The actions and the words both have their own importance and effects. But in our daily life circle the actions have more magnitude than words.
Action is the language of communication between strangers. The act of kindness, helping a poor, showing way to a child, making a smile on a sadden face, helping a blind to cross the road; all these acts give a tremendous lesson to its surroundings.
Actions even if they are not articulated they leave a message. Abdul Sattar Edhi is not a preacher. But his acts speak much louder than the words of many others. If Edhi stands today and asks for help, millions would stand to support him. Conversely, there would be so little support for those who appear on the electronic media and boast about betterment of society.
Standing on the pulpit, one may makes a lot of claims. But these boasts are useless and hollow if they are not converted into actions.
Words, if supported by actions leave a deep message. Nelson Mandela stood and spoke for freedom, equity and no discrimination. Throughout his struggle he faced many difficulties but he never altered his motto and words. When finally, he succeeded, he implemented his words into actions. That left a far reaching impact on the world.
If you want to change the world, you should not start shouting about it. Everybody on this planet should play its part. If your actions are really good, your praise, idea and approach and would automatically float. Even if your goal is completed you should not take a pride over it. Pride would makes hindrance to achieve your next goal.
Pride, Ego and boast are the enemies of the human race they create a negative attitude in human nature. Words without actions are hollow and have no positive impact on the society. To achieve the objectives one should start by practically doing it without praising and boasting about it.

Normal, Need to work more on that.

It has a lot of grammar and punctuation mistakes. Overall, it lacks coherence. The arguments are individually sound, but not in right order in my opinion. Reasoning is fine.

So, logic: 8/10 and Coherence and organization: 5/10. You can disagree with it, but caution would be that you work on building arguments that are synchronized and logically connected.

Avoid excessive use of "The" ! Carefully read the use of "The" and "A" in any good English usage book!

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