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@zareenkhan Very good expansion. But normally or commonly expansion comes with this title "Hope is the buoy of life" But there, "one of the finest panacea" is used for 'hope', means hope is one of the finest cure. So, in my view, nothing wrong in that sentence. |
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zareenkhan (Wednesday, May 25, 2011) |
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It’s good to see that you have power to pursue the topic given in a good and methodical way and it was a good effort. Ending was good. But if few things made better, it would be a very decent effort. 1. The sizzling narrative style required in expansion, if you know what I mean. You can say ‘maza nahi aya parh k’ 2. The repetition of a concept was there in almost every para 3. Spelling mistakes 4. Hope ki aik example bohot petty hai laikin yahan bri achi set hoti hai. Chiyoonti ka baar baar deewar chrhte girna laikin himmat na harna, this gives a lesson of hope to a super creature like us. 5. India wali example ki bjaye Kashmir/Palestine ki example do. K they are living in hope. Current scenario ki example would be great. and how about life's recipe in opening sentence instead of simple 'life'? panacea ki jaga panaceas hoga. achieve k spelling rut lo, mere wali mistake hai compells nahi compels. |
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And where were you by the way? I've been waiting for your comments for so long. Aur pata nhn kyn mujhe current scenario ki examples yad nhn parti. Anyways, thanks. |
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@Xaara
Buddy, how to improve that sizzling narrative style? Ab Kahlil Gibran parhna parega kya?
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spellings pe work out kro. sizzling style hmmmm u have tht flare in ur narration bus maintain it.stay natural and write ur heart out bus be careful about the rules of game |
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zareenkhan (Wednesday, May 25, 2011) |
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