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"Nay! man is evidence against himself. Though he puts forth his excuses." Holy Qur'an (75:14-15)

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Self done is well done
This statement contains the two terms “self done” and “well done”. “Self done” term implies to the intentions and actions that a person performs by his own. The term “well done” refer to the effectiveness and efficiency of these intensions and actions in the organized way. A man is the architect of his own destiny. Destiny and success of the one relies on the efforts, deliberations, ambitions and dedication that one put in action in order to accomplish his goals and objectives of life. But they demand the inner and outer world satisfactions. Satisfactions are achieved when one carry out one’s tasks and work by oneself. Satisfactions groom the one’s abilities, self reliance and confidence which are pivotal in order to survive in the competent and modern society. The self dependent person learns the how to deal with the threats, menaces and disastrous situation. He repolishes his skills and potentials and learns new ways and tactics to deal problems. Our holy Prophet comes on the top of this list. He was used to perform his works by himself.
In contrast to the self sufficient man, a dependent man never thinks out of the box. He would be just like puppet. He will degenerate his expertise and talent. His thoughts and innovations will be limited. He will be unable to handle the problems that he faces in his life. Allay says in the Holy Quran “God help those who help themselves”. Hence the property of being self sufficient and self reliance opens the new chapters in the life of a person where he can write his own destiny.
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The Nearer the Church Farther from God

This proverb is the implicit statement which is for those who are the most involved in religious system, and are the organizers and priests. They are perceived the most pious and devoted to God. But they are farther from God with the absence of the true devotion to God. A bond which makes the strong connection to God is the true love. Religion is the name of dedicated relationship between its followers and the God. This relationship is based on the faithfulness to the God. It is not merely to bow down before the God. It is not exclusively to spend days and nights in the worship places. It is all about the bond attachment and everlasting affection which binds stoutly with God. This proverb not solely applicable to the Christians, but it is for all. The nearer from the Mosque farther from the Allah, The nearer from temple farther from the Bhuddha.
Shaitan who was known the greatest worshiper was farther From God. He was worshiper not the lover. A poet said
Molvi tu itni ibadat na kr Ishaq ke siva
per lagta hai tu Ibless se Shaitan na ban jae.
Holy Prophet says "Worship your Lord as if you see Him, if you can not do so, worship as if He see you". Jalal Din Rumi says "without love, worship is burden". Indeed who live in the place of worship, are not pious unless they are lover of God.
At the end it can be inferred that if the God is not present in the heart of the believer though he worships day and night, is farther from the God. The Nearer from God are those in whose hearts God dwells.


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The Nearer the Church Farther from God.

This proverb is the implicit statement which is for those who are the most involved in religious system, and are the organizers and priests. They are perceived the most pious and devoted to God. But they are farther from God with the absence of the true devotion to God. A bond which makes the strong connection to God is the true love. Religion is the name of dedicated relationship between its followers and the God. This relationship is based on the faithfulness to the God. It is not merely to bow down before the God. It is not exclusively to spend days and nights in the worship places. It is all about the bond attachment and everlasting affection which binds stoutly with God. This proverb not solely applicable to the Christians, but it is for all. The nearer from the Mosque farther from the Allah, The nearer from temple farther from the Bhuddha.
Shaitan who was known the greatest worshiper was farther From God. He was worshiper not the lover. A poet said
Molvi tu itni ibadat na kr Ishaq ke siva
per lagta hai tu Ibless se Shaitan na ban jae.
Holy Prophet says "Worship your Lord as if you see Him, if you can not do so, worship as if He see you". Jalal Din Rumi says "without love, worship is burden". Indeed who live in the place of worship, are not pious unless they are lover of God.
At the end it can be inferred that if the God is not present in the heart of the believer though he worships day and night, is farther from the God. The Nearer from God are those in whose hearts God dwells.

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How to expand the idea:
1- read carefully the proverb , statement, until you grasp the meaning. do not opt the proverb or statement that you do not clear about it.
2- start expanding the proverb or the statement by elucidating the meaning of the proverb or the statement.
3- explain the proverb or statement by mentioning the uses ,advantages, or the demerits.
4- give the suitable examples from the daily life, precedences of the Holy prophet (PBUH), Quran, Quid-a-e- Azam or the famous leader or the other personalities.
5- at the end conclude the whole story in one or two sentences by supporting the proverb or the idea.
6- do not use the repeated words, statements.

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Rich Men have no Fault

We live in this word with the label such as “Rich” and “Poor”. Some people are bestowed with wealth and resources while some are with the curse of poverty. People from their parents along with genes also inherit the lives with they are going to lead.
The words like “Justice” have merely existence in the dictionaries. Therefore poor should be cautious about following right path and wrong doing because law applies to them strictly. Rich men do not have to be worried for their committed illegal and bad deeds. Their money and means are sufficient to protect them from all actions which could be taken against their sins. If some rich men commit the illegal actions and some ones dare to complain of them and raise the voice against them; the mouth are bonded of these bold person and lesson is taught them that “Rich Men have no fault”. Hence in any contest where rich and poor are involved; the ultimate result is that the rich wins over the power. This is even evidence in international scenario too. For Example, the USA, the world’s super power whenever wanted to attack on any Muslim country she attacked without any proofs or evidences and violated the Human Rights. No one was and is to take action against USA. Same is the case with the Wadeera and Jageerdar (feudal) system in the Pakistan. They do injustice with the poor, violet the Human Rights, and commit the unlawful acts. The poor can not take action because they lock the mouths of the poor and educate that “Rich men have no fault”. The inequality is not a new concept. It exists from the arrival of Adam on earth. The Elder brother killed his brother because he had power. He buried his brother’s body and removed evidences. It seems like the rules are made only for the poor and powerful have no concern to these.

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