Kindly Seniors, Raise my mistakes

[Tooba2]

Its a humble request to check my precis please and raise my mistakes. thnx alot in advance.

(below is the original passage from 1992 precis and composition paper.)

Throughout the ages of human development men have been subject to miseries of two kinds: those imposed by external nature, and, those that human beings misguidedly inflicted upon each other. At first, by far the worst evils were those that were due to the environment. Man was a rare species, whose survival was precarious. Without the agility of the monkey, without any coating of fur, he has difficulty in escaping from wild beasts, and in most parts of the world could not endure the

winter’s cold. He had only two biological advantages: the upright posture freed his hands, and intelligence enabled him to transmit experience.Gradually these two advantages gave him supremacy. The numbers of the human species increased beyond those of any other large mammals. But nature could still assert her power by means of flood and famine an pestilence and by exacting from the great majority of mankind incessant toil in the securing of daily bread.In our own day our bondage to external nature is fast diminishing, as a result of the growth of scientific intelligence. Famines and pestilence still occur, but we know-better, year by year, what should be done to prevent them. Hard work is still necessary, but only because we are unwise:given peace and co-operation, we could subsist on a very moderate amount of toil. With existing technique, we can, whenever we choose to exercise wisdom, be free of many ancient- forms -of bondage to external nature.But the evils that men inflict upon each other have not diminished in the same degree.There are still wars, oppressions, and hideous cruelties, and greedy men still snatch wealth from those who are less skilful or less ruthless than themselves. Love of power still leads to vast tyrannies, or to mere obstruction when its grosser forms are impossible. And fear-deep -scarcely conscious fear — is still the dominant motive in very many lives.





"Causes of Miseries in human development"


Man has to suffer all over human development by external nature and his fellow being.Survival of man was ambiguous however, with the help of biological advantages hand and intelligence,he enabled himself to survive in all complicated situation of life.Human being increased in numbers than mammals but nature kept them busy in searching of daily bread by plunging its power in the form of natural calamity.In modern times, External nature is overcome with the help of scientific method and hard work but evil by fellow is not rooted out because of war,brutality and snatching wealth.Lust of power
bases on oppression and still rules on many life.


I tried to solve it in my best way(by following my previous mistakes such as understanding about passage, grammatical mistakes , conjunction and especially passage in indirect sense.)


Kindly check and comment on it so that, i could able to write good precis.

[Tooba2]

Is nobody there to check my Precis? Kindly share your view on it (if there is any problem regarding precis rules)rather than being silent.