Asalam O Laikum,

I have to appear in CSS 2013 ... I have few problems with my English though am not bad in English but still I need to work on few areas.
I wanted my English to be as awesome as nothing and I have to do it.

I am in need of feedback on some of my writings (mostly expansions) so that I may improve my mistakes. It would be very kind if you people may manage to have few minutes for evaluating my write-ups. Additionally, I have some silly questions on English grammar that I wanted to be answered. Hope other members would also get benefit.

Moderators and senior members I am waiting for your kind responses.
Regards.

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By no means living nearer to a holy place is proportional to getting nearer to God. Conversely, living away from the church doesn't make any difference on relationship with God. This pure relationship is not a matter of outer world or physical presence. Rather it is the matter of soul - the soul - that is invisible yet very deep. It is the matter of heart - the heart - where the God resides.

Therefore, for strengthen a relation with God there is a need to work on inner self. There is a dire need to work on 'Self'. As if one finds 'Self', recognizes the demands of soul and hear the voice of heart; is indeed successful in reaching God. It is irrespective of one’s living place.

Baba Bullay shah emphasized in his poetry that praying and worship is useless unless one truly feels a strong relationship with God. Islam says, "Acts depend on intentions" advocating that prayers are of no use until ones soul and heart are not willing for so. And this is only possible when one has a strong relation with his God. Staying inside or nearer to a holy place never guarantees a pure relationship with God as it starts from soul and heart and not from Church, Temple or Mosque.

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