Originally Posted by Tahir Nabi

No snowflake in an Avalanche ever feels responsible
1. Thesis Statement
2. Introduction
3. Elucidation of this Philosophical thought cognitively; coined by Great French enlightenist: Voltaire
4. Retrospection of History; where this realm had been implemented.
I. Fall of Empires: Roman, Abbasid and Ottoman.
II. Colonization by Imperialist states; resulting mass havocs and massacres.
III. French Revolution: From a peaceful demand of rights to bloodsheded Avalanche (Chaos).
IV. Nazi’s Barbarism and Mussolini’s Fascism; who were responsible for that human catastrophe: either both nations or both Psychopath Duo (Hitler and Mussolini).
5. Contemporary Epitomes of this Philosophical notion.
I. Middle East’s Arab Spring: Unleashed chaos and Destruction in the Region.
II. Global warming: A monstrous threat unconsciously created by us.
III. USA’s creation of Afghan Mujahedeen; an exiguous sparking ignites blaze of terrorism, extremism and fundamentalism.
IV. Who is responsible for the creation of Frankenstein monster aka ISIS; no one feels responsible.
V. Socio-political and economic catastrophe in African, Arab and South Asian World; Responsibility of UNO or G20s?
VI. Conundrum of Syrian Avalanche: which include mass killing, human migration and destruction of a state.
6. Lethargy of our Society on the societal embarrassing issues, and growing societal lassitude at human’s rights violation.
I. Rampant growing Women’s abuse: Rape, Honour Killing, Acid Attacks, gender discrimination and Sexual harassment. Role of Men?
II. Extensive increase in Inter-faith and Inter-sect Intolerance, responsibility of State and Society?
III. Religious Extremism, Fundamentalism; Role of Ulemas.
IV. Apathetic attitude of masses in Sindh and Baluchistan towards their corrupt, impotent and inefficient government.
V. Pakistan’s national mantra of Cross-roads from 67 years and cauldron of various crises; does anyone take responsibility?
7. Pragmatic way to stop the disastrous Avalanche from falling, and creating snowflake’s awareness of responsibility.
I. Locke, Rousseau and Voltaire Philosophical anticipation to be cautious from this Avalanche.
II. Curbing the causes which leads to Fall the Avalanche i.e. Human rights violation, Imperialism, hegemonic designs by states, Proxies and Societal issues.
III. Responsibility of global forums: UNO, WTO, WHO, SAARC, SCO, CW, G20s.
IV. Individual own moral responsibility; views of Kantian and Mills Ethics.
V. Promotion of Peace, harmony, tolerance by states, scholars and religious lords.
VI. Call for collective responsibility for spatial issues by UNO.
8. Critical Analysis


If we leap into nimiety of historical events, there is a vivid visualization of certain destruction, change, dormant stability or a cauldron of crisis; assuredly, there would be an explicit abundance of reasons, causes and raison deter of aforementioned realms. Furthermore, there would be also embarkation of sensual, ethical or actual responsibility of these phenomena. Consequently, this will create some distinct responses; one would refuse to take this responsibility or other will ask for shared responsibility. Contrary to that, there will be some, who will be unaware of any created mesh, and eventually will say ‘I am not responsible for this Avalanche-typo challenge or menace’.

Francois-Marie Arouet aka Voltaire, a renowned French thinker, enlightenist and propagator of Free speech during French enlightenment, anticipated this notion prudently during the worst humanitarian crisis in French tyrant monarchy. Predicting a havoc due to rising anguish attitude and furiousness of masses, Voltaire said ‘No snowflake in an Avalanche ever feels responsible’. Here Voltaire cautioned the authoritarians to fear from that incoming destructible phase; and warned that for this unleashed anguish no one will take responsibility.

Retrospection of History gives vehement view of Voltaire’s philosophical anticipation. There were many glorious and stupendous empires, whose territorial range touched other continents. Additionally, their cultural, political and religious colours reached in every nook and corner of the world. However, when these empires lost moral, political and social support due to their imperialistic and oligarchic policies; their prestigious Olympus fallen destructively into deep history of lessons. Ironically these great empires were Roman, Abbasid and Ottoman. Moreover, colonizer and imperialist state showed same atrocities and monstrosities of masses in the African, Australian, North American and South-Asian countries; and they were unaware or being apathetic of what they had manifested: a bloody Avalanche.

Originally Posted by hazelnut

Religion vs. secularism- what cures humanity.
Outline:
 Introduction: Despite the unignorable importance of physical needs, mankind’s solace lies only in the fulfilment of its spiritual needs. These spiritual needs can’t be satisfied by any worldly source but only by divinity.
 Problems of humanity today:
• Extremism, human rights violations, civil wars, socioeconomic disparity, nuclear proliferation
 What is state religion
 Difference between state religion and theocracy
 Need of religion:
• Spiritual needs of human beings
• Guidelines for everyday life
• Guidelines for scientific advancements
• Guidelines for morality
• Guidelines on freedoms
 Why states with religion fail:
• Vested interests
• Hard-liner clerics
• Sectarianism
• Extremism
 Problems with secular states
• They are not really secular
• Unfettered freedoms lead to issues like homosexuality and freedom of expression
• Morals change according to national interest
 Conclusion

Introduction: Despite the unignorable importance of physical needs, mankind’s solace lies only in the fulfilment of its spiritual needs. These spiritual needs can’t be satisfied by any worldly source but only by divinity. Today the humanity is plagued with issues ranging from blatant human rights violation to rise of extremism, from threat of nuclear proliferation to climate change and from civil wars to the lingering grievances of the global south. In such an abysmal state of affairs, the search for an elixir leads us to the dilemma of choosing between religion and secularism. Although theocracy is often mistaken for having a state religion but still religion is the more effective panacea. Because only religion is capable of answering all the difficult questions about this universe and man himself. Moreover, religion provides the guideline for daily life, science and morality. Without religion, human mind is led astray onto path of unfettered freedoms and pernicious liberties. The only reason for the failure of the states with a state religion is that the leaders hand over the state affairs to orthodox clerics. And then these clerics and leaders collude to abuse the power for their vested interests and give rise to evils like sectarianism and extremism. Further, the innate tendency of man to seek refuge in religion results in the so called secular states also being more favourable for one religion or the other. Also the morals of these states keep altering with the leaders, the ruling parties and the circumstances. Resultantly these states in the frenzy of achieving national interest inflict irremediable wounds on the soul of humanity. Hence it is clear that, as Iqbal said in his famous verse, if religion is separated from politics, the only result is barbarity.

Originally Posted by supergenius

I have a querry. Thesis statement is what you percieve out of the issue topic. Question is, where should I place it.

1. On top of outline, before intro n every thing?
2. Begin the essay with TS and then separately begin the intro para?
3. Or, make it the beginning of intro part

Originally Posted by princeling

Suffering Soul in Scientific Age

Thesis statement : Rapid scientific advancements in communication ,warfare, medicines and economy have also enhanced moral , spiritual and emotional woes and troubles for the mankind.science has augmented sufferings of human beings .

a. introduction

b. quest for materialism has created unprecedented troubles for the soul
1.avarice for luxury and comfort has put the inherent human compassion and values at stake
2.phenomenal monetory gains through new modes of business and earning money are widening sufferings of deprived strata of societies
3.psychological and mental problems have increased manifold due to financial complications and sudden rise of financial crisis

c. scientific revolutions in communication have opened up new Pandora box of evils
1.online fake people and dangerous ideologies are enticing weak minds into world of chaos
2.family relations are experiencing deep detachment and emotional problems
3.overindulgence in online activities are distancing soul from physical activities and books
4.online social media has opened up new avenues for immoral entertainment
5.communication revolution has given rise to terrorism

d. mechanization and electronification are narrowing down sources of bread and butter for the poor soul
1.worker of today has to labour more hours than it was in the past
2.machineries have reduced many working domains of farmers
3.absolute povety across the world is on the rise

e. rain of bombs from sky are new gifts of science for the soul
1.nuclear weapons have endangered the whole civilizations
2.unmanned aircrafts are new killings machines
3.advancement and ease in availability of weapons have generated new worries for human souls

f. scientific age has also threatened the breathing air for humans
1.a case of climate change
2.present conflicts vis a vis biological and chemical weapons in perspectiv e

g. way forward
1.UNO ought to play its part in minimizing negative usage of science
2.science should be used for peaceful purposes only and fight against poverty
3.civil societies must mobilize people to create awareness about fast growing misuse of science

h. conclusion

introduction: blessings of science are countless but woes of mankind have also increased with it equally. infact, large proportion of human populations are in more trouble than they were before the arrival of science. science is affecting human domains of emotions, moral values, mental peace and even their lives .insatiable greed for materialism has brought forth new psychological and physiological worries. today, human has more opportunities of ease and comfortable life but deep inside, his soul is searching for spiritual need, his inner being is even more restless . Resentment, jealousy, frustration and irresistible desire for materialism has triggered new modes of crimes and illegal activities to which humans of past would be shocked to hear. Although ,science of communication has shrunk long distances and fused state boundaries but it has also taken away love and emotional bonds in families. moreover, science has also ushered in dangerous age of armaments and weapons due to which human soul is under constant fear of wars and deaths. Hence, while science has brought innumerable comforts in human life , it has also threatened the emotional , spiritual , mental and phsycial safety of mankind.


kindly check this essay guys please

Originally Posted by princeling

ursula please evaluate this essay as well as its introduction. i posted that before but no body commented.need your evaluation .thanks in advance

Originally Posted by Ammar9

THE WAR ON TERROR HAS CONTRIBUTED TO GROWING ABUSE OF HUMAN RIGHTS.

INTRODUCTION.
Man has been struggling for a long time for universal provision of basic human rights and this struggle is still going on. Man of ancient times had no concept of basic human rights . History reveals that holy prophet Muhammad (SAW) was the first person who advocated and emphasized the importance of human rights in his last sermon. However, in West , Magna Carta laid foundation of basic human rights and gradually the whole world acknowledged the importance of these rights. Now, legally ,human rights are provided to every human being via Universal declaration of Human rights but their abuse is rampant in every part of the world. There are many forms of violations of human rights and War is one of them . War always proved out to be a cause of violations of human rights and in recent past the war has contributed to the abuse of human rights. The violations of human rights in the name of the war on terror are not unknown and they are clearly visible and prominent in many forms. Arbitrary detention, violations of international conventions , imprudent use of drones , torture ,extra ordinary rendition , destruction of homes of innocent people ,Absence of fair trail and use of Terrorist label without confirmation and evidence ; all lends credence to this claim that War on Terror has significantly and clearly contributed to growing abuse of human rights.

Originally Posted by ursula

I simply say read first one quarter of your intro,or simply cut it and paste in ms word and than link it to the title,Is it relevant to the topic. Ofcaurse not,dear through this technique you can do the practice of relevancy of essay writing to the mentioned topic.[i had already highlighted the irrelevant material of your intro]