Critical Analysis Required On My Essay

[Irfi]

Dear candidates of CSS,
i would like to invite a critical investigation into the following stuff of knowledge i penned down on "The Image of Islam in the west and responsibilities of Muslim Ummah".It was the topic i selected for my Essay in CSS-2007.I wrote allbut 18 pages.The stuff is being pasted in points as under:
1.Ideological confrontation between Communism and Capitalism during cold war and emergence of Islamic Revivalism.And subsequent irritation between Capitalism and Isalmic philosophy.

2.unravelling of Western plots against Islam in various manifestations in sheer disregard of Islamic philosophy.

3.Umpteen allegations,figure-pointing and bashing of the religion in western camps.

4.Islam-an intolerant religion,cluster of maccabre beliefs and practices,religion of terror(Concept of Jihad),non-accommodative order.(Some of many images being potrated and projected in the West)

5.Islam-its meaning and message(True philosophy of Islam discussed in correspondence with the above projected faces of islam)

6.Administrative sys during period of Holy Prophet and Four caliphs(Treaty of Hudybia discussed in defendce that Islam is a tolerant and accomodating religion)Many other examples given.

7.9/11,subsequent events and Al-Queda (Linking Terrorism With Islam}

8. Caricatures of Holy Prophet in Jallen-posten, derogatory statements of Pop Benedict14.

9.Many other religious outfits related to other religions and their terror acts committed throught out the world.(F.G:Christian Identity Moment,Nation Of Yehw,OhmShankariya,Mount Tample,RSS,VHP,etc).Why not their acts are linked with terrorism and why Al-quada and Taliben's privte acts are equated with philosophy of Islam:a critical analysis was given.

10.cruelities and duresses committed in Kosovo,iraq,iran,palestine,kashmir,etc on religious grounds.

11.ulterior motives of West in malighning the religion og Islam.

12.How Muslim Ummah Is responsible for the bad image of Islam projectd in the West(socio-political and economic death,no united political clout,authoritarianism is political systems,weak plotical Org(OIC),lack of powerful media to project islam in its true picture,etc.

13.What Muslim Ummah should Do(undoing the above stated problems,unity of political strengh,economic revival,avoiding extremism and fundamentalism,strenghening OIC, Creating a powerful Media to project Islam in true form,etc.

The essay was concluded with the following words of Musharraf about the Muslim Ummah that:
"We are at the defining moment of history.we can either seize the moment and define the history or let the moment define our destiny."

The points have been discussed here in topssy turvy form.They are not in form.
Regards,
Irfi

[Jani Abro]

@ Irfi
Ur essay carries weight. U definitely stand a gud chance of passing it with flying colours. My prays are with u.

[Sureshlasi]

ATTENTION !!!


I like to call all CSS candidates, who appeared in CE 2007. Please outline your attempted essay under this thread.

It will be considerable help for fresh members.

Thank u very much for co-operation.

[Wounded Healer]

@ irfi,
i usually dont reply to questions like this as i am no authority on the subject, but as u have requested my opinion, so here goes:

i also wrote on the same topic and from what i can gather from the points that u have shared above, is that all those who wrote on this topic had almost the same ideas and points.

this topic has already been discussed in some other thread where many candidates wrote their points......and they are mostly the same.....so we can safely conclude that, atleast, our ideas were correct.

Therefore, it all boils down to the written expression that a candidate has used while writing this essay..........who so ever presented the essay in a good, thought out, well planned manner should have no difficulty in passing the essay paper.

judging from ur points and ur english, i would say that ur essay has a very good chance of meeting the standards of the examiner...........

my prayers for u and all the css candidates..........may u all pass with flying colors, Ameen.

regards,

[Assistant]

Point 1 : No Islamic revivalism Islamist extemism emerged.

Point 2: They have been plotting intrigues against our philosophy long before that.

Point 3: They dont respect their religion and their own religious figures how can you expect them to respect our.

Point 4: They only see one side of the picture.

Point 5: Meaning of Islam should be defined at the beginning of the essay

Point 6: Your example should also be from the contemporary time with reference to the past. Our suggestion must be for the future events.

Point 7: You must have proved that Al-Qaeda is not part of Islam.

Point 8: Freedom of speech and expression How can you accomodate in an Islamic society. You must have given some points about it.

Point 9: They are bent on proving that Islam is a religion of terror so they link every moment originating in Muslim countries which is against their interest to Terrorism


Point 13: Dont tell me you ended the essay with the Enlighten Moderation. It is not the ultimate solution of Muslim revivalism

[Irfi]

@Assistant,
dear i welcome ur analysis on my essay.
i feel it timely to make some points of my essay clear .Islamic Revivalism meant here emergence of Islam with a big bang effect in the aftermath of death of communism.This militated against the designed motives of the West which engendered Capitalism's enemity with Islam.Islamic extremism followed the sequences thereof.
My point in discussing Al-qaeda was to vindicate the disconnection of Al-queda and Talibans' activities and true Islamic philosophy.so, i did my best in disloging the prevalent conviction that Al-qaeda is an outfit of Islam.And equating terror acts of a coterie of individuals with the message of islam is not fair and just.It is also not without ulterior ends of the West.

let's hope for the good.

praying for all

regards,
Irfi

[DuuA]

I’m just wondering why one would compare Islam with Capitalism and Communism when these two systems are essentially economic systems and Islam is referred as a complete code of life (though in a raw form and with basics if compared with contemporary times). Yes we can compare the concepts in the respective domains like Surplus Value, Valorization, Commodity Fetishism etc, but we cannot simply say that since Communism (a specific ideology) was in doldrums, Islam (an across-the-board system of belief and faith) rose up to the pinnacle as the consequences of the changing circumstances.


And if, for the sake of argument, we consider the proposition that the emergence of Islam (if any) was the offshoot of the failure of Communism, even then it cannot be justified. Cause and effect go side by side. Islamic extremism is all about the grievances nurtured by the political, economic and social exploitations and instability. And to an extent the brain washing by the people who have vested interests in the status quo. Communism failed due to the militarization of USSR and by placing the priorities in a wrong precedence order. It was a system where state became the kernel of power, thus leaving no room for the improvement of nationalization scheme, whereas things had to be furthered socialistically.


Note: It is always recommended not to use the suffix “-ism” because you may never know whether the word you used with ism was actually a philosophy or just a noun of that base word. Conjectures may lead to disasters. [Though Revivalism is not an ideology but it sounds to give a positive effect whereas it is not the case.]

[555]

Originally Posted by DuuA

I’m just wondering why one would compare Islam with Capitalism and Communism when these two systems are essentially economic systems and Islam is referred as a complete code of life (though in a raw form and with basics if compared with contemporary times)

How can you say that islam is in raw form?Which principle do you think has not been discussed by Islam which was required in the present day?And ,in your opinion, which is the system that suits best to the contemporary world?

@Irfi

Just relax dear, you have nice expression and i feel that you will come up with flying colours inshaallah.It is easy to criticise others' work here but very tough to express during exams.

[engle]

@555
well , i suppose the thread starter himself invites critical analysis on his essay( a very bold step!) , therefore , it should be welcome . One needs to have courage to accept the stuff of criticism leashed on anyself( though it is hard ).Moreover it is only the personal opinion of some one ....not the authority at all...

irfee... outlines of your essay contain good stuff and you stand at good to get through it with flying coulurs.

My prayers are with you.best of Luck .

[DuuA]

555


There are many meanings of the word “raw”. One of them is the state which is not altered from its natural state. Like I mentioned earlier there are many concepts that are rather new to the contemporary times and need thorough study before any sort of implementation can be sorted out. You cannot apply the simpler tribal rules on the current complex form of circumstances without chalking out the minute details first. Use of the word raw is in that context.


And secondly, there is one thing mentioned in the topic of the thread and that is the sole requirement of initiating it. It is Critical Analysis. Had it been not the requirement, the thread would just have served the purpose of sharing. It is much better to tell the other person the mistake (which according to you is the mistake, and might not be the mistake and in the process other participants let you know about your misperception—double purpose served) than simply assuring him/her without pointing out the areas that need to be discussed. True, criticizing others is the easy job but equally deplorable is the way to misguide the person who wants to seek your suggestions. Got it???


As far as essay is concerned, it is a real good effort. But I agree to the points given by Assistant.