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Passage:
Of all the characteristics of ordinary human nature envy is the most unfortunate; not only does the envious person wish to inflict misfortune and do so whenever he can with impunity, but he is also himself rendered unhappy by envy. instead of deriving pleausre from what he has, he derives pain from what others have. if he can, he deprives others of their advantages, which to him is as desirable as as it would be to secure the same advantages himself. if this passion is allowed to run riot it becomes fatal to all excellence,and even the most useful exercise of exceptional skill. why should a medical man go to see his patients in a car when the labourer has to walk to his work? why should the scientifc investigator be allowed to spend his time in a warm room when others have to face the inclemency of the elements? why should a man who possesses some rare talent of great importance to the world be saved fromt he drudgery of his own housework? to such questions envy finds no answer. fortunately, however, there is in human nature a compensating passion, namely that of admiration. whosoever wishes to increase human happiness must wish to increase admiration and to diminish envy. what cure is there for envy? for the saint there is the cure of selflessness, though even in the case of saints envy of other saints is by no means impossible. but, leaving saints out of account, the only cure of envy in the case of ordinary men and women is happiness, and the difficulty is that envy is itself a terrible obstacle to happiness. but the envious man may say: 'what is the good of telling me that the cure of envy is happiness? i cannot find happiness while i continue to feel envy, and you tell me that i cannot cease to be envious until i find happiness.' but real life is never so logical as this. mereley to realize the cause of one's own envious feeling is to take a long step towards curing them.

Precis
Title: Envy; a curable passion

Envy is the most deplorable of all the emotions of humans, where an envious person not only hurts himself by sustaining a state of discontent but may also hurt those (if he can), who are a source of envy to him.The emotion of envy takes away the sense of rationality from a person and ultimately without analyzing the reasons of the happening of a particular phenomenon, he becomes envious and unhappy.However, Admiration can oust the feelings of envy. The cure of envy is happiness, and happiness can come from admiring others, though it may seem impossible to an envious person. But realizing the reasons for his envious feelings is the first step in diminishing them.

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Here is my attempt


Title: CURING ENVY


Envy is the most hapless of human traits for it not only deprives him of happiness but also creates in him a desire to harm others which are at an advantage to him.This feeling wates the talent of a person.But to counter envy there is a feeling of admiration in human nature which restores happiness and happiness in turn is suggested as a cure for envy.However, envy and happiness are conflicting concepts, so to know the real cause behind envious emotions is to take a major step toward curing it.