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[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1093001][B]Labor makes man[/B]
Man’ accomplishments in his journey depend upon his strenuous struggle not upon his luck. Because, luck makes him lazy and depend on others. On the other hand, labor encourages him to work tirelessly for a free and an active life. (Words 40)[/QUOTE]
You have some issues in precis.
1- First your title is not completely suitable. Title should be "Labor not the luck, makes a man". (2.5/5 marks)
2- Total words are 126 so 1/3 should be 42 or 43. your words are 40. (2/3) marks.
3- you added some extra words such as "luck makes him lazy and depend on others". Laziness and self-dependence have not been mentioned in original paragraph. Therefore, you got (-2 Marks)
4- Your score from precis is 4/7
So your total score is (2.5/5+2/3-2+4/7=6.5/15 )

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092973][B][U][CENTER]Precis Paragraph 04[/CENTER][/U][/B]

It is not luck but labour that makes men. Luck says an American writer, is ever waiting for something to turn up: labour with keen eye and strong will always turns up something. Luck lies in bed and wishes the postman would bring him news of a legacy; labour turns out at six and with busy pen and ringing hammer lays the foundation of a competence. Luck whines; labour watches. Luck relies on chance; labour on character. Luck slips downwards to self-indulgence; labour strides upwards and aspires to independence. The conviction, therefore, is extending that diligence is the mother of good luck: in other words, that a man’s success in life will be proportionate to his efforts, to his industry, to his attention to small things.(126 words)[/QUOTE]

[B][U][CENTER]Labor is the key to success not luck. [/CENTER][/U][/B]
[I]A man can accomplish his ambitions by labor not by luck. Luck only lies in dreams. Labor turns luck into reality. Labor develops self-dependence and character. Labor moves a man on the glory of success luck does not. Handwork makes a good luck. (43 words)[/I]
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Please evaluate. Thanks in advance.[/COLOR][/B]

Make precis of this paragraph
 

[B][I][U][CENTER]Precis Paragraph 06[/CENTER][/U][/I][/B]
It is physically impossible for a well-educated, intellectual, or brave man to make money the chief object of his thoughts just as it is for him to make his dinner the principal object of them. All healthy people like their dinners, but their dinner is not the main object of their lives. So all healthy minded people like making money ought to like it and enjoy the sensation of winning it; it is something better than money.
A good soldier, for instance, mainly wishes to do his fighting well. He is glad of his pay—very properly so and justly grumbles when you keep him ten years without it—till, his main mission of life is to win battles, not to be paid for winning them. So of clergymen. The clergyman's object is essentially baptize and preach not to be paid for preaching. So of doctors. They like fees no doubt—ought to like them; yet if they are brave and well-educated the entire object to their lives is not fees. They on the whole, desire to cure the sick; and if they are good doctors and the choice were fairly to them, would rather cure their patient and lose their fee than kill him and get it. And so with all the other brave and rightly trained men: their work is first, their fee second—very important always; but still second.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1093002]You have some issues in precis.
1- First your title is not completely suitable. Title should be "Labor not the luck, makes a man". (2.5/5 marks)
2- Total words are 126 so 1/3 should be 42 or 43. your words are 40. (2/3) marks.
3- you added some extra words such as "luck makes him lazy and depend on others". Laziness and self-dependence have not been mentioned in original paragraph. Therefore, you got (-2 Marks)
4- Your score from precis is 4/7
So your total score is (2.5/5+2/3-2+4/7=6.5/15 )[/QUOTE]

Oh such low marks. I deserved it.
But i have some reservations. Words do not matter but quality does. How can we right exat length of words given it is subjetive. So, 40 or 42 does not matter i have learnt our word limit can exeed or decline but it should be near to the actual targetted limit.
[B]you added some extra words such as "luck makes him lazy and depend on others". Laziness and self-dependence have not been mentioned in original paragraph.[/B]
To your this point let me quote passage
[B]Luck lies in bed and wishes the postman would bring him news of[/B] a legacy; labour turns out at six and with busy pen and ringing hammer lays the foundation of a competence.
The highlighted line indicates that beliver of luck does not want to do anything himself and relies on others.
This is my opinion. You can give your own further. And, thanks for your analysis.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1093004][B][U][CENTER]Labor is the key to success not luck. [/CENTER][/U][/B]
[I]A man can accomplish his ambitions by labor not by luck. Luck only lies in dreams. Labor turns luck into reality. Labor develops self-dependence and character. Labor moves a man on the glory of success luck does not. Handwork makes a good luck. (43 words)[/I]
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Please evaluate. Thanks in advance.[/COLOR][/B][/QUOTE]

Your precis is better written. No mistake at all. But, idea or theme is same that i have shared in my attempt. Hope you get it.

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