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[second veiw 786]

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ENGLISH (Précis and Composition)

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1. Write a Précis of the following passage and suggest a suitable title: 25

Throughout the ages of human development men have been subject to miseries of two kinds: those imposed by
external nature, and, those that human beings misguidedly inflicted upon each other. At first, by far the worst evils were those that were due to the environment. Man was a rare species, whose survival was precarious. Without the agility of the monkey, without any coating of fur, he has difficulty in escaping from wild beasts, and in most parts of the world could not endure the winter’s cold. He had only two biological advantages: the upright posture freed his hands, and intelligence enabled him to transmit experience. Gradually these two advantages gave him supremacy. The numbers of the human species increased beyond those of any other large mammals. But nature could still assert her power by means of flood and famine an pestilence and by exacting from the great majority of mankind incessant toil in the securing of daily bread. In our own day our bondage to external nature is fast diminishing, as a result of the growth of scientific intelligence. Famines and pestilence still occur, but we know-better, year by year, what should be done to prevent them. Hard work is still necessary, but only because we are unwise: given peace and co-operation, we could subsist on a very moderate amount of toil. With existing technique, we can, whenever we choose to exercise wisdom, be free of many ancient- forms –of bondage to external nature. But the evils that men inflict upon each other have not diminished in the same degree. There are still wars, oppressions, and hideous cruelties, and greedy men still snatch wealth from those who are less skilful or less ruthless than themselves. Love of power still leads to vast tyrannies, or to mere obstruction when its grosser forms are impossible. And fear-deep -scarcely conscious fear — is still the dominant motive in very many lives.
Precis
Environment and meretricious have caused obstacles of human developments. Men preserved himself owing to his straight posture and capability to multiply of its off springs. It results the dominion of human species over other species. Moreover, fear of famine pushed mankind hard working in fields for securing food. Although in this modern present age we are able to predict when pestilence could visit. And incorporating of scientific techniques along with intellectuality, human being, could work less. But, meretricious still perpetuate. It cause avarice, war and lust of power. It results tyrannies. It cause hurdles in progress. This fear is exist in our modern age.

[Arif Rao]

Itis a very good attempt, however a few grammatical mistakes like below should be avoided:

It cause hurdles : It causes hurdles
This fear is exist : This fear exists

Also, I couldn't find the word intellectuality in the dictionary, you better confirm it or replace it with intellect.

Have a good day!

[Raz]

Dear second veiw 786 it is a nice attempt. Some modifications which may make it more beautiful:

Originally Posted by second veiw 786

Precis
Environment and meretricious have caused obstacles of human developments. Men preserved himself owing to his straight posture and capability to multiply of its off springs. It results the dominion of human species over other species. Moreover, fear of famine pushed mankind hard working in fields for securing food. Although in this modern present age we are able to predict when pestilence could visit. And incorporating of scientific techniques along with intellectuality, human being, could work less. But, meretricious still perpetuate. It cause avarice, war and lust of power. It results tyrannies. It cause hurdles in progress. This fear is exist in our modern age.

A little effort to point out some modifications:

1) in this modern present age = in modern age (This can reduce two words and give same meaning).
2) able to = can (Reduced one word).
3) incorporating of =Incorporation of OR Incorporating (Don't use "of" with incorporating, or simply write "incorporation of").
4) It results tyrannies= Insert "in" (It results in tyrannies).
5) It cause hurdles = It causes hurdles.
6) is exist = simply write exists (reduced one word and rectified grammatically).


Over all Preci:

Please try to assign Topic/Title to this preci and then revolve around that topic. I see two different poles in your preci which can be unified if you assign it suitable title after deep thought.

My experience: I never use difficult words in preci, I write as simple as I can. That is why I have not been able to build my vocab yet. (It may be my deficiency).

Regards

[second veiw 786]

Dear raz i am really thanksful to u n other seniors members. As u n other seniors members have under lines flaws. Dear u right that i shud suggest topic. Thank u again to all seniors members. Ur guidence has push me to consider on my flaws n errors.
regards
Second veiw.

[second veiw 786]

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ENGLISH (Précis and Composition)

Make a Précis of following passage in about 250 words: (Total words r 400)

The essence of poetry is that it deals with events which concern a large number of people and can be grasped not as immediate personal experience but as matter known largely from heresy and presented in simplified and often abstract forms. it is thus the antithesis of all poetry which deals with the special, individual activity of the self and tries to present this as specially and as individually as it can. The poet who deals with public themes may himself be affected, even deeply, by contemporary events at some point in his own being, but to see them in their breadth and depth he must rely largely on what he hears from other men and from mass instruments of communication. From the start his impulse to write about them is different from any impulse to write about his own affairs. It may be just as strong and just as compelling, but it is not of the same kind. He has to give his own version of something which millions of others may share with him, and however individual he may wish to be, he cannot avoid relying to a large extent on much that he knows only from second hand.
Fundamentally this may not matter, for after all what else did Shakespeare do: but the political poet does not construct an imaginary past, he attempts to grasp and interpret a vast present. Between him and his subject there is a gap which he can never completely cross, and all his attempts to make events part of himself must be to some extent hampered by recalcitrant elements in them, which he does not understand or cannot assimilate or find irrelevant to his creative task. in such poetry selection which is indispensable to all art, has to be made from an unusually large field of possibilities and guided by an exacting sense of what really matters and what does not. On one side he may try to include too much and lose himself in issues where be is not imaginatively at home, on the other side he may see some huge event merely from a private angle which teed not mean much to others. Political poetry oscillates between these extremes, and its history in our time has been largely attempts to make the best of one or the other of them or to see what compromises can be made between them.

Seniors r requested to check preci with eagle eye
(preci words r 78)
Political poetry
Importance of poetry is it paints the concerns of multitude. However, a poet not incorporated of himself to public interests, he may not portray public’s interests. Therefore, his voice should speaks the concerns of masses. And embraced himself as a political poet. Although it negates principles of poetry. It influenced on his innovation. And a poet can not be utopianism like Shakespeare was. Nonetheless, In our age, political poetry endeavors to play its roles between two poles simultaneously.

[Omer]

FEDERAL PUBLIC SERVICE COMMISSION
COMPETITIVE EXAMINATION FOR RECRUITMENT TO POSTS
IN BPS – 17 UNDER THE FEDERAL GOVERNMENT, 1992.

ENGLISH (Précis and Composition)

TIME ALLOWED: THREE HOURS MAXIMUM MARKS:100

1. Write a Précis of the following passage and suggest a suitable title: 25

Throughout the ages of human development men have been subject to miseries of two kinds: those imposed by
external nature, and, those that human beings misguidedly inflicted upon each other. At first, by far the worst evils were those that were due to the environment. Man was a rare species, whose survival was precarious. Without the agility of the monkey, without any coating of fur, he has difficulty in escaping from wild beasts, and in most parts of the world could not endure the winter’s cold. He had only two biological advantages: the upright posture freed his hands, and intelligence enabled him to transmit experience. Gradually these two advantages gave him supremacy. The numbers of the human species increased beyond those of any other large mammals. But nature could still assert her power by means of flood and famine an pestilence and by exacting from the great majority of mankind incessant toil in the securing of daily bread. In our own day our bondage to external nature is fast diminishing, as a result of the growth of scientific intelligence. Famines and pestilence still occur, but we know-better, year by year, what should be done to prevent them. Hard work is still necessary, but only because we are unwise: given peace and co-operation, we could subsist on a very moderate amount of toil. With existing technique, we can, whenever we choose to exercise wisdom, be free of many ancient- forms –of bondage to external nature. But the evils that men inflict upon each other have not diminished in the same degree. There are still wars, oppressions, and hideous cruelties, and greedy men still snatch wealth from those who are less skilful or less ruthless than themselves. Love of power still leads to vast tyrannies, or to mere obstruction when its grosser forms are impossible. And fear-deep -scarcely conscious fear — is still the dominant motive in very many lives.

(Words: 317)
Precise
Humans have been suffering from problems of various kinds since time immemorial. Earlier, they found difficulty in surviving with the environment. Nature also gave some benefits to humans but kept its superiority over them. However, by using their wisdom, humans are able to cope with the environmental problems. But humans are not using their wisdom for their very benefit and still inflicting harm to each other to prove their authority over others. This led to many problems and fear of these problems is still present in modern age.
(Words: 88)

I have used very very simple language. Is it fine or some tough words should be used?

Please comment on the precise.

[Zain_rocker]

I have recenlty started my CSS preparation, and this is my first precis attempt. Please comment on it.


Precis & Composition Paper 2007

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ENGLISH (PRECIS AND ACOMPOSITION)
TIME ALLOWED: THREE HOURS MAXIMUM MARKS :100

Q#1 Make a précis of the given passage and suggest a suitable heading.

The author of a work of imagination is trying to effect us wholly, as human beings, whether he knows it or not; and we are affected by it, as human beings, whether we intend to be or not. I suppose that everything we eat has some effect upon us than merely the pleasure of taste and mastication; it affects us during the process of assimilation and digestion; and I believe that exactly the same is true of any thing we read.
The fact that what we read does not concern merely something called our literary taste, but that it affects directly, though only amongst many other influences , the whole of what we are, is best elicited , I think, by a conscientious examination of the history of our individual literary education. Consider the adolescent reading of any person with some literary sensibility. Everyone, I believe, who is at all sensible to the seductions of poetry, can remember some moment in youth when he or she was completely carried away by the work of one poet. Very likely he was carried away by several poets, one after the other. The reason for this passing infatuation is not merely that our sensibility to poetry is keener in adolescence than in maturity. What happens is a kind of inundation, or invasion of the undeveloped personality, the empty (swept and garnished) room, by the stronger personality of the poet. The same thing may happen at a later age to persons who have not done much reading. One author takes complete possession of us for a time; then another, and finally they begin to affect each other in our mind. We weigh one against another; we see that each has qualities absent from others, and qualities incompatible with the qualities of others: we begin to be, in fact, critical: and it is our growing critical power which protects us from excessive possession by anyone literary personality. The good critic- and we should all try to critics, and not leave criticism to the fellows who write reviews in the papers- is the man who, to a keen and abiding sensibility, joins wide and increasingly discriminating. Wide reading is not valuable as a kind of hoarding, and the accumulation of knowledge or what sometimes is meant by the term ‘a well-stocked mind.’ It is valuable because in the process of being affected by one powerful personality after another, we cease to be dominated by anyone, or by any small number. The very different views of life, cohabiting in our minds, affect each other, and our own personality asserts itself and gives each a place in some arrangement peculiar to our self.

Title: Reading: the personality explorer

Precis
Being human beings, we are affected by imaginory work. Reading keeps on affecting us after its first effect. Reading choice, a determinant of literary tase, is among the factors that determine personality. Individual's infatuation towards a poet, in adolescence, does not show a tilt towards poetry, rather it is due to stronger personality's influence and can happen in latter ages due to less reading. Infatuated from more than one authors, we start their ranking in mind based on their qualities; this is the start of critical power in us. Good critic indulges in broad and distinguished reading: beneficial for knowledge accumulation and ceasing dominantion of few on us. Our personality is constituted, subject to our preferences, by different inter-related ideas in our mind.

Passage: more than 350
precis: 116

Please give me marks out of 25..

Looking Forward....

[struggler]

Originally Posted by Omer

(Words: 317)
Precise
Humans have been suffering from problems of various kinds since time immemorial. Earlier, they found difficulty in surviving with the environment. Nature also gave some benefits to humans but kept its superiority over them. However, by using their wisdom, humans are able to cope with the environmental problems. But humans are not using their wisdom for their very benefit and still inflicting harm to each other to prove their authority over others. This led to many problems and fear of these problems is still present in modern age.
(Words: 88)

I have used very very simple language. Is it fine or some tough words should be used?

Please comment on the precise.

omar i have read ur preci.its a good attempt but not upto the mark.

[AmBrosiaL EloQuence]

aoa.

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i am jus tryin to trace ma freind tehmina habib (struggler) and cudnt find a betta way to do that.

tehmina if um not wrong i received a mail from u via facebook that extented a hand ov freindship.
so this post is ma hand of freindship extended in reponse. kindly mail me via ur yahoo or hotmail id so that v can interact. i don have a facebook account u c. i tried to get ur email address form forum but cudnt find it!

and i jus got to know today that ur nick at forum is stuggler oderwise i had quit "strugglin" for u under the name of tehmina habib long ago.

so jus get back to ur "so carin" friend as soon as u feel like.

i felt it ma moral obligation so i put all ma energiez into it to trace u.
btw congrats on been allocated to OMG.

plz ignore if um being any trouble.

regardz
ambrosial eloquence