Please evaluate my outlines and thesis statement

[Prettydoll]

Greetings to all the respected members of
this forum. I would like to request you to check
my outlines and thesis and point of errors. Also, please
rate it in marks will be thankful to youuu.



Classrooms decide the future of the nation.

1) Introduction

1.1) Thesis statement
Although classroom is not the only aspect that decides the future of the nation but, it is one of the most important aspects that decides the nation's future

1.2) Interpretation of topic


2) What are the positive factors through which classrooms can decide the future of nation?



2.1) The abilities and hidden talents of young generation that can be used for nation's benefit are discovered in classrooms

2.2) Student's attitude in classrooms is a glimpse of future showing that where will they take the nation

2.3)The lessons learned in classrooms are remembered and implemented for the entire life
having greater impact on nation's future

2.4) The activities in classrooms motivate students to do something good for themselves and the nation as well

2.5) The positive environment of classrooms encourage students to share their opinions giving a hint of what they wish to do for the nation in future



3) What can be the worse things happening in classrooms that may result in spoiling the future of students ?


3.1) Suppressing the qualities of students by making fun of them

3.2) Partiality amongst teachers that can dishearten students

3.3) Useless activities taking place in classrooms that consist of no benefit

3.4) Unhealthy discussions in classrooms that could make student's thinking negative

3.5) No check or strictness in classrooms enabling students to adapt harmful things and addictions



4) How will these points negatively effect the future of the nation?


4.1) Suppressing the qualities of students can make them under confident resulting in lose of passion to do something for the nation

4.2) Biased teachers may result in causing mental torture for students leading to the loss of future qualifiers of the nation

4.3) Useless activities can make students unproductive which may result in loosing abilities that are needed by nation in future

4.4) Negative thinking of students due to unhealthy discussions may involve them in crimes which will be quite harmful for the nation's future

4.5) Harmful things and addictions may be life threatening for students making them irresponsible about themselves and nation's future as well


5) What measures can be taken to prevent these highlighted issues, saving the future of the students and nation (as well)?

5.1) Annual counseling sessions should take place in classrooms to motivate students to do something for the nation's future

5.2) Monthly mental health check-up should be held in classrooms to prevent every sort of mental illness giving students a chance to focus on themselves and nation's future

5.3) Talent shows and events should be held frequently to help students in finding their hidden abilities that can be used to help the nation flourish in future

5.4) Conduct a daily 45 minutes lecture for students to make them aware of the responsibilities that they hold regarding their nation

5.5) Hire some people specifically to keep a check on students in classrooms in order to stop them from being involved in harmful activities


6) Apart from classrooms, what are the other factors considering students that play a vital role in deciding the future of the nation?

6.1) The upbringing of students making them either ethical or non serious regarding the nation's future

6.2) The amount of resources available for students that can be used to brighten nation's future

6.3) The role model and inspiration of students that may effect student's thinking making them think either positive or negative about nation's future

6.4) The daily tasks of students that can make them either productive or hopeless about nation's future

6.5) The cultures and traditions followed in society can make students either passionate or of no use for the nation and it's future

7) Conclusion (agreed to the statement

[waqarsa]

Originally Posted by Prettydoll

Greetings to all the respected members of
this forum. I would like to request you to check
my outlines and thesis and point of errors. Also, please
rate it in marks will be thankful to youuu.



Classrooms decide the future of the nation.

1) Introduction

1.1) Thesis statement
Although classroom is not the only aspect that decides the future of the nation but, it is one of the most important aspects that decides the nation's future

1.2) Interpretation of topic


2) What are the positive factors through which classrooms can decide the future of nation?



2.1) The abilities and hidden talents of young generation that can be used for nation's benefit are discovered in classrooms

2.2) Student's attitude in classrooms is a glimpse of future showing that where will they take the nation

2.3)The lessons learned in classrooms are remembered and implemented for the entire life
having greater impact on nation's future

2.4) The activities in classrooms motivate students to do something good for themselves and the nation as well

2.5) The positive environment of classrooms encourage students to share their opinions giving a hint of what they wish to do for the nation in future



3) What can be the worse things happening in classrooms that may result in spoiling the future of students ?


3.1) Suppressing the qualities of students by making fun of them

3.2) Partiality amongst teachers that can dishearten students

3.3) Useless activities taking place in classrooms that consist of no benefit

3.4) Unhealthy discussions in classrooms that could make student's thinking negative

3.5) No check or strictness in classrooms enabling students to adapt harmful things and addictions



4) How will these points negatively effect the future of the nation?


4.1) Suppressing the qualities of students can make them under confident resulting in lose of passion to do something for the nation

4.2) Biased teachers may result in causing mental torture for students leading to the loss of future qualifiers of the nation

4.3) Useless activities can make students unproductive which may result in loosing abilities that are needed by nation in future

4.4) Negative thinking of students due to unhealthy discussions may involve them in crimes which will be quite harmful for the nation's future

4.5) Harmful things and addictions may be life threatening for students making them irresponsible about themselves and nation's future as well


5) What measures can be taken to prevent these highlighted issues, saving the future of the students and nation (as well)?

5.1) Annual counseling sessions should take place in classrooms to motivate students to do something for the nation's future

5.2) Monthly mental health check-up should be held in classrooms to prevent every sort of mental illness giving students a chance to focus on themselves and nation's future

5.3) Talent shows and events should be held frequently to help students in finding their hidden abilities that can be used to help the nation flourish in future

5.4) Conduct a daily 45 minutes lecture for students to make them aware of the responsibilities that they hold regarding their nation

5.5) Hire some people specifically to keep a check on students in classrooms in order to stop them from being involved in harmful activities


6) Apart from classrooms, what are the other factors considering students that play a vital role in deciding the future of the nation?

6.1) The upbringing of students making them either ethical or non serious regarding the nation's future

6.2) The amount of resources available for students that can be used to brighten nation's future

6.3) The role model and inspiration of students that may effect student's thinking making them think either positive or negative about nation's future

6.4) The daily tasks of students that can make them either productive or hopeless about nation's future

6.5) The cultures and traditions followed in society can make students either passionate or of no use for the nation and it's future

7) Conclusion (agreed to the statement

There are many negative points in your outline.

First, it's very long outline. I counted words and they came to be around 650, which is very huge number. Try to reduce it to 15-18 arguments, divided into 3-5 main bullets.

Secondly, you should try to write phrases instead of full sentences; it would save time and give better look. Moreover, there is no need to write statements in question form. Try writing them in simple statements.

Avoid unnecessary points and directly target the topic. Like 1.2 and complete point 3. Further, each argument should prove within itself that how classrooms decides the future of a nation. Your outline lacks strong arguments.

If you're beginner, I would suggest you to first focus on English writing and cover your other subjects. They help a lot in giving you many arguments for your essay. Apart from that, you should gather some material first on a given topic and only then write a essay/ outline on it.

[Prettydoll]

Thank youuu sooo very much sir...Your feedback means alot..... I'll keep in mind all these points and will improve InshAllah. JazakAllah