Anything in brackets was not part of outline, Its just to give you guys a sense of what I wrote in the essay

- Introduction

- What is a Mentality[LIST][*]Defining mentality[/LIST][LIST][*]How it creates social structures (how a mentality creates a societal mindset and worldview)[/LIST][LIST][*]How it establishes social norms and values (how it forms established norms within society)[/LIST]- What is a Colonial mentality[LIST][*] Defining a colonial mentality (what it is and where it was formed and comes form)[/LIST][LIST][*] How it was perceived historically and today (colonial mindset in the past is very different on how it is used today due to social changes and transformation of society, so I explained how it was used in the past and how it is different today)[/LIST][LIST][*] Characteristics of a colonial mentality (listed 6 and described each)[/LIST]- Colonial mentality an Impediment to Pakistan[LIST][*]A historical perspective (from 1947 onwards explained using 5 examples how it impeded Pakistans progress)[/LIST][LIST][*]Current scenario (5 examples to support my argument on how it is impeding Pakistans progress today)[/LIST]- Consequences of a colonial mentality (this point is the extension of the last point, the results of colonial mentality impeding Pakistans progress throughout history and today. What negative results have we seen due to it. Gave 6 examples and explained each)

- Remedies to this issue (how we can overtime and slowly remove a colonial mindset from Pakistan. Gave 6 examples)

- Conclusion

Thanks, INSHALLAH.
My grammar was ok, paragraphing was fine, articulation was a little good instead one where I messed a little fallacy. My outline was awesome, intro plus first paragraphed argument was very much to the point, conclusion was a hurried attemp in last five minutes. I trust ALLAH, I'll surely get it INSHALLAH. Thanks again!

Sorry I forgot to add that Colonial mentality can be different according to each country and who uses it. It was very important to first establish a definition of what you think it is, so that the person marking the essay has a clear idea of your definition of a colonial mentality. Also, it was very important to establish context. We are talking about Pakistan so our perspective has to be how a colonial mentality was used and applied to Pakistan / South Asia and how it has evolved over time.

Those 2 points of defining your meaning of colonial mentality and then establishing proper context in terms of Pakistan itself were very important.

At least that is what I think. Not sure if I will pass but I think I did a good enough job.

I absolutely agree with 'PartyPooper' brother on the arguments which he presented here. This is the sole reason because of which I didn't attempt this topic. 😀😇

You can check my outline in a thread under the heading of 'military engagements by UN; is the world moving towards peace?'.

Hey

I attempted the same essay. I took colonial in a relatively simpler context. To me colonial meant just the backward or primitive thinking. My thesis statement was "in which hidden ways colonial thinking is impeding pakistans progress, how can we over come those and what are the benefits that it is going to bring for pakistan". I mentioned creative hidden ways, like the primitive thought of choosing a permanent career, women not allowed to work, technology being considered a secondary source and reliance on paper work in government sector, women/honor killing, religious biasis, unappreciated entrepuernship sector, english language complex and many more. I took those in a flow though. Sath sath mentioned examples and how it is halting the progress of pakistan.

Then mentioned strategies of overcoming colonial thinking and mentioned the importance and concluded.

Any opinions? :(

Kindly share the length of your essay in terms of pages .....!

My Views
 

[QUOTE=Muhammad Owais Siddiqui;1003879]I did the same essay, I focused on enslaved mindset of Pakistanis, be that historically in playing role for US in cold war against ISSR, in education by following english ideals, in financial by relying on loans and trade, in national mindset by western imitation and brain drain, in cultural sphere through Hollywood and Bollywood. Later I gave example of american recolution as an exact way to get away with this mindset by making policies according to customised needs. I concluded with one-line solution to stick to our ideological struggle of Pakistan ka matlab kia and promote urdu, culture and Pakistani exports with self reliance to get out of this colonial mentality.
Please comment[/QUOTE]

Dear , after reviewing all of the shared outlines, i find your outline and ideas hitting the bull's eye. I endorse the the way "party pooper" has defined colonial mentality. For other members who have shared their outlines , they should also share their thesis statement . If thesis statement is not right , you have failed the essay. That was a very tricky essay . And the rule of css essay is ; never ever attempt an essay about which you have 1 percent doubt.

IS COLONIAL MINDSET IMPEDING PAKISTAN'S PROGRESS?
● Introduction
● We have always been Slaves
** ○ Mehmood Ghaznavi
** ○ Muhammad Ghouri
** ○ Later Sultans followed by Mughals
** ○ British
● Psychological Effects of Slavery
** ○ On Ruling Elite
***** • Elitist Attitude
***** • Dynastic Politics
***** • Non-democratic methods
***** • Opposition to Dissent
***** • Opposition to Free Media
***** • Opposition to Free Judiciary
***** • Increase in Nepotism
** ○ On Common Man
***** • Fear of Authority and Power
***** • Mentally Suppressed
***** • Acceptance of Dynastic Politics
***** • Fear of Raising Voice over Injustice
***** • Considering the Rulers as Supreme
***** • Non-participation in Politics
● Current Situation of Pakistan
** ○ Rulers have Elitist mindset
** ○ Suffering from Curse of Dynastic Politics
** ○ Experienced Several Martial Laws
** ○ Rulers hate Dissenting Voice
** ○ Media is Controlled by an Invisible Hand
** ○ Judiciary has been Controlled in the Past
** ○ Nepotism is at its Peak
** ○ Common Man is Afraid of 'Thana' and 'Katcheri'
** ○ Common Man has Accepted Dynastic Politics
** ○ Common Man is Afraid to Question the Rulers
** ○ Common Man is unable to be part of Politics
● Is this Colonial Mindset Helping Pakistan?
● What should be Done to Let Go of this Mindset?
** ○ Rulers must be Held Accountable to the People
** ○ Rulers must be Brought under Rule of Law
** ○ Dynastic Politics must be Discouraged
** ○ Democratic trends must be Encouraged
** ○ Freedom of Media
** ○ Freedom of Judiciary
** ○ Rulers should be Questioned
** ○ Meritocracy should be Promoted
** ○ End to 'Thana' and 'Katcheri' Culture
** ○ Provision of Justice
** ○ Common Man should be Freed Mentally
● Conclusion

[QUOTE=Ehtasham Khattak;1004971]IS COLONIAL MINDSET IMPEDING PAKISTAN'S PROGRESS?

● Introduction

● We have always been Slaves

** ○ Mehmood Ghaznavi

** ○ Muhammad Ghouri

** ○ Later Sultans followed by Mughals

** ○ British

● Psychological Effects of Slavery

** ○ On Ruling Elite

***** • Elitist Attitude

***** • Dynastic Politics

***** • Non-democratic methods

***** • Opposition to Dissent

***** • Opposition to Free Media

***** • Opposition to Free Judiciary

***** • Increase in Nepotism

** ○ On Common Man

***** • Fear of Authority and Power

***** • Mentally Suppressed

***** • Acceptance of Dynastic Politics

***** • Fear of Raising Voice over Injustice

***** • Considering the Rulers as Supreme

***** • Non-participation in Politics

● Current Situation of Pakistan

** ○ Rulers have Elitist mindset

** ○ Suffering from Curse of Dynastic Politics

** ○ Experienced Several Martial Laws

** ○ Rulers hate Dissenting Voice

** ○ Media is Controlled by an Invisible Hand

** ○ Judiciary has been Controlled in the Past

** ○ Nepotism is at its Peak

** ○ Common Man is Afraid of 'Thana' and 'Katcheri'

** ○ Common Man has Accepted Dynastic Politics

** ○ Common Man is Afraid to Question the Rulers

** ○ Common Man is unable to be part of Politics

● Is this Colonial Mindset Helping Pakistan?

● What should be Done to Let Go of this Mindset?

** ○ Rulers must be Held Accountable to the People

** ○ Rulers must be Brought under Rule of Law

** ○ Dynastic Politics must be Discouraged

** ○ Democratic trends must be Encouraged

** ○ Freedom of Media

** ○ Freedom of Judiciary

** ○ Rulers should be Questioned

** ○ Meritocracy should be Promoted

** ○ End to 'Thana' and 'Katcheri' Culture

** ○ Provision of Justice

** ○ Common Man should be Freed Mentally

● Conclusion[/QUOTE]



Your thesis statement? If you were able to organize all this data you have given into meaningful structure, and made sense justifying and linking these points to your thesis statement, you will get through.

All depends on thesis statement. Otherwise a good effort.


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I started by narrating a historical event. Thesis statement followed, in which I agreed that, Yes it is the colonial mindset which is impeding the progress of Pakistan.

Every heading, sub-heading of the outline was the starting line of a paragraph in essay. And yes, I connected the ideas.

What do you think?