]Pipe to the spirit ditties of no tone:[/B]’

Thus, Keats renders beauty and truth alike in the sense that the beauty captured by the eye of Art gives it permanence and this beauty of Art contains an appeal and a stimuli to our senses and soul, just like truth which is also eternal, permanent, joyful and appealing to the spirit.

Word Count: 314

[B]Criticism will not be criticized, rather welcomed.. ;-)[/B][/QUOTE]
very well done..!

[QUOTE=zuhaib ahmed;481093][COLOR="SeaGreen"][B]Quite well!

[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE]I found the redundancy of the word KEATS.
[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE] It appeared to me like a summary of the poem.
[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE] You are good at grammar.
[SIZE="4"].[/SIZE] But, it is first draft, I hope, you shall make a good expansion out of it. :)

And, you are doing very well. You are helping and guiding others.
I am busy in preparing for entrance test.
So, I rarely appear and post.
After 14 0ct, I will be free and freed of shackles. ;)
Then, I shall contribute heartily. [/B][/COLOR][/QUOTE]

You are very true in all your comments Zuhaib.. But the thing that I have frequently used the words of Keats and it seems like a summary of the poem, is because of the fact that I wanted to expand the lines according to the poem. People have made a lot of explanations and interpretations of the lines taking them as separate lines from the rest of the poem. Thats why, there have been much controversy and diversity in the interpretations of these lines. I actually wanted to show that these lines are rather connected with the poem firmly, and an effort to draw out an explanation of these lines separating them from the poem will lead to a lot of different and confusing explanations.. I hope you get me..
And very much thanks for your valuable comments..
Awaiting your arrival..

[B][U][SIZE="5"][COLOR="DarkRed"][I]Rich men have no fault”[/I][/COLOR][/SIZE][/U][/B]


Rich or poor both belonged to one`s own society .Sometimes poor get status of Rich man and Wealthy one has to submit towards miserable conditions. Human`s are made up of flesh and blood. They performed good deeds as well as vices and crimes. It is obvious when someone get extra power or wealth above average, got mad for misuse of power and wealth. However, above criteria is not valid in all cases. Life on this planet proceeded on the principle of selflessness. These wealthy esteemed people worked for humankind. So, It is not the wealthy status rather man`s own nature responsible for his fault.


Bill Gates, Abdu’s Sitar Eidehi and Imran khan`s welfare schemes are most recent examples of wealthy people, serving humanity. On the other hand, we have example of Hazrat Bahuddin zikriya Multani(R.A) who contained a lot of wealth .But he used it for humanity. However, history also tells us most of the Rich people misused their wealth .Like Jews, who introduced interest on wealth in Makkah. So man `s own nature is liable to faults, not rich ones.



Human society has suffered a lot due to man`s ambition to get unlimited power and wealth. Richness is not inherited status rather it is ascribed status. It is generalized; rich people do not follow folkways and mores .It is because society has few rich and more poor. Obviously, they will more observe the poor ones .Man `s nature is full of faults, not the richness ascriptions.

[QUOTE]Obviously, they will more observe the poor ones[/QUOTE]

They will observe more the rich people.

'’Self done is well done’’

Expansion of an idea from 2012 CSS paper of Precise and composition


Aristotle said,’ Man is a social animal’’.It implies man is dependent on others. Reliance is good because it bonds the members of particular society. However, it should be restrained for productivity of individuals. It enables oneself to survive in bitter circumstances. So for survival, one will have to tackle the situation under his mind`s control. Moreover, person are able to reproduce innovative ideas, unknown to anyone .Sometimes, it leads towards inventions and discoveries.


Anthropologists point out the significance of Self-effort and creativity has developed civilizations .And parasitic life destroyed their marvels. Historians pin point this theme in its relation to Kings .Those, who managed in miserable environment are the reputed one. Akbar, Richard, Saladin, Mahmud Ghaznavi and The Holy prophet (P.B.U.H) are the world recognized leader .It is just of their self-work and hard work. Therefore, it glorifies the theme of self-work.

All the inventions and discoveries are the hallmark of this criterion. Holy Quran also lights on this theme, describing man earned wages by dint of his hard work is a friend of Allah. Muslim civilization in its culmination worked on the principle of,” Necessity is the mother of invention. So they rationalize laws creating field of ‘’asul’’ or ‘fiqa’ .They Euro-civilization it borrowed the principle of Muslim civilization .Their achievements have made them world greatest power of 19th century.


According to Iqbal,
[B]
Celebrated they were, embracing Islam.
Derogated you are, negating these.[/B]


Last but not the least it is acknowledged self-work is universally known .People are remembered for their countless efforts. Therefore, these people are followed as models.

[QUOTE=SADIA SHAFIQ;484111][B][U][SIZE="5"][COLOR="DarkRed"][I]Rich men have no fault”[/I][/COLOR][/SIZE][/U][/B]


Rich or poor both [COLOR="SeaGreen"]belonged[/COLOR] to one`s [COLOR="seagreen"]own?[/COLOR] society .Sometimes poor get status of Rich man and Wealthy [COLOR="seagreen"]one has to submit[/COLOR] towards miserable conditions. [COLOR="seagreen"]Human`s[/COLOR] are made up of flesh and blood. They [COLOR="seagreen"]performed [/COLOR]good deeds as well as vices and crimes. It is obvious when someone [COLOR="seagreen"]get[/COLOR] extra power or wealth above average, [COLOR="seagreen"]got mad[/COLOR] for misuse of power and wealth. However, above criteria is not valid in all cases. Life on this planet proceeded on the principle of selflessness. These wealthy esteemed people worked for humankind. So, It is not the wealthy status rather man`s own nature responsible for his fault.


Bill Gates, Abdu’s Sitar Eidehi and Imran khan`s welfare schemes are most recent examples of wealthy people, serving humanity. On the other hand, we have example of Hazrat Bahuddin zikriya Multani(R.A) who contained a lot of wealth .But he used it for humanity. However, history also tells us most of the Rich people misused their wealth .Like Jews, who introduced interest on wealth in Makkah. So man `s own nature is liable to faults, not rich ones.



Human society has suffered a lot due to man`s ambition to get unlimited power and wealth. Richness is not inherited status rather it is ascribed status. It is generalized; rich people do not follow folkways and mores .It is because society has [COLOR="seagreen"]few[/COLOR] rich and more poor. Obviously, they will [COLOR="seagreen"]more observe[/COLOR] the poor ones .Man `s nature is full of faults, not the richness ascriptions.[/QUOTE]

[COLOR="seagreen"]
. I have pointed out some mistakes rapidly. Go through, and correct them.
. You could have done better.
. You were good at your point but you could give another aspect of the topic.
. You can understand by this verse:
Jis Ghar Main ammeery ka shajir lagta hai,
un ka her aib humain huner lagta Hai
. What I can say; you could tell that, Ager Ameer gunah keray tu wo huner hai, un ki koee galty nhn, or ager ghareeb keray tu Gunah hai or us k liye e saza hai. You could have caught this aspect of the topic.
. Overall good efforts. Nice ideas. Good examples. Work on grammar.
. You can disagree with me, Sis G! [/COLOR]

[B][U][SIZE="5"][COLOR="DarkRed"][I]Rich men have no fault”[/I][/COLOR][/SIZE][/U][/B]


Rich or poor both are part of society .Sometimes poor get status of Rich man .Contrary to this Rich people have to submit towards miserable conditions. Humans are made up of flesh and blood. They perform good deeds as well as vices and crimes. It is obvious, when someone gets extra power or wealth above average, gets mad for misuse of power and wealth. However, above criteria is not valid in all cases. Life on this planet proceeded on the principle of selflessness. These wealthy esteemed people worked for humankind. So, It is not the wealthy status rather man`s own nature responsible for his fault.


Bill Gates, Abdu’s Sitar Eidehi and Imran khan`s welfare schemes are most recent examples of wealthy people, serving humanity. On the other hand, we have example of Hazrat Bahuddin zikriya Multani(R.A) who contained a lot of wealth .But he used it for humanity. However, history also tells us most of the Rich people misused their wealth .Like Jews, who introduced interest on wealth in Makkah. So man `s own nature is liable to faults, not rich ones.



Human society has suffered a lot due to man`s ambition to get unlimited power and wealth. Richness is not inherited status rather it is ascribed status. It is generalized; rich people do not follow folkways and mores .It is because society has few rich and more poor. Obviously, they will more observe the poor ones [QUOTE]They will observe more the rich people
[/QUOTE].Man `s nature is full of faults, not the richness ascriptions.


few ..stands for negative element and a few stands for positive .It is seen from oxford book .so I mention ''few''.I have tried to correct mistakes.So now see it .

you have well illustrated the theme . But life has two sides . and most of the students will light the heavier one and will criticize on rich people . so ,i tend to tilt from this approach.If it is well -written then no worries . I also agree to your stance .Again ,I ll say life is literature and literature is life .If one has proved the fact ,then it is right.

Thanx for encouraging me ,though younger but good in knowledge .stay blessed and also look the other too

[QUOTE=SADIA SHAFIQ;484490][B][U][SIZE="5"][COLOR="DarkRed"][I]Rich men have no fault”[/I][/COLOR][/SIZE][/U][/B]


Rich or poor both are part of society .Sometimes poor get status of Rich man .Contrary to this Rich people have to submit towards miserable conditions. Humans are made up of flesh and blood. They perform good deeds as well as vices and crimes. It is obvious, when someone gets extra power or wealth above average, gets mad for misuse of power and wealth. However, above criteria is not valid in all cases. Life on this planet proceeded on the principle of selflessness. These wealthy esteemed people worked for humankind. So, It is not the wealthy status rather man`s own nature responsible for his fault.


Bill Gates, Abdu’s Sitar Eidehi and Imran khan`s welfare schemes are most recent examples of wealthy people, serving humanity. On the other hand, we have example of Hazrat Bahuddin zikriya Multani(R.A) who contained a lot of wealth .But he used it for humanity. However, history also tells us most of the Rich people misused their wealth .Like Jews, who introduced interest on wealth in Makkah. So man `s own nature is liable to faults, not rich ones.



Human society has suffered a lot due to man`s ambition to get unlimited power and wealth. Richness is not inherited status rather it is ascribed status. It is generalized; rich people do not follow folkways and mores .It is because society has few rich and more poor. Obviously, they will more observe the poor ones .Man `s nature is full of faults, not the richness ascriptions.


few ..stands for negative element and a few stands for positive .It is seen from oxford book .so I mention ''few''.I have tried to correct mistakes.So now see it .

you have well illustrated the theme . But life has two sides . and most of the students will light the heavier one and will criticize on rich people . so ,i tend to tilt from this approach.If it is well -written then no worries . I also agree to your stance .Again ,I ll say life is literature and literature is life .If one has proved the fact ,then it is right.

Thanx for encouraging me ,though younger but good in knowledge .stay blessed and also look the other too[/QUOTE]

[COLOR="SeaGreen"]Thanks. :)
But, If you had favoured the topic that would have been well enough.
Overall you are good at your point. You can make it.
I do believe. May Allah Bless you, Sis G. [/COLOR]

Golden rule is that there is no golden rule
 

The statement emphasizes the nature of man-made rules. Rules are primarily to pacify and facilitate the concerns of masses but with the passage of time they lose their credibility. Keeping in view the greater interest of public, there is flexibility in the rules to be modified. If any rule allowed to run in the long run, it would become corrupt and creates social disintegration in society. Therefore G.B Shaw has rightly said that golden rule is that there is no golden rule. For instance, the apartheid policy of South Africa had created many problems for black people. They were not allowed to enter public places, restaurants and educational institutions. But with the passage of time the black people raised their voice and demand for fair justice and equality. They forced South African government to alter the rules for the black people and in the end, South African government modify the rules and polices. It restores policy of equal treatment of citizen irrespective of color, race. Similarly one have witnessed the foreign policy of US in the cold war era was based of curtailment of Communism in the Europe and Asia. But after the disintegration of Soviet Union, the policy of US has change. Now US is harping on the menace of terrorism and nuclear proliferation. Similarly the constitution of any state is also flexible and there is possibility to modify its shape in the order to pacify the demands of human rights, provincial autonomy and other petty issues. Hence there is no rule which one may call golden rule in the world. All rules are made to facilitate human beings and with passage of time they lose their glory. Therefore they need change.

Rich men have no fault
 

The world has been experiencing evolution since ever. In stone age, man was scare of even his fellow. Later they started to live together leading towards great civilizations. There always have been morals practiced. These morals has also undergone drastic change. In past, scholars and educated people deserved the respect and fame within the community. Rich man, including Kings adored them. But with the passage of time, things got reverse turn. Now in this materialistic era, a man having much money is supposed to be the superior. They are considered to be trend setters. If they wear torn clothes, it is named as a "style". But if the same is practiced by a poor, they get the tag of "contemptible". A rich man does not have any fear of any punishment against committing a crime. On the other hand a mediocre has to suffer from severe consequences for being involved in even less objectionable deed.
This dual standard and hypocrisy has been causing hate among the Haves and Have nots'. Unrest can be observed in the societies ending in the insurgencies.

Please seniors see my expansion
 

Speech is the gift of all, but thoughts of few
God has bestowed everyone with the gift of speech. All human beings equally enjoy the freedom of speech. They are unrestricted to express their views, opinions and thoughts. Some are very talkative and usually indulge into rhetoric claims but few have a sense to express their views in brief and commendable language. Speech is very special gift awarded by God, so one should carefully handle it. A Wiseman thinks many times before saying anything. On the contrary, a foolish person without any sense says something which hurt the feelings of others. Speech should be brief and contains deeply-rooted message. One have witnessed the demagogues usually make long and untiring speeches to impress the masses. They often make an ass of themselves by making silly and ridiculous statement openly in the front of media. They faced the music because they often contradict their statements and policies. A few people are rewarded with the gift of gab by nature. They impress people and they left unerasing words of speech on minds of people. Such people admired by every generation of people. For instance, quaid-e-azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah and King Martin Luther were few of them who had awarded with gift of gab by nature. They attract masses with their sensible thoughts and motivate the masses by fluency of their words. Due to their command over language they have been ideal for everyone. Speech is the most beautiful gift rewarded by nature, people should carefully utilize its services by making their communication précis and thoughtful. But it is open secret that only few can command it as it is difficult for ordinary one to carefully handle the speech.

Plz analyze exapnsion
 

Dear seniors ,
plz critically analyze my expansion

[QUOTE=Erum Qureshi;484888]The world has been experiencing evolution since ever. In stone age, man was scare of even his fellow. Later they started to live together leading towards great civilizations. There always have been morals practiced. These morals has also undergone drastic change. In past, scholars and educated people deserved the respect and fame within the community. Rich man, including Kings adored them. But with the passage of time, things got reverse turn. Now in this materialistic era, a man having much money is supposed to be the superior. They are considered to be trend setters. If they wear torn clothes, it is named as a "style". But if the same is practiced by a poor, they get the tag of "contemptible". A rich man does not have any fear of any punishment against committing a crime. On the other hand a mediocre has to suffer from severe consequences for being involved in even less objectionable deed.
This dual standard and hypocrisy has been causing hate among the Haves and Have nots'. Unrest can be observed in the societies ending in the insurgencies.[/QUOTE]

Well, I found some grammatical mistakes as far as your language and composition is concerned.
Secondly, I couldn't grasp your idea, m sorry to say. I think you deviated from the main theme of the statement.. Kindly give a second thought to your expansion please if you don't mind..
These comments are for improvement not for discouragement.. Take these positive please..

[QUOTE=saggitaurus of karachi;485003]Speech is the gift of all, but thoughts of few
God has bestowed everyone with the gift of speech. All human beings equally enjoy the freedom of speech. They are unrestricted to express their views, opinions and thoughts. Some are very talkative and usually indulge into rhetoric claims but few have a sense to express their views in brief and commendable language. Speech is very special gift awarded by God, so one should carefully handle it. A Wiseman thinks many times before saying anything. On the contrary, a foolish person without any sense says something which hurt the feelings of others. Speech should be brief and contains deeply-rooted message. One have witnessed the demagogues usually make long and untiring speeches to impress the masses. They often make an ass of themselves by making silly and ridiculous statement openly in the front of media. They faced the music because they often contradict their statements and policies. A few people are rewarded with the gift of gab by nature. They impress people and they left unerasing words of speech on minds of people. Such people admired by every generation of people. For instance, quaid-e-azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah and King Martin Luther were few of them who had awarded with gift of gab by nature. They attract masses with their sensible thoughts and motivate the masses by fluency of their words. Due to their command over language they have been ideal for everyone. Speech is the most beautiful gift rewarded by nature, people should carefully utilize its services by making their communication précis and thoughtful. But it is open secret that only few can command it as it is difficult for ordinary one to carefully handle the speech.[/QUOTE]

[B]Good Effort
[/B]
Though I am not senior, but you have make the same mistake which I made in my expansion.It was corrected by Usman Khalid and Zuhaib..... please write it in two or three para's..... not only in single para...

[QUOTE=Da Skeptic;485158]Well, I found some grammatical mistakes as far as your language and composition is concerned.
Secondly, I couldn't grasp your idea, m sorry to say. I think you deviated from the main theme of the statement.. Kindly give a second thought to your expansion please if you don't mind..
These comments are for improvement not for discouragement.. Take these positive please..[/QUOTE]



thnx for the analysis. Kindly highlight the grammatical mistakes. It ll help me

Some corrections have been coloured:

[QUOTE=SADIA SHAFIQ;484111][B][U][SIZE="5"][COLOR="DarkRed"][I]Rich men have no fault”[/I][/COLOR][/SIZE][/U][/B]


Rich or poor both [COLOR="Magenta"]belong[/COLOR] to one`s own society .Sometimes poor get status of Rich man and Wealthy one has to submit towards miserable conditions. [COLOR="Magenta"]Humans[/COLOR] are made up of flesh and blood. They [COLOR="Magenta"]perform[/COLOR] good deeds as well as vices and crimes. It is obvious when someone [COLOR="Magenta"]gets[/COLOR] extra power or wealth above average, [COLOR="Magenta"]gets[/COLOR] mad for misuse of power and wealth. However, above criteria is not valid in all cases. Life on this planet proceeded on the principle of selflessness. These wealthy esteemed people worked for humankind. So, It is not the wealthy status rather man`s own nature responsible for his fault.

(In above para, you have used past tense instead of present in some sentences.)

Bill Gates, Abdu’s Sitar Eidehi and Imran khan`s welfare schemes are most recent examples of wealthy people, serving humanity. On the other hand, we have example of Hazrat Bahuddin zikriya Multani(R.A) who [COLOR="Magenta"]had[/COLOR] a lot of wealth .But he used it for humanity. However, history also tells us most of the Rich people misused their wealth .Like Jews, who introduced interest on wealth in Makkah. So man `s own nature is liable to faults, not rich ones.


Human society has suffered a lot due to man`s ambition to get unlimited power and wealth. Richness is not inherited status rather it is ascribed status. It is generalized; rich people do not follow folkways and mores .It is because society has few rich and more poor. Obviously, they will more observe the poor ones .Man `s nature is full of faults, not the richness ascriptions.[/QUOTE]

(No need to capitalize the first letter of words; rich, poor and wealthy etc.)

[QUOTE=SADIA SHAFIQ;484448]'’Self done is well done’’

Expansion of an idea from 2012 CSS paper of Precise and composition


Aristotle said,’ Man is a social animal’’.It implies man is dependent on others. Reliance is good because it bonds the members of particular society. However, [COLOR="magenta"]it should be restrained for productivity of individuals.[/COLOR] (meaning is not clear) It enables oneself to survive in bitter circumstances. So for survival, one will have to tackle the situation under his mind`s control. Moreover, person are able to reproduce innovative ideas, unknown to anyone .Sometimes, it leads towards inventions and discoveries.


Anthropologists point out the significance of Self-effort and creativity has developed civilizations .[COLOR="Magenta"]And[/COLOR] (a new sentence with 'And'??) parasitic life destroyed their marvels. Historians pin point this theme in its relation to Kings .[COLOR="magenta"]Those[/COLOR](no comma required here) who managed in miserable environment are the reputed [COLOR="Magenta"]ones[/COLOR]. Akbar, Richard, Saladin, Mahmud Ghaznavi [COLOR="Magenta"]and most of all[/COLOR] The Holy prophet (P.B.U.H) are the world recognized [COLOR="Magenta"]leaders[/COLOR] .It is just of their self-work and hard work. Therefore, it glorifies the theme of self-work.

All the inventions and discoveries are the hallmark of this criterion. Holy Quran also lights on this theme, describing [COLOR="Magenta"]the man who earns wages by dint of his hard work as a friend of Allah[/COLOR]. Muslim civilization in its culmination worked on the principle of,” Necessity is the mother of invention. So they rationalize laws creating field of ‘’asul’’ or ‘fiqa’ .They Euro-civilization borrowed the principle of Muslim civilization .Their achievements have made them world greatest power of 19th century.


According to Iqbal,
[B]
Celebrated they were, embracing Islam.
Derogated you are, negating these.[/B]


Last but not the least it is [COLOR="Magenta"]acknowledged self-work is universally known[/COLOR](meaning is not clear) .People are remembered for their countless efforts. Therefore, these people are followed as models.[/QUOTE]

Good! Make sure that you make grammatically correct sentences with proper structure.

[QUOTE=Erum Qureshi;484888]The world has been experiencing evolution since ever. In stone age,[COLOR="Blue"] man[/COLOR] was scare of even his fellow. Later [COLOR="Blue"]they[/COLOR] started to live together leading towards great civilizations. There always have been morals practiced. These morals has also undergone drastic change. In past, scholars and educated people deserved the respect and fame within the community. Rich [COLOR="Blue"]man,[/COLOR] including Kings adored them. But with the passage of time, things got reverse turn. Now in this materialistic era, [COLOR="Blue"]a man[/COLOR] having much money is supposed to be the superior. [COLOR="Blue"]They are[/COLOR] considered to be trend setters. If they wear torn clothes, it is named as a "style". But if the same is practiced by [COLOR="Blue"]a poor[/COLOR], they get the tag of "contemptible". A rich man does not have any fear of any punishment against committing a crime. On the other hand a mediocre has to suffer from severe consequences for being involved in even less objectionable deed.
This dual standard and hypocrisy has been[COLOR="Blue"] causing[/COLOR] hate among the Haves and Have [COLOR="Blue"]nots'[/COLOR]. Unrest can be observed in the societies ending in the insurgencies.[/QUOTE]

In the first highlighted word, u have used a singular noun , man, and in the second sentence you have used a plural pronoun, they.. You have done the same error again in the following sentences..
You should say the poor, not a poor..
No need to put an apostrophe after nots in Have nots.

[QUOTE=Da Skeptic;485489]In the first highlighted word, u have used a singular noun , man, and in the second sentence you have used a plural pronoun, they.. You have done the same error again in the following sentences..
You should say the poor, not a poor..
No need to put an apostrophe after nots in Have nots.[/QUOTE]

thnx...
u r right..i made these blunders...n i think i should write more consciously to avoid such mistakes.
kindly tell me about the length of expansion..means on A4 paper would it enough to write 1 side only?

[QUOTE=Erum Qureshi;485492]thnx...
u r right..i made these blunders...n i think i should write more consciously to avoid such mistakes.
kindly tell me about the length of expansion..means on A4 paper would it enough to write 1 side only?[/QUOTE]

Huzuur, Its length ranges from 250-350 words approximately..

[QUOTE=Erum Qureshi;484888]The world has been experiencing evolution since ever. In stone age, man was scare of even his fellow. Later they started to live together leading towards great civilizations. There always have been morals practiced. These morals has also undergone drastic change. In past, scholars and educated people deserved the respect and fame within the community. Rich man, including Kings adored them. But with the passage of time, things got reverse turn. Now in this materialistic era, a man having much money is supposed to be the superior. They are considered to be trend setters. If they wear torn clothes, it is named as a "style". But if the same is practiced by a poor, they get the tag of "contemptible". A rich man does not have any fear of any punishment against committing a crime. On the other hand a mediocre has to suffer from severe consequences for being involved in even less objectionable deed.
This dual standard and hypocrisy has been causing hate among the Haves and Have nots'. Unrest can be observed in the societies ending in the insurgencies.[/QUOTE]
[COLOR="SeaGreen"][B]
Hints are given and mistakes are sorted out already.
Your words are 181 only.
Expand it little more. Jot it down between 250-300.
And, you can easily write 260 words on A4 page.
Stay Blessed. [/B][/COLOR]

[QUOTE=saggitaurus of karachi;485003]Speech is the gift of all, but thoughts of few
God has bestowed everyone with the gift of speech. All human beings equally enjoy the freedom of speech. They are unrestricted to express their views, opinions and thoughts. Some are very talkative and usually indulge into rhetoric claims but few have a sense to express their views in brief and commendable language. Speech is very special gift awarded by God, so one should carefully handle it. A Wiseman thinks many times before saying anything. On the contrary, a foolish person without any sense says something which [COLOR="Blue"] 1 hurt[/COLOR] the feelings of others. Speech should be brief and [COLOR="Blue"]2 contains[/COLOR] deeply-rooted message. One have witnessed the demagogues usually make long and untiring speeches to impress the masses. They often make an ass of themselves by making silly and ridiculous [COLOR="Blue"]3 statement[/COLOR] openly in the front of media. They [COLOR="Blue"]4 faced[/COLOR] the music because they often contradict their statements and policies. A few people are rewarded with the [COLOR="Blue"]5 gift of gab[/COLOR] by nature. They impress people and they left unerasing words of speech on minds of people. Such [COLOR="Blue"]6 people admired[/COLOR] by every generation of people. For instance, quaid-e-azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah and King Martin Luther were few of them who [COLOR="Blue"]7 had awarded[/COLOR] with [COLOR="Blue"]8 gift of gab[/COLOR] by nature. They [COLOR="Blue"]9 attract[/COLOR] masses with their sensible thoughts and [COLOR="Blue"]10 motivate[/COLOR] the masses by fluency of their words. Due to their command over language they have been ideal for everyone. Speech is the most beautiful gift rewarded by nature, people should carefully utilize its services by making their communication précis and thoughtful. But it [COLOR="Blue"]11 is open[/COLOR] secret that only few can command it as it is difficult for ordinary one to carefully handle the speech.[/QUOTE]

Really a Good Effort my dear..
Some grammatical mistakes..
You have given less room for the second part of the statement in your expansion, and have elaborated the first part more.. Please give a second thought to it..
If you divide it into few paragraphs it could be more better..
The correction of the mistakes you made is as under:
1. Hurts
2. Contain
3. Statements
4. Face
5. The gift of the gab
6. People are admired
7. Had been awarded
8. The gift of the gab
9. Attracted
10. Motivated
11. Is an open secret

:)

AOA everyone, I am new to forum and will appear in CSS 2013. :)
I am weak in English. I will try few writing in this section.
Please evaluate my writings critically and also give me marks.
Here goes my first expansion. Please check my sentence structure, grammar and more specially my punctuation (I seriously need to work on it:closedeye)

[B][CENTER]Man probes into space but not into himself[/CENTER][/B]

Indeed the advancements in technology leads human to not only explore this world but also the entire universe. Man reached space and moving further in all dimensions but still he is unaware of himself. While moving towards outer dimensions he forget to feed inner dimensions as ease of technology made him materialistic. Today, a man's body is in ease but his soul is in unrest. One major cause is that he is far from religion - religion - that provides guidelines for nourishing the soul. He rushes towards worldly gains only results in inner pains and emptiness.

His rush towards technology closed the doors of his heart. While exploring universe, he stopped exploring himself - what his soul demands! What his heart in search of! Few decades back when man was not much into technology and advancements, he was more internally satisfied. This was because he was more social, he had more time to spend with his fellow beings, and he was nearer to religion. Though his life was simple without inventions like television or computers but he was satisfied as he was not materialistic in those decades.

By no means it is intended that a man should not go with technology or must stop probing universe. Rather, the need of the hour is to create a balance in life. Beside working for comfort of body and struggling for advancements in space and technology he should also give some time to work for his soul, his inner satisfaction and indeed getting nearer to the religion is the only way to combat this!

golden rule is that there is no golden rule
 

All rules are made for the welfare of human being and they are liable to change when it bcomes obvious that they are not serving the pupose for which they are created.So these rules are not perpetual.Man has created these rules in order to regulate his conduct so he is also powerful to modify them.
with the passage of time every thing changes in order to cope with these changes men,s attitude and behaviour also changes .Since rules are made to regulate human bahaviour, so chnages in them are also inviteable. Rules are not perfect piece of paper bec they are man made and are liable to carry errors and imperfections ,which should be corrected with passage of time. Constitutions of countries just become piece of papers when their security is at risk by following them. For example US forign polocy is to support democratic governments of the economiacally weak countries but history reveals that most of us aid was given to pakistan during military rule. Because these military governmaents have done alot for america as compared to democratic governmaents.
So all rules are made by man for his welfare and security and he is liable to change them. these rules are made for human being and whnever it is percieved that any particular rule is going against their interest it is usually voilated or modified.

plz sceniors check my expansion.

[QUOTE=ProgressiveError;488463]AOA everyone, I am new to forum and will appear in CSS 2013. :)
I am weak in English. I will try few writing in this section.
Please evaluate my writings critically and also give me marks.
Here goes my first expansion. Please check my sentence structure, grammar and more specially my punctuation (I seriously need to work on it:closedeye)

[B][CENTER]Man probes into space but not into himself[/CENTER][/B]

[COLOR="SeaGreen"]Indeed[/COLOR] the advancements in technology [COLOR="seagreen"]leads [/COLOR]human to not only explore this world but also the entire universe. [COLOR="seagreen"]Man reached[/COLOR] space and [COLOR="seagreen"]moving[/COLOR] further in all dimensions but still he is unaware of himself. While moving towards outer dimensions [COLOR="seagreen"]he forget[/COLOR] to feed inner dimensions as ease of technology made him materialistic. Today, a man's body is in ease but his soul is in unrest. One major cause is that he is far from religion - religion - that provides guidelines for nourishing the soul. He rushes towards worldly gains [COLOR="seagreen"](Need of connector here)[/COLOR] only results in inner pains and emptiness.

His rush towards technology[COLOR="seagreen"] closed [/COLOR]the doors of his heart. [COLOR="seagreen"][COLOR="seagreen"]While exploring universe, he stopped exploring himself - what his soul demands! [/COLOR]What his heart in search of![/COLOR] [COLOR="seagreen"]Few[/COLOR] decades back when man was not much into technology and advancements, he was more internally satisfied. This was because he was more social, he had more time to spend with his fellow beings, and he was nearer to religion. [COLOR="DarkRed"]Though his life was simple without inventions like television or computers but he was satisfied as he was not materialistic in those decades. [COLOR="SeaGreen"]Really?[/COLOR] [/COLOR]

By no means it is intended that a man should not go with technology or must stop probing universe. Rather, the need of the hour is to create a balance in life. [COLOR="SeaGreen"]Beside[/COLOR] working for comfort of body and struggling for advancements in space and technology he should also give some time to work for his soul, his inner satisfaction and indeed getting nearer to the religion is the only way to combat [COLOR="seagreen"]this![/COLOR][/QUOTE].
[COLOR="seagreen"][SIZE="3"][B]
. A good try.
. Grammatical mistakes are high-lighted, think about them.
. Dear, work on your tenses and sentence structures.
. Try to use simple sentences. Complex sentences give outlet to mistakes.
. Some quotations and examples could flourish your ideas.
. You could tell a lot about the above topic but as it is your first attempt; it is better.
. You had to talk about SELF which I couldn't find.
. Give some relevant examples to beautify the expressions.
. Over-all, it is Good. :)
. I await your next attempt. Thanks. [/B][/SIZE][/COLOR]

:)
 

Thank you so much for your time :) That is so kind.


[QUOTE]. Grammatical mistakes are high-lighted, think about them.[/QUOTE]

It would be very kind if you write corrections with mistakes as at some places I am unable to figure out what the mistake is.:thinking

[QUOTE]. Dear, work on your tenses and sentence structures.[/QUOTE]

Tenses table is on my tips, still I make mistakes :blink: why is this so! :(

[QUOTE]. Try to use simple sentences. Complex sentences give outlet to mistakes.[/QUOTE]

Are my sentences complex! I don’t think that I can write complex sentences.

[QUOTE]. Some quotations and examples could flourish your ideas. [/QUOTE]


From where should I prepare relevant quotations? Please guide.

[QUOTE]. You had to talk about SELF which I couldn't find. [/QUOTE]

Sorry didn't get. I read somewhere in the forum that using 'I' in Essay and English is strongly discouraged.


[QUOTE]. I await your next attempt. [/QUOTE]

:)

[QUOTE]You had to talk about SELF which I couldn't find.[/QUOTE]

Okay. Just read your expansion and got your point. :)

Is it necessary to use "SELF" as I already used "Himself" ...

[QUOTE]Thank you so much for your time That is so kind[/QUOTE]

Thanks for saying, thanks.

[QUOTE]It would be very kind if you write corrections with mistakes as at some places I am unable to figure out what the mistake is.[/QUOTE]

Hmmm!
1. It doesn't suit to start with INDEED.
2. 'Advancements' is plural so it shall take plural verb LEAD.
3. Man [COLOR="DarkRed"]has[/COLOR] reached space and [COLOR="darkred"]is[/COLOR] moving further in all dimensions.
4. He forgets
5. Technology [COLOR="darkred"]has[/COLOR] closed.
6. While exploring universe, he stopped exploring himself - what his soul demands! What his heart in search of! [COLOR="darkred"]Re-arrange it.[/COLOR]
7. Beside means at your right side or left, you had to use BESIDES.
8. this! Why is there need of exclamation sign?

[QUOTE]Are my sentences complex! I don’t think that I can write complex sentences[/QUOTE].

[COLOR="darkred"]Beside working for comfort of body and struggling for advancements in space and technology he should also give some time to work for his soul, his inner satisfaction and indeed getting nearer to the religion is the only way to combat this![/COLOR]

It is your single sentence. I said you to make simple sentence. If you make complex and compound sentences, you may make many mistakes. Avoid making large sentences.


[QUOTE]Sorry didn't get. I read somewhere in the forum that using 'I' in Essay and English is strongly discouraged.[/QUOTE]

Self means 'KHUDI'. I hope, you understand it.

[QUOTE]
From where should I prepare relevant quotations? Please guide.[/QUOTE]

Where should I prepare relevant quotations from? You should use preposition in the end of sentence.
Memorize quotations on different categories. Like; struggle, Religion, love, Self, materialism, and so on.

See them here:

[url]http://www.cssforum.com.pk/off-topic-section/poetry-literature/21972-quotations.html[/url]

[B]Regards,[/B]

I wish there would be more than one 'Thanks' button :)

[QUOTE]3. Man has reached space and is moving further in all dimensions.

5. Technology has closed.[/QUOTE]

I seriously have issues with this 'has' :blink:

Man reached space means "insaan khala tak ja pohncha". Thats what I wanted to say then why this 'has' should be there :thinking

Please guide ...

Please evaluate my piece of writing.


[B][CENTER][SIZE="3"]The Nearer the Church the Farther From God[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]

By no means living nearer to a holy place is proportional to getting nearer to God. Conversely, living away from the church doesn't make any difference on relationship with God. This pure relationship is not a matter of outer world or physical presence. Rather it is the matter of soul - the soul - that is invisible yet very deep. It is the matter of heart - the heart - where the God resides.

Therefore, for strengthen a relation with God there is a need to work on inner self. There is a dire need to work on 'Self'. As if one finds 'Self', recognizes the demands of soul and hear the voice of heart; is indeed successful in reaching God. It is irrespective of one’s living place.

Baba Bullay shah emphasized in his poetry that praying and worship is useless unless one truly feels a strong relationship with God. Islam says, "Acts depend on intentions" advocating that prayers are of no use until ones soul and heart are not willing for so. And this is only possible when one has a strong relation with his God. Staying inside or nearer to a holy place never guarantees a pure relationship with God as it starts from soul and heart and not from Church, Temple or Mosque.