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I wrote my essay on this topic. Please check my outline and tell me if it's any good.


1-Introduction
2-Current world scenario
  • Rise of nationalism
  • Donald Trump and US/Steve Bandon and anti Muslim rhetoric
  • EU refugee crisis, Brexit
  • Indian nationalism under Modi
3-Evolution of nation state
  • Peace of Westohalia
  • French Revolution
  • Unification of Italy and Germany
  • End of Colonialism
4-Minorities in a modern nation state
  • often sidelined
  • not granted equal opportunities
  • lack of development
  • often take up arms against the state
5-Real world examples of conflicts between minorities and state
  • Balkans
  • Breakup of USSR
  • Kurdish independence movements
  • Kashmir
6-Presence of minorities doesn't mean violence is necessary
  • US, multiculturalism
  • Modern Russia, more than 23 ethnic groups
  • India, hugely diverse states with very few secessionist movements
7-Pakistan, a nation of multiple nationalities
  • Pre 1971, Pashtunistan and Bengali movements
  • Bengali independence, harsh lesson learned
  • Post 1971, movements all but finished due to democratic process, rights for everyone
8-Nationalism isn't inherently violent
  • Rigid Nation state boundaries only in areas with intense historic conflicts e.g. Europe
  • Minorities can live peacefully in areas that have experienced relative peace e.g. US
  • Peace, development guarantee that minorities feel inclusive
9-Reccomendations
  • Equal opportunities for everyone
  • Promote shared values and culture
  • Promote education of other cultures to increase ethnic tolerance
  • Justice and freedom for everyone
  • Relative autonomy (Iraqi Kurdistan example, 18th ammendment)
  • Development of all people equally
  • Stop hate speech against minorities
  • International safeguards for the rights of minorities
10-Conclusion


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In my humble opinion, essay was composed of 2 statements. The first statement was presented as a fact and the writer was asked to justify it. Your essay tackles that part handsomely. But the second statement was a question. And you were asked to provide arguments either in favor or against it. I feel it is a bit lacking on that part. Keywords were 'minorities', 'nationalism' and 'inclusive'. You wrote a great deal about the first too but in the outline you just mentioned inclusiveness in a subheading.Again, its just my own personal opinion. Best of luck for the result..
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Here is the rough sketch of my outline in today's essay. I opted the following topic. Kindly do comment and suggestions are desperately needed.
Is colonoial mentality impeding Pakistan's growth ?
Introduction
Its been 70 years that we get rid of collnialosm but the remains of colonial system are still existing in our society.......
Remains of colonial system :
》Fedualism
》Bureaucratic Culture
》Elite and aristocracy rules the majority
》Divide and rule formula still exists
》 DIVISIONS IN THE NAME
1• RELIGION
2•ETHNICITY
3•REGIONAL DIVISIONS ETC
》Minority rules majority etc..
Pakistan's progress is not directly linked with colonial mindset but it has some other aspevts as well .
》POLITICAL ISSUES
1. POLITICAL CRISIS
2.LACK OF POLITICAL WILL
3. MILITARY INTERVENTIONS
4.UNSTABLE DEMOCRATIC CULTURE
5.PROVINCIAL DISINTEGRATION etc....
IMPACTS OF THIS COLONIAL MINDSET IN PAKISTAN'S DEVELOPMENT
COMPARISON AND CONTRAST WOTH INDIA :
As India was also a colony of Britain but they get rid of thus colonial mindset .
》BY
1. LAND REFORMS
2.NO MILITARY INTERVENTUONS
3.ESTABLISHING A TRUE DEMOCRATIC CULTURE.
4. REFORMS IN CIVIL SERVICE STRUCTURE ETC.....
WAY FORWARD ...
CONCLUSION .....
Can you post your complete essay here?
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I wrote my essay on the topic of minorities and nationalities. Here is my outline. Can seniors please tell me if it's any good or not?

1-Introduction
2-Current world scenario
* Rise of nationalism
* Donald Trump and US/Steve Bandon and anti Muslim rhetoric
* EU refugee crisis, Brexit
* Indian nationalism under Modi

3-Evolution of nation state
* Peace of Westohalia
* French Revolution
* Unification of Italy and Germany
* End of Colonialism

4-Minorities in a modern nation state
* often sidelined
* not granted equal opportunities
* lack of development
* often take up arms against the state

5-Real world examples of conflicts between minorities and state
* Balkans
* Breakup of USSR
* Kurdish independence movements
* Kashmir

6-Presence of minorities doesn't mean violence is necessary
* US, multiculturalism
* Modern Russia, more than 23 ethnic groups
* India, hugely diverse states with very few secessionist movements

7-Pakistan, a nation of multiple nationalities
* Pre 1971, Pashtunistan and Bengali movements
* Bengali independence, harsh lesson learned
* Post 1971, movements all but finished due to democratic process, rights for everyone

8-Nationalism isn't inherently violent
* Rigid Nation state boundaries only in areas with intense historic conflicts e.g. Europe
* Minorities can live peacefully in areas that have experienced relative peace e.g. US
* Peace, development guarantee that minorities feel inclusive

9-Reccomendations
* Equal opportunities for everyone
* Promote shared values and culture
* Promote education of other cultures to increase ethnic tolerance
* Justice and freedom for everyone
* Relative autonomy (Iraqi Kurdistan example, 18th ammendment)
* Development of all people equally
* Stop hate speech against minorities
* International safeguards for the rights of minorities

10-Conclusion

What do senior members feel about this, is it good or not?

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This is my outline:

1. Introduction
1.1. Peace - a prerequisite for human growth and sustainable development
1.2. Increasing military engagements by UN - a prevalent issue
1.3. THESIS STATEMENT
2. International military engagements by UN since 2000:
2.1. Afghanistan - the war on terror since 2001
2.2. Iraq - in search of WMDs
2.3. Syria - installation of democratic regime & fight against terrorism
2.4. Palestine - historical conflict
2.5. Iran - sanction & militarization of region
2.6. North Korea - deterrence against nuclear threat
2.7. South China Sea - militarization of region by UNSC members
2.8. Crimea - annexation by Russia & UNSC
3. Reasons for the engagements:
3.1. Historical legacy & conflicts
3.2. Fight against terrorism
3.3. Deterrence against nuclear devastation
3.4. National interests of super powers
3.5. Power politics
3.6. Regional conflicts - Syria, Kashmir
4. Is the world moving towards peace?
No. Why?
4.1. Dialogue & War do not go hand in hand
4.2. Military engagements promote mistrust due to security dilemma
4.3. Use of economy for militarization instead of development
4.4 Devastation due to military engagements
5. Can there by peace?
Yes. How?
5.1. Solution of disputes through peace talks
5.2. Use of diplomacy to avoid conflicts
5.3. Confidence Building Measures (CBMs)
5.4. Bridging the economic gap between Global South & Global North
5.5. Focus on social development
5.6. Promotion of interfaith harmony & role of UN
6. Conclusion

In your opinion, is it passable?
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Aristocrat,

You were going so good. If you could only have continued like that! Saray points de k end pe aap ne keh dia progress ka is se taluq he nahi. Saari raat rotay rahay aur mara koi bhi nahi wala muhaawra hogya! The bold part is totally irrelevant and agar ap fail hue (which is a chance, as this is year of the essay) to isi liye haun ge. Acha bhala essay khud he bigar dia. Good luck anyway

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Your points 1,2, and 3 are totally irrelevant. If this is essay year, you are also in the danger zone. Besides, your outline is not self explanatory. Good luck though.
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Your first 4 points are totally irrelevant. Even after that, you failed to address the main question of the essay. Sorry to be so straightforward, but I think this won't make it.
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I wrote my essay on the topic of minorities and nationalities. Here is my outline. Can seniors please tell me if it's any good or not?

1-Introduction
2-Current world scenario
* Rise of nationalism
* Donald Trump and US/Steve Bandon and anti Muslim rhetoric
* EU refugee crisis, Brexit
* Indian nationalism under Modi

3-Evolution of nation state
* Peace of Westohalia
* French Revolution
* Unification of Italy and Germany
* End of Colonialism

4-Minorities in a modern nation state
* often sidelined
* not granted equal opportunities
* lack of development
* often take up arms against the state

5-Real world examples of conflicts between minorities and state
* Balkans
* Breakup of USSR
* Kurdish independence movements
* Kashmir

6-Presence of minorities doesn't mean violence is necessary
* US, multiculturalism
* Modern Russia, more than 23 ethnic groups
* India, hugely diverse states with very few secessionist movements

7-Pakistan, a nation of multiple nationalities
* Pre 1971, Pashtunistan and Bengali movements
* Bengali independence, harsh lesson learned
* Post 1971, movements all but finished due to democratic process, rights for everyone

8-Nationalism isn't inherently violent
* Rigid Nation state boundaries only in areas with intense historic conflicts e.g. Europe
* Minorities can live peacefully in areas that have experienced relative peace e.g. US
* Peace, development guarantee that minorities feel inclusive

9-Reccomendations
* Equal opportunities for everyone
* Promote shared values and culture
* Promote education of other cultures to increase ethnic tolerance
* Justice and freedom for everyone
* Relative autonomy (Iraqi Kurdistan example, 18th ammendment)
* Development of all people equally
* Stop hate speech against minorities
* International safeguards for the rights of minorities

10-Conclusion

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I opted the same topic. But the following outline looks better than mine and the above.

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1-Preamble
2-Growing trend of Nationalism
3-Fate of the minorities
A- Hindu and Christian Minorities of Pakistan
B-French Nationalism and Muslims
C- Kurdish Minority in Turkey
D- Minorities in America
E- India and Nationalism.
4-Why is nationalism not inclusive
A- Flawed Definition
B- Stereotypical Views
C- Media Biases
5- Beacons of hope
A- Example of Canda
B-Example of Switzerland
6-The need for Inclusive Nationalism
7- How can it be inclusive
A- Positive Definition
B- Eliminating "Us vs Them" mentality
C- Educational reforms
D- Political Inclusiveness
8-What Inclusive nationalism will look like.
9-Conclusion

I might be missing a point or two. But overall structure is here.




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My outline (Topic#7: Being a minority is a fate no one wants, can nationalism be really inclusive):
1)Introduction
2)Causes:
a)War on Terror
b)Refugee Crisis
c)Immigrants
d)Unemployment
e)Ecoomic Failures
3)Evidences:
a)Brexit
b)Trump's triumph
c)National Front Party in France
d)Far-right parties in Germany, Greece and Austria
e)Suppressed Muslims in Modi's India
f)Myanmar's Rohingya Muslims
g)Duterte of Philippines
h)Creation of South Sudan
4)Bright Side:
a)Justin Trudeau of Canada
b)Legislations for minorities by Sindh Assembly
c)Angela Merkal's policies
5)Wayforward:
a)Role of UN
b)Teachings of Islam
6)Conclusion
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I opted the same topic. But the following outline looks better than mine and the above.



By the way, mine is here:
Yeah, I'm not very hopeful of clearing the exams after some people have pointed out the obvious fallacies in my essay. I'm quite hopeful I'll be able to clear other exams though, and not everybody gets it right the first time, right. I'll practice harder for the essays next time

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Yeah, I'm not very hopeful of clearing the exams after some people have pointed out the obvious fallacies in my essay. I'm quite hopeful I'll be able to clear other exams though, and not everybody gets it right the first time, right. I'll practice harder for the essays next time

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Don't lose hope.
I went through similar issue in today's current affairs paper.
Not fully understanding the question and if initially I did understand, I got deviated later (while writing) from what was reuirement of the question.
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Don't lose hope.
I went through similar issue in today's current affairs paper.
Not fully understanding the question and if initially I did understand, I got deviated later (while writing) from what was reuirement of the question.
Is this your first time taking the exams too?

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