please check my topic

[shoaib35]

Salam to all members .I have posted my topic "Democracy in Pakistan" .So,I requested to all respected csps and members ,who have grip in english,kindely check my mistakes in spelling,punctuation,grammer,and specially in unity and coherence in the paragraphs . THANKS


DEMOCRACY IN PAKISTAN

Outline
1.Introduction
a.Definition
b.Background history
2.Democracy in Pakistan
a.Political instability
b.Military coups
3.Solution
a.Education
b.Good governance
c.Transparent election system

Democracy means the government of the people ,in which people elect their representatives. And these representatives govern the system according to the consensus of the people.However Democracy has its roots in an ancient Greece .And other cultures have also contributed in the evolution of Democracy such as ;Europe, America and ancient Roman empire. These countries successed in their national development after the emerged of democracy. So Democracy plays an effective role in any society.

Democarcy in Pakistan has not seen since its independence. After the demise of Quaid-e-Azam and the assassination of Liaquat Ali khan ,our political system went into the hands of greedy persons. They had their own interests in government instead of the interests of the people. Moreover, the military coups in Pakistan also affected the path of the Democracy. In 65 years, the military dictators ruled in Pakistan more than three decades. These Military rulers never allowed true democracy in Pakistan.However the islamisation salogan of Zia-ul-haq and the policy of non NATO ally of the US in war on terror by musharraf vanished the true sprits of Democracy. These emergences of Military dictators are due to the presence of political instability in Pakistan.

However, Pakistan would be a Democratic country if we promote education. This education must be equally promoted to both poor and rich people. Moreover, democracy is also comes by good governance. Unless good governance is present in our society the democracy can’t come. Moreover, the transparent election system also provides the Democracy. So we have to elect good and honest representatives during transparent election system. By doing all these things effectively we would be able to see true Democracy in our country. And this elected Democratic government would govern the system according to the consensus of the people.

[SA Haider]

Originally Posted by shoaib35

Salam to all members .I have posted my topic "Democracy in Pakistan" .so,I requested to all respected csps and members ,who have grip in english,kindely check my mistakes in spelling.grammer,and specially in unity and coherence in the paragraphs . THANKS


DEMOCRACY IN PAKISTAN

Outline
1.Introduction
a.Definition
b.Background history
2.Democracy in Pakistan
a.Political instability
b.Military coups
3.Solution
a.Education
b.Good governance
c.Transparent election system

Democracy means the government of the people ,in which people elect their representatives. And these representatives govern the system according to the consensus of the people.However Democracy has its roots in an ancient Greece .And other cultures have also contributed in the evolution of Democracy such as ;Europe, America and ancient Roman empire. These countries successed in their national development after the emerged of democracy. So Democracy plays an effective role in any society.

Democarcy in Pakistan has not seen since its independence. After the demise of Quaid-e-Azam and the assassination of Liaquat Ali khan ,our political system went into the hands of greedy persons. They had their own interests in government instead of the interests of the people. Moreover, the military coups in Pakistan also affected the path of the Democracy. In 65 years, the military dictators ruled in Pakistan more than three decades. These Military rulers never allowed true democracy in Pakistan.However the islamisation salogan of Zia-ul-haq and the policy of non NATO ally of the US in war on terror by musharraf vanished the true sprits of Democracy. These emergences of Military dictators are due to the presence of political instability in Pakistan.

However, Pakistan would be a Democratic country if we promote education. This education must be equally promoted to both poor and rich people. Moreover, democracy is also comes by good governance. Unless good governance is present in our society the democracy can’t come. Moreover, the transparent election system also provides the Democracy. So we have to elect good and honest representatives during transparent election system. By doing all these things effectively we would be able to see true Democracy in our country. And this elected Democratic government would govern the system according to the consensus of the people.

Though I am not master in english yet I will suggest to skip background history from outline and include it a bit in introduction. Prime focus should be on democracy in Pakistan. Its my opinion. I can be wrong if seniors can advise.

[Sarmad Ehsan]

Bro ,

I don't wanna hurt you but to let you know , this approach will not suffice to pass Essay paper. I would suggest to read HUNK007 THREAD IN essay section where he has input some guidelines from a good teacher

[shoaib35]

Originally Posted by Sarmad Ehsan

Bro ,

I don't wanna hurt you but to let you know , this approach will not suffice to pass Essay paper. I would suggest to read HUNK007 THREAD IN essay section where he has input some guidelines from a good teacher

thanx for your corperation i know in css essays are long and i can write long essays but my typing speed is not good to type the long essays it is just a breif summary and my question is not to check my essay it about my english writing which i asked in the above post thanx

[Sarmad Ehsan]

Bro, your writing expression is alright but make sure you must observe the somewhat exact patter how Dawn Newspaper presents its article. The inductive reasoning approach.

[Mr Bhatti]

Originally Posted by Sarmad Ehsan

Bro, your writing expression is alright but make sure you must observe the somewhat exact patter how Dawn Newspaper presents its article. The inductive reasoning approach.

Sir, please brief about inductive reasoning

[Sarmad Ehsan]

Matey,

You hit the exact topic without givivg its definition and background history. Just exclude these conventional approach that is almost become obsolete these days. From very precise introduction describing the exact topic in first para , use the SWOT ANALYSIS conception to expand the said issue. Now take the issue at Intl level and expand it. Cone to the domestic level and present the extant on national, regional and individual level. Once done, start paraphrasing the RCA- root cause analysis. Make sure you succinctly elaborate the causes and consequences of the said topic with PESTLE APPROACH. At the end before the apropos , don't forget to give remidies.

I would suggest to go thru Dawn Newspaper Article these days and try to comprehend the structure there. Try to avoid spellings mistakes, grrammar should be reasonably good enough with conventional sentence construct. Don't worry for vocabulary , if the aforementioned are taken into account; normal vocab will fetch good marks.

PESTLE: POLITICAL, ECONOMIC, SOCIAL, TECHNOLOGICAL , ENVIRONMENTAL.

SWOT: Strength, Weaknesses, Opportunities, Threats

[Sarmad Ehsan]

To play safe , always try to hit the topics where you get to have input Facts more and Arguement less. This is how I take it. Nevertheless, every individual takes pie of his taste but this is my observation. Energy crisis, Desaster management, Pollution, Economies, Education, UNO , these are facts based topics. Where Women, Islam, Quotations include more arguements with less facts. Notwithstanding, perception, prejudice, biaseness, exposure are amongst those factors which might bring abyss( from examiner point of view).

Cheers
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