There is dire need to understand the true essence of religious practices.It is not necessary to worship the God hundreds of years in temple or mosque but concept behind religious teaching is really important.Creator of this Cosmos coloured this universe with variety of spices, thoughts and tools.HE want to be loved from HIS creature and HE also loves admiration from HIS creature through his ample qualities.Just beans of rosary does not work one has to go through arduous journey of getting HIM..
Love is true lesson of all religion.Without love one can not climb up for getting close to God.All mystics stressed on love as they were pretty sure of getting God's kindness through it.Those who are in pursuit of love or spreading the love through their actions they are ,in other meanings,trying to be pious in real terms and better who are hermit.A worshipper solely cant be true lover.There is distinct division in this regard.One has to use his heart as mirror so that he can judge his action in a better way.

with out love religion and religious teaching are burden.But all religion are for facilitation not burdensome for any one.Burden and making it facility are totaly dependent on ones's psyche and preference towards God.Laborious Journey towards GOD made black Bilal Syedna Bilal and Abu Jahil and Abu Lahab who witnessed Prophet childhood and were resident of Makkah could not embrace Islam.This is true example of Nearer the church Farther from God.


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Well done you have data for the topic but your thought were mixed in your brain as result you could not maintain that consistency and continuty in your argumnets which was needed,A part from that it is recommended that whenever one is writing about expansion,one has to write in one paragraph or at lest not more than two paras.Because you know expansion requires control writing, in this respect you need to be very careful to express relevant and to the point marterial and one should not detract from the main topic,In essay if you miss some where the track you might get back on the track,but in expansion little diversion will lead towards unprecedent destruction.Over all you have attempted well but it needs window dressing to make it more attractive.
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