first ever attempt on essay, please check my oultline and comment

umairlatif · #1 Monday, April 29, 2013

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Flaws in Pakistan education system

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Introduction

Importance of education
education as aconstructive factor
objectives

Multiple education system

cambridge education system
Pakistan's scondary education system
Madaris system

Problems

outdated curriculum
inadequately qualified faculty
absence of teachers
lack of professionalism
severe punishments to students
bad examination system
cramming instead of understanding
promotion of tuitions/academies
difference of teaching methods create confusion
emphasis on just passing the exam
political interference

Effects

lack of self confidence
unequipped with practical specialties required in the job market
producing clerks
unemployment
frustration
No worth in the world

Remedies

up-to-date curriculum
Right man in the right place
latest teaching methods
increase Education budget
examination system should check the clarity of ideas
unprofessional teachers should be fired
political interference should be checked
need to implement the laws and slogans (Maar nahi Pyar)

Conclusion

adeel abdullah · #2 Monday, April 29, 2013

Quote:

Originally Posted by umairlatif

[INDENT]

Flaws in Pakistan education system

[/
INDENT]
Introduction

Importance of education
education as aconstructive factor
objectives

Multiple education system

cambridge education system
Pakistan's scondary education system
Madaris system

Problems

outdated curriculum
inadequately qualified faculty
absence of teachers
lack of professionalism
severe punishments to students
bad examination system
cramming instead of understanding
promotion of tuitions/academies
difference of teaching methods create confusion
emphasis on just passing the exam
political interference

Effects

lack of self confidence
unequipped with practical specialties required in the job market
producing clerks
unemployment
frustration
No worth in the world

Remedies

up-to-date curriculum
Right man in the right place
latest teaching methods
increase Education budget
examination system should check the clarity of ideas
unprofessional teachers should be fired
political interference should be checked
need to implement the laws and slogans (Maar nahi Pyar)

Conclusion

the essay is quite elaborative and comprehensive,but still needs some solid and impressive arguments to be inserted in the outline. for example, national education policies to be touched, their main points and implementation and failures to be discussed. allocation of budget is also important in the development of education system. simillarly, commercialization and privatization of education have created many problems. these things should be the vital parts of the essay on education that can earn good marks in return.

umairlatif · #3 Wednesday, May 01, 2013

Thanks a lot ......
please also tell me if the "Effects" should be touched in the topic or does it make it going a bit away from the topic.....i hv gone through a couple of books but they have not talked abt the effects....

Muhammad T S Awan · #4 Friday, May 10, 2013

A good effort.

I think there is no need to write effects because it may be difficult for you to cover whole essay in three hours by adding effects. However, if the examiner is asking for effects then should include it.

kamran_shaikh · #5 Friday, May 10, 2013

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Originally Posted by umairlatif

[INDENT]

Flaws in Pakistan education system

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Introduction

Importance of education(This heading also covers the objective and education as a constructive factor.Ergo, there was no need of seregation as u have done below and this is in concurrence with the main topic so no need to accentuate this side.Be to the point)
education as aconstructive factor
objectives

Multiple education system

cambridge education system
Pakistan's scondary education system
Madaris system

Problems(It would have been better,if u had written like this as this heading needs to be synchronized with ur topic--Flaws in Education System in Pakistan)

outdated curriculum
inadequately qualified faculty
absence of (required )teachers
lack of professionalism
severe punishments to students (Write simply: Corporal Punishment)
bad examination system (Obsolete examination system)
cramming instead of understanding
promotion of tuitions/academies
difference of teaching methods create confusion
emphasis on just passing the exam
political interference
-Copy culture
-Tarnished Infrastructure
-Not adequate resources(only 2.1 of total GPD% compare it with india, iran, Bangladesh, China)
-Corruption in education system
-Ghost schools
-ineffective education administration
-No quality education for poora
-Unemplyement, poerty , inflation etc restrain parents from shouldering education expenses of thier children.

Effects

lack of self confidence
unequipped with practical specialties required in the job market
producing clerks
unemployment
frustration
No worth in the world

Remedies

up-to-date curriculum
Right man in the right place
latest teaching methods
increase Education budget
examination system should check the clarity of ideas
unprofessional teachers should be fired
political interference should be checked
need to implement the laws and slogans (Maar nahi Pyar)

Conclusion

Going good...