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Hoping that someone will be helpful enough to review my work for me,I am posting this paragraph. Please let me know of your opinions(otherwise it's just a wastage of time!).

They know enough who know how to learn

It has been said that a good teacher is the one who teaches his students where to look for,not what what to look at. Learning is a continuous process,beginning from cradle and ending at grave.No one can accompany a person in this process throughout his life. It is very important that one knows how to fix one's problems. For this purpose,one has to develop the ability to analyse a situation critically but also to find new solutions. Learning is an art.Just like many other abilities like cooking and singing. knowing the art of learning could effectively liberate a person from the restrictions of peer pressure and the frustration of not having a solution to one's problems.Present age is ripe with self-learning possibilities. Internet is an excellent source of information along with entertainment. One can look for anything one needs to find out.This habit will develop self-reliance in a person enabling him to feel confident throughout his life.
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Overall, a good effort!

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Hoping that someone will be helpful enough to review my work for me,I am posting this paragraph. Please let me know of your opinions(otherwise it's just a wastage of time!).

They know enough who know how to learn

It has been said that a good teacher is the one who teaches his students where to look for,not what what to look at. Learning is a continuous process,beginning from cradle and ending at grave.No one can accompany a person in this process throughout his life. It is very important that one knows how to fix one's problems. For this purpose,one has to develop the ability to analyse a situation critically but also to find new solutions.(needs reconsidering) Learning is an art.Just like many other abilities like cooking and singing. (These two sentences should be merged)knowing the art of learning could effectively liberate a person from the restrictions of peer pressure and the frustration of not having a solution to one's problems.Present age is ripe with self-learning possibilities. Internet is an excellent source of information along with entertainment. One can look for anything one needs to find out.This habit will develop self-reliance in a person enabling him to feel confident throughout his life.
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Thank you for commenting!
Please tell me what does the yellow font color mean,I do get the red color.
I mean how should I improve the yellow part?
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Ok,Got it,actually the color was very light...
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hey Aayman, you've rightly inferred the topic. Soon, I'll be sharing my writing upon it. However, I think you could guess it like learning is an innate process but learning in a systematic way distinguishes a man from others.
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@Shahla: thanks for reading my work and well do share your thoughts soon
also could I interest you in reviewing my other work???
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Dear Aayman,
The proverb was "They know enough who know how to learn".
In my opinion, it says a person who knows how to learn a lesson from his experiences in life to development, and utilizes it to perfect his future; knows enough to lead a happy and prosperous life. Similarly, a nation who learns from its mistakes in the course of its progress, knows enough to correct them and lead others. Now one can give examples from history of some great nations.
As for your expansion, it had been relevant if the proverb were "Those know enough who know how to study". It is simply my opinion!.
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@hasnain Zafar: Thank you for your valued comments,But It would be better if you had expressed your thoughts in a paragraph!,Learning from your past mistakes would be experience...
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