Plz seniors evaluate my prcise

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Original Precise (1999)

To have faith in dignity and worth of the individual man as end himself, to believe that it is better to be governed by persuasion than by coercion, to believe that fraternal goodwill is more worthy than selfish and contentions spirit, to believe that in the long run all values are inseparable from the love of truth and the disinterested search for it, to believe that knowledge and the power it confers should be used to promote the welfare and happiness of all men, rather than to serve the interest of those individual and classes whom fortune and intelligence endow with temporary advantage-these are the values which are affirmed by the traditional democratic ideology. The case of democracy is that it accepts the rational and humane values as ends and proposes as the means realizing them the minimum of coercion and the maximum of voluntary assent. We may well abandon the cosmological temple in which the democratic ideology originally enshrined these values, without renounce the faith it was designed to celebrate. The essence of that faith is belief in the capacity of man, as rational and humane creature to achieve the good life by rational and humane means. The chief virtue of democracy and sole reason for cherishing it is that with all the faults it still provides most favorable conditions for achieving that ends by those means. (231 words)

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Democratic Ideology
The beauty and chief characteristic of democracy is that it serves common man without force, despot, greed and it also does not privilege a special group. It represents the immortal values of human beings like, self esteem, impartiality, brotherhood, self honor and prosperity for individuals. The democracy was formed to maximize public rights without violence and damaging one’s faith. In spite of faults, the moral excellence of democracy is that, it determines maximum rights of an individual. (77 Words)