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Gender inequality in Pakistan

Pakistan is suffering from the issue of gender inequality in this male chauvinistic society. Women are not given their due rights. They are deprived of education, employment and Social Justice. They are killed on the name of honour. In simple words, women are made escape goat for men in our society.
It is unfortunate for women that they have to face a number of problems in their daily life. They are not given their right of education. This is the reason that more than 44 % of school going girls cannot continue their studies after middle level education. On workplaces, no true respect is given to the female workers. Often ,they have to bear sexual harassment and social pressure from their opposite gender. They are offered friendship from their male seniors for rapid promotion in employment. They have no right of choice and if ,unluckily, they marry with their consent , they are killed publicly and most of them are made a sign of warning by cutting their nose and hair. On domestic level, an angry husband beats his wife even on minor mistakes but no case is reported to police just because of social dominance of men in our society.
In short , women are valuable citizens of our society. They must be given true respect and their dignity. To end this cruelty, concrete steps should be taken by the government as well as on individual level by discouraging feudalism ,sexual harassment and male dominance. They must be given their due rights of education and prosperity so that they can play the role in progress of Pakistan.

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In the male dominated society of Pakistan, gender inequality is rampant with women being marginalized in almost every sphere of personal and professional lives. (Clear stance in the opening sentence). Typical uneducated families only consider male child as the bread earners and therefore, pay little or no attention to the education and schooling of the female. According to World Bank statistics, female literacy rate in Pakistan stands at 45% as compared to 69% of that of male. (Support of stance with data and logic).

Can you please rewrite entire paragraph in this format (Title Sentence and then support of stance with data, logic and reason. Ending sentence must summarize the findings of para)

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Gender disparity in Pakistan

Women are not treated equally as men in Pakistani Society. They are being marginalized and are deprived of their basic rights. Often, they are considered second Citizens of Pakistan. They have no role in decision-making even within the family. Man has superiority over woman. Role of women is confined to cooking and other domestic duties only. She's not given even a single chance to play her role in progress of this country.
Male chauvinistic Society and dominance of feudal mindset are the reasons behind this issue. Particularly in rural areas, feudal lords / Vadairas are economically rich but mentally very poor. So, they consider women as their slaves.Gender disparity exists not only in our country but many other countries like India, African countries and even Western countries are seen infected with this social disease. One may see thousands of news on printed electronic media about sexual harassment and domestic violence on women. In Pakistan, many of us know about Mukhtaraan Mai , a hafiz-e-Quran female, who became victim of gang rape just because of gender inequality and no rule of law. In most of the cases, women have to become escape goats for men. Vani ,Karokari and marriage with the Holy Quran still exist in our society.
No doubt, gender disparity has become a critical issue of our country but still it can be controlled through education of women, provision of their basic rights, rule of law, true respect and dignity for working women and end of feudalism. Moreover, media can play its role to promote real value of women in Islam and our society as well.

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