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Here are precis by me of two paragraphs.

Paragraph 1
It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in colour or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance. 65 words
Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike. 85 words
I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, — the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the unvintagable sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism. 144 words
There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors — epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers — agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colours, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece 120

Precis
Extrinsic nature allurement requires different approach of perceiving that Greeks denied their prowess to represent it in appealing features, although, producing profusely.
Ancient folks never relished the nature’s charm. They were scared; moreover, they considered the nature’s beauty dangerous to mankind and animals. Therefore, their first glance at nature was fear and animosity.
Occurrence of mountains and forest escalated their hatred towards nature resulting in differentiation of them from other peoples. The sea which was their wealth, they called it a garbage. So, the outset of Greek Art received nothing except antagonism in its early days.
In the last, there was aught except Greek democracy that starts getting over in days. Meanwhile, people assembled into Antioch, Alexandra or lastly into Rome. Then, from Alexander’s day the natural strong desire as well as artist emerges out agreeing in nature’s beauty.


Paragraph 2
Besant describing the middle class of the 9th century wrote ” In the first place it was for more a class apart. “In no sense did it belong to society. Men in professions of any kind (except in the Army and Navy) could only belong to society by right of birth and family connections; men in trade—bankers were still accounted tradesmen—could not possibly belong to society. That is to say, if they went to live in the country they were not called upon by the county families and in the town they were not admitted by the men into their clubs, or by ladies into their houses… The middle class knew its own place, respected itself, made its own society for itself, and cheerfully accorded to rank the deference due.” Since then, however, the life of the middle classes had undergone great changes as their numbers had swelled and their influence had increased. Their already well –developed consciousness of their own importance had deepened. More critical than they had been in the past of certain aspects of aristocratic life, they wee also more concerned with the plight of the poor and the importance of their own values of society, thrift, hand work, piety and respectability thrift, hand work, piety and respectability as examples of ideal behavior for the guidance of the lower orders. Above all they were respectable. There were divergences of opinion as to what exactly was respectable and what was not. There were, nevertheless, certain conventions, which were universally recognized: wild and drunker behaviors were certainly not respectable, nor were godlessness or avert promiscuity, not an ill-ordered home life, unconventional manners, self-indulgence or flamboyant clothes and personal adornments.

Precis
Middle class in the 9th century had been deprived of being entertained with adequate facilities. During 9th century, society was only for men except in army, navy and banks. They were dispossessed by district, by clubs and by ladies. Meanwhile, they fabricated the society of themselves and experienced a considerable change emanating increases in numbers, influence and infiltration of their deep knowledge. They were modest, although, they had been in privileged life, they seemed slightly involved with poor’s dilemma and their values. Some discrepancy regarding respect in various traditions excites. However, some practices were generally recognized that incorporates wild, drunken behavior, atheism, bizarre manners and personal beautification.

[FAIZ MARRI]

Very good attempt.
But it was looked that you are not following the words limit.Therefore, your suggested to follow it.First of all count the words and strictly follow the length. It must be third one.Also mention the total words of paragraph and precis words.