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Originally Posted by supergenius
I have a querry. Thesis statement is what you percieve out of the issue topic. Question is, where should I place it.
1. On top of outline, before intro n every thing?
2. Begin the essay with TS and then separately begin the intro para?
3. Or, make it the beginning of intro part
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Dear,its already been discussed
here
@hazlenut
Dude,you need a lot of effort to develop maturity in writing bz in contrasting essays,you ought to develop a clear cut and to the point stance which is missing in your essay.For example throughout the passage you remained indifferent towards the progressive secularism,but here notion changed out of sudden boon,
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Why states with religion fail:
• Vested interests
• Hard-liner clerics
• Sectarianism
• Extremism
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Some repetitions,
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• Guidelines for everyday life
• Guidelines for scientific advancements
• Guidelines for morality
• Guidelines on freedoms
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But your introduction is more than superb one,particularly thesis statement is very accurate and it will develop strong essence of coherency and smooth flow in your all paras,provided you stick to it.
Hope remaining issues will be fixed very smoothly.
