children have no childhood in pakistan
 

the contemporary scenario of pakistan has vastly impacted upon children,whose naivety and buoyancy are taken away by plethora of problems which the country is facing today.paroxysms of violence,penury and illiteracy have marred their innocent mind.their memories are blotted by terrorism and hunger; their time spends in a garage,working as an assistant or as a scavenger, searching their livelihood through the piles of garbage.
A pakistani juvenile has to face alot of psychological traumas,some of which are due to domestic reasons but the most important one is due to the barbarism that is prevailing in the society. acts of violence like target killings, riots and bomb blasts have suppressed the mental capabilities of of children.
poverty has, perhaps, the biggest role in their miseries. not only that they face starvation on daily basis but also they are compelled to indulge in labour or ,sometimes, criminal activities to earn some bread for their family. they are negated the basic right of food, shelter and clothing. some of the children even are sexually abused while others get addicted to several forms of drugs.thus, destroying their health and future simultaneously.
the illiteracy ratio in pakistan is highest in the south asian region. the gravity of the situation can be gauged by the statistics revealed by a survey which shows that approximately 25 children lack classroom access in the country.as education is the essential tool for a successful future, these children are never provided the chance to strive for a prosperous career.today, the eyes of these children are dry,their faces are stolid and personality lacks self-confidence.children in pakistan have of suppressed emotions and they seriously lack the joyfulness of youth and the zeal to move forward.in other countries, new generation is regarded as a great asset while in pakistan they are nothing but victims of society.

Cut your coat according to your cloth
The proverb implies that one should not spend more than he can earni.e to live within his means.this applies not only to individuals, but also business establishments. No doubt, a company can take a loan to diversify or expand, but it should be done judiciously, Otherwise it can land it hot waters. In addition, Thomas Jefferson also stressed “do not spend money before you can earn it.”Similarly, the government of country should also keep in mind its resources while spending. If it keeps on borrowing money from people or foreign countries, it would ultimately become bankrupt. Therefore, the proverb has universal application.Benjamin franklin said, ”if you know how to spend less than you get, you have the philosopher’s stone”. Indeed ,it is wise to direct one’s actions in accordance to one’s circumstances and resources. On the other hand, this does not suggest that a person should not spend at al. Judicious spending means use of resources to serve the interests of all, rather than just the cost. Mary gutherir essex of England was a millionaire. she spent most of her adult life as a nurse. However, she had an enormous talent of saving money and preventing waste. She kept modest living and took great pleasure in activities that did not cost much. Ergo,the wisodom in proverb is a guideline to everyone,individual or collective units to spend wisely and not to exceed income.

[QUOTE=7ali;636868]the contemporary scenario of pakistan has vastly impacted upon children,whose naivety and buoyancy([COLOR="red"]?[/COLOR]) are taken away by([COLOR="red"]a[/COLOR]) plethora of problems which the country is facing today.paroxysms of violence,penury and illiteracy have[COLOR="red"](has[/COLOR]) marred their innocent mind.their memories are blotted by terrorism and hunger; their time spends in a garage,working as an assistant or as a scavenger, searching their livelihood through the piles of garbage.([COLOR="red"]there seem no coherence between statement before and after colon)[/COLOR]
A pakistani juvenile has to face a([COLOR="red"]space needed[/COLOR])lot of psychological traumas,some of which are due to domestic reasons (i guess putting in a full stop and starting a new sentence would be a much better idea.)but the most important one is due to the barbarism that is prevailing in the society. acts of violence like target killings, riots and bomb blasts have [COLOR="red"](has[/COLOR])suppressed the mental capabilities of of children.
poverty has, perhaps, the biggest role in their miseries. not only[COLOR="red"](comma)[/COLOR] that they face starvation on daily basis but[COLOR="red"](comma)[/COLOR] also they are compelled to indulge in labour or ,sometimes, criminal activities to earn some bread for their family. they are negated ([COLOR="red"]denied is a better option[/COLOR]) the basic right of food, shelter and clothing. some of the children even are sexually abused while others get addicted to several forms of drugs.thus, destroying their health and future simultaneously.
the illiteracy ratio([COLOR="red"]rate[/COLOR]) in pakistan is [COLOR="red"](the)[/COLOR]highest in the south asian region. the gravity of the situation can be gauged by the statistics revealed by a survey which shows that approximately 25[COLOR="red"](percent?)[/COLOR] children lack classroom access in the country.as education is the essential tool for a successful future, these children are never provided the chance to strive for a prosperous career.today, the eyes of these children are dry,their faces are stolid and personality lacks self-confidence.[COLOR="red"](the)c[/COLOR]hildren in pakistan have of [COLOR="red"](?)[/COLOR]suppressed emotions and they seriously lack the joyfulness of youth and the zeal to move forward.in other countries, new generation is regarded as a great asset while in pakistan they are nothing but victims of society.[/QUOTE]
i feel your expression is getting very complicated.forcing in difficuilt words is not a good idea.use difficuilt words wisely.don't force them.let them come naturlly.[COLOR="Red"][/COLOR]

Man gets what he strive for(Al Quran)
ALLAH PAK addressed in Quran not only to human but also to whole mankind that man will rewarded for his strugglings.this verse also has a secret of success in it.HE gifted the whole earth with HIS countless bounties which are not difficult to gain but the key to get these bounties is man’s endeavor.without hard working one can never get success in his life.however with the struggle one should also have believe on GOD. A person who only rely upon luck and leave everything on ALLAH without any strive will get nothing.as GOD help those who help themselves is the philosophy of manking. Also a well known saying “action speaks louder than words” it does not make any difference what you say. What matters is that what you do. The people who always blaming their luck, without trying to improve their circumstances, such people never achieve anything in their life. History is full of examples Pakistan in the begning was only a dream seem impossible to came on existence but with the true efforts and believe on ALLAH Quaid e azam make it possible.similarly with these aspires Dr. Abdus Salam who, when he shared award for his contribution to electroweak unification became the first Muslim and first Pakistani to receive a Nobel Prize in Physics.so it is rightly said man gets what he strive for.


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Please check my expansion
 

Salam dear seniors

I am a beginner in this forum and just started css preparation for that please check my expansion and suggest me area of improvements, this one is my 5th attempt of writing expansion.:confused:


[B][U][SIZE="2"]If winter comes, can spring be far behind?[/SIZE][/U][/B]


These words has been taken from ode of P.B Shelley which suggest there is a systematic cycle of every action in this universe which is fixed, there is death (winter) and birth (spring) cycle in same way when there is winter leaves started to get pale yellow and hectic red they started to die despite of that they does not loss hope of life and when spring comes leaves start to get beautiful green in color and their hope comes true.

In same way if there is trouble in life one should not became pessimist because there is success, lying behind failure hope should not be lost as hope is also key to success.

As Anne Lamott has exquisitely said "Hope begins in the dark” there is always a glorious and successful happy day after dark nights one should not decide their destiny by having dark times a hope must be kept and hard work never cease hope and work hard to eradicate dark then shining day is not far farther.

Man gets what he strive for(Al Quran)
ALLAH PAK(i guess not a good choice of word remove pak addressed in Quran[,) not only(comma here) to(remove to) human but([comma) also to (no to)whole mankind that man will(be) rewarded for his strugglings(]struggles).this verse also has a secret of success in it.HE gifted the whole earth with HIS countless bounties(comma) which are not difficult to gain but(comma) the key to get these bounties is man’s endeavor.without hard working(work) and [comma) one can never get success in his life.however(comma) with the( no the) struggle one should also have(no have) believe on GOD. A person who only rely(relies) upon luck and leave(leaves) everything on ALLAH without any strive(effort or striving) will get nothing.as GOD help(helps) those who help themselves(put a full stop here) is the philosophy of manking. Also a well known saying “action speaks louder than words” it does not make any difference what you say. What matters is that what you do. The people who always blaming(blame) their luck, without trying to improve their circumstances, such people never achieve anything in their life(]nice punctuation). History is full of examples(full stop) Pakistan(comma) in the begning was only a dream [and seemed) impossible to came on existence but(comma) with the true efforts and believe on ALLAH([comma) Quaid e azam make(made) it possible.similarly(comma) with these aspires Dr. Abdus Salam who, when he shared award for his contribution to electroweak unification became the first Muslim and first Pakistani to receive a Nobel Prize in Physics.so it is rightly said man gets what he strive for.


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punctuation problems are very critical.example of abdus salam doesn't fits in properly either try using better words to fit in the example or use any other example.

Evolution versus revolution
Change is inevitable. Basically,there are two types of change: evolutionary and revolutionary. evolutionary change is the change in increment that takes place gradually, over time. the slow,gradual changes ensures the survival of an organization. Generally, evolution is induced by an external force to keep up with the technology, or to address the needs of the stake holders for e.g people were not coerced,they themselves chose, to use modern gadgets. As it is rightly said, ” evolution is not something that applies simply to life here on earth, it is universal”
On the other hand, revolution is a catalyst of change- sudden deviation from stagnation.it defies the existing patterns and sets new patterns and disrupts the balance. As J.F kennedy said,”those who make peaceful revolution impossible, make violent revolution inevitable”.nothing in digital media has been immediately life changing. therefore,it is more evolutionary than revolutionary.Another difference between evolution and revolution is the agency.evolutionary change best serve the individuals needs whereas,revolutionary change occurs by individuals to comply to certain standards.The basic difference however,between evolutionary change and revolutionary change is the rate of progress and not the time.the question arises: what is better? evolutionary change or revolutionary.this depends upon the individuals.if they have deep pockets and a vision than revolutionary change is the viable option.never the less,if some one can wait for a few generations,than evolutionary change is the correct choice.
kindly,someone check my expansion and do tell me if it satisfies the need of the topic at hand.

[QUOTE=sadafnoorelahi;637341]Evolution versus revolution
Change is inevitable. Basically,there are two types of change: evolutionary and revolutionary. evolutionary change is the change in increment that takes place gradually, over time. the slow,gradual changes ensures the survival of an organization. Generally, evolution is induced by an external force to keep up with the technology, or to address the needs of the stake holders for e.g people were not coerced,they themselves chose, to use modern gadgets. As it is rightly said, ” evolution is not something that applies simply to life here on earth, it is universal”
On the other hand, revolution is a catalyst of change- sudden deviation from stagnation.it defies the existing patterns and sets new patterns and disrupts the balance. As J.F kennedy said,”those who make peaceful revolution impossible, make violent revolution inevitable”.nothing in digital media has been immediately life changing. therefore,it is more evolutionary than revolutionary.Another difference between evolution and revolution is the agency.evolutionary change best serve the individuals needs whereas,revolutionary change occurs by individuals to comply to certain standards.The basic difference however,between evolutionary change and revolutionary change is the rate of progress and not the time.the question arises: what is better? evolutionary change or revolutionary.this depends upon the individuals.if they have deep pockets and a vision than revolutionary change is the viable option.never the less,if some one can wait for a few generations,than evolutionary change is the correct choice.
kindly,someone check my expansion and do tell me if it satisfies the need of the topic at hand.[/QUOTE]
[B]it seems that you have not quite grasped the appropriate usage of comma.secondly,it would have been much better if you had given example of democratic process.nevertheless, a good attempt indeed.[/B]


[B]religion is the greatest benefactor of human race[/B]

the essential message of every religion is peace, kindness, compassion and brotherhood.for thousands of years, mankind has adopted religious codes as guiding principles for living and as an immediate law of society.as every religion urges man to be pious, the society it culminates,then,becomes the most civilized and peaceful one.
if one looks in the history, he will find that all religions brought revolution in the nations, both politically and socially.before the advent of any religion,we see that the culture and norms of that era were savage,inhumane and hideous.the nations had plunged in the abyss of darkness and vulgarity; the elite had conferred themselves the title of omnipotent.however,after the advent of religion,the society of vices transforms into an exemplary one.
for example: before islam, arabs used to slit each other throats and bury their female child.but, the impact of islam was so astonishing that the same people who were scattered and cruel became rulers of the whole world.moreover,their barbarism was dispersed and they became the epitome of human civilization.
in addition to that, the prophet of any religion had the most amazing reputation in the masses.they were the most honest, honorable and suitable people.their whole lives were a living example of truthfulness,generosity,simplicity and perfection.
all religions,whether judaism or islam or any other, have preached for the betterment of human beings.they have worked as a rallying point for the unorganized, agitated, belligerent masses.they have provided the code for progress and prosperity of man.without religion,there will be no conscience, no fear of judgement and no logical reason for human existence.the society will regress into the pre-historic era with animal instincts and savagery as the basic human tools.

Let’s agree to disagree in a agreeable way
The tolerance to respect others view is an integral part of a healthy society.conflict of ideas is not merely an essential aspect of achievement,but it also reflects the beauty of a society where different beliefs and opinions reside under an umbrella. v arigation of ideas leads to progress in science, politics and social issues.it adds variety to an otherwise insipid life.it is a part and parcel of democracy.dalai lama stated,”disagreement is something normal”.No doubt, if Einstein had not disagreed with Newtonian physics, world would have remained unaware of relativistic physics.on the social front,if nelson Mandela had not disapproved aparatheied,it is possible than violation of human rights would have continued unabated.we all have to understand that we have only one world to live in.we cannot run away from here.so the best course to adopt is to agree to disagree in a agreeable way.stifling the right to express oneself depicts intellectual ignorance.where thinking out of shell becomes a sin,we are actually endorsing mental slavery.micheal Montaigne stated, “if somebody uses force and command to establish arguments than it shows his reason is weak” indeed it is one’s weakness to force his ideas ad beliefs upon others.ergo,it is important to respect clash of views.there is only one place in the world where there is complete agreement, and that is in the graveyard, where silence rules and silence shows complete agreement.Thus,we should fiercely disagree,but in a peaceful way!

[QUOTE=7ali;637481][B]it seems that you have not quite grasped the appropriate usage of comma.secondly,it would have been much better if you had given example of democratic process.nevertheless, a good attempt indeed.[/B]


[B]religion is the greatest benefactor of human race[/B]

the essential message of every religion is peace, kindness, compassion and brotherhood.for thousands of years, mankind has adopted religious codes as guiding principles for living and as an immediate law of society.as every religion urges man to be pious, the society it culminates,then,becomes the most civilized and peaceful one.
if one looks in (into)the history, he will find that all religions brought(a) revolution in the nations, both politically and socially.before the advent of any religion,we see that the culture and norms of that era were savage,inhumane and hideous.the nations had plunged in the abyss of darkness and vulgarity; the elite had conferred themselves the title of omnipotent.however,after the advent of religion,the society of vices transforms into an exemplary one.
for example: before islam, arabs used to slit each other throats and bury their female child.but, the impact of islam was so astonishing that the same people who were scattered and cruel became rulers of the whole world.moreover,their barbarism was dispersed and they became the epitome of human civilization.
in addition to that, the prophet of any religion had the most amazing reputation in the masses.they were the most honest, honorable and suitable people.their whole lives were a living example of truthfulness,generosity,simplicity and perfection.
all religions,whether judaism or islam or any other, have preached for the betterment of human beings.they have worked as a rallying point for the unorganized, agitated, belligerent masses.they have provided the code for progress and prosperity of man.without religion,there will be no conscience, no fear of judgement and no logical reason for(the existence of human) human existence.the society will regress into the pre-historic era with animal instincts and savagery as the basic human tools.[/QUOTE]
MashaAllah, a great attempt.i m highly impressed by the way you have used your vocabulary in this paragraph.apart from a few minor grammar mistake,i think the paragraph is flawless and perfect.another suggestion would be try writing your paragraph in one tense:past tense or present tense.kindly, tell me how to improve my punctuation and do you first write paragraph with simple english?

say not the struggle naught availeth
one should never complain that all his efforts were in vain as hardwork always pays. it is a fact, no doubt, that man gets disappointed if he doesn’t achieves his goal or is not awarded with immediate success. Nevertheless, success in not achieved overnight even sun rises slowly. Like wise,one does not loses weight without persistent effort or one does not run in a marathon overnight.it is only consistency of efforts that is the key to success.Swami Vivekanand’s once quoted that,” Great work requires great and persistent effort for a long time. “.indeed,it is persistent effort that bears fruit.Therefore, one should never lose heart and get disappointed. instead, he should continue his efforts with more zest and zeal. history divulges, that only those who remained steadfast in therir endeavours proved to be successful. Mahmood ghaznavi attacked india seventeen times before he, actually, succeded. similarly,Abraham Lincoln contested elections many times in a row,but never once he won any.nevertheless,home sprange eternal in him and he continued his efforts and ultimately became the sixteen president of U.S..if one loses heart ,he is sure to be in distress.life becomes mundane and boring for him.life does not hold any attraction for him any more. Beverly sills said “you may get disappointed if you fail,but you are doomed if you don’t try”. therefore, one should keep trying persistently.