good governance


outline:
introduction
what is good governance
characteristics of good governance
governance in pakistan
factors affecting governance in pakistan
poor management coruption
no justice
poverty
unemployement
no rule of law
interprovincial conflicts
dis integration in society
poor leader ship
steps to be taken in pakistan for good governance
conclusion



a good governance means the process of decision making and the processes by which the decisions are implemented.These decisions are made on account of people's economic/social conditions so that they do not face any hardships.good governance is not only bound in making decisions but is scattered in making the country exalt.good governance is an important tool in making a country prosperous. A good governance has 8 major characteristics : participation,rule of law,transparency,responsiveness,consensus oriented,equity and inclusiveness,effectiveness and efficiency, accountability. it iis a good governance that makes a country run on right direction.it requires democracy,distribution of equal rights ,no disparity among people,following the rule of law.a good governance is single most important factor in eradicating poverty and promoting development.it helps country in all aspects economic,political,financial.good governance removes all the financial crisis of the country and helps to aggrandize the management,trade,transport,agriculture etc.it follows the policy of unity among various classes of country.it focuses on distributing equal rights among people; poor or rich.
as a good governed country should be highly productive and perfectly managed , pakistan's govt is highly ill governed and poorly managed one ,management is the back bone of a country which helps a country to flourish in agriculture,renewable resources, non renewable resources. management is the key element in alleviation of poverty,crisis etc.pakistan is very rich in natural resources but poor in the management. a lot of resources in pakistan needs improvement. pakistan has worlds largest coal deposit of 185 billion tons.natural gas production is at high level in pakistan.80% of coal is produced by govt and 20% by private sector.there are estimated to be equivalent to 618 million barrels of crude oil.this is more than twice if we compare it with the oil resources of saudi arabia.
one of the cause in poor management is corruption.the harm that corruption has caused to pakistan no other thing had harmed pakistan. corruption has badly affected the quality of governance,states of the economy and social justice available to the people .the causes of corruption are lack of effective accountability, poor performance of institutions etc.
a good governance follow the policy to give equal rights to the whole nation. pakistani people are very poor in attaining justice. the rich are highly powerful who consume the rights of the poor.there have been honour killlings ,rape,robberies but all we hear is the silence of justice of pakistan.the injustice causes instability in the country.
poverty is a diaphanous truth in the working of this poorly governed country. about half of the population of pakistan lives under poverty..This poverty is highly caused by unemployment. unemployment has caused serious problems to the people. Many IT experts,doctors, engineers are looking for job opportunities due to bad employment system. growth population,poor education system,energy crisis are the cause of unemployment.
the rule of law is the basic characteristic of good governance. pakistan highly lacks the rule of law.our govt should folow the rule of law which includes equal justice to the whole nation ,distribution of equal rights etc.in democratic society the rule of law reflects the quality of govt.
balochistan is a province where establishing rule of law is a a major challenge . the country is inside faced with interprovincial conflicts. even today the govt has failed in resolving the interprovincial disputes.

i have posted half of my essay..i will post the remaining part later... please point out l mistakes...

I am no expert in essay writing or English grammar and I haven't yet started my preparations for CE-2016, but I think analyzing this short essay of yours will give me a good reference about what I already know (before preparation). This will help me see whether I have improved or not after doing some study. But more importantly, I hope that people point out the mistakes I am making.

In this post, I will go through part of your essay sentence by sentence and try to find the grammatical mistakes and make some general changes, that I feel can make the essay look better.
(Later (in a separate post), if I find time, I will try to focus on paragraphs and try to improve them)

So, let's start…

a good governance means the process of decision making and the processes by which the decisions are implemented.
>> I think this should be the definition of “governance”, not “good governance”. So this sentence should read:
Governance means the process of decision making and implementation of these decisions. (there are better definitions available that can be used instead)
>> After this, it will be good idea to define good governance as well. A good definition I found is:
"Good governance" is the governance that is, among other things, participatory, transparent and accountable. It is equitable and promotes the rule of law. (found this definition via google)

These decisions are made on account of people's economic/social conditions so that they do not face any hardships.
>>Because of the changes above, this sentence should now read:
The decisions in good governance are made on account of people's economic/social conditions so that they do not face any hardships.

good governance is not only bound in making decisions but is scattered in making the country exalt. good governance is an important tool in making a country prosperous.
>> “bound in” should be replaced by “limited to”. And “scattered” and “exalt” are giving me a strange feeling about this sentence. “making the country exalt” is not grammatically correct (I think). So my version of this sentence would be:
Good governance is not limited to making good decisions and implementing them in a better way. It serves a higher purpose of social and economic development, making the country more prosperous and flourishing.

A good governance has 8 major characteristics : participation,rule of law,transparency,responsiveness,consensus oriented,equity and inclusiveness,effectiveness and efficiency, accountability.
>> Here is a tip someone once gave me: Don't use figures when you are not talking about statistics in an essay. e.g. 8. So Use “Eight” instead. And I think it will be better to avoid long lists. My version of this sentence would be:
Major principles of good governance include: participation, rule of law, transparency, responsiveness, consensus, equity and inclusiveness, effectiveness and efficiency, and accountability.

it iis a good governance that makes a country run on right direction.
>> This sentence should be:
It is good governance that makes a country run in the right direction.
OR
It is good governance that makes sure a country is headed in the right direction.


it requires democracy,distribution of equal rights ,no disparity among people,following the rule of law.
>> I think it would be better to break this sentence into multiple ones.
It requires democracy where distribution of equal rights is practiced. There must be no disparity among the people and the rule of law should be a practical fact.

a good governance is single most important factor in eradicating poverty and promoting development.
>>Good governance is the single most important factor …….

it helps country in all aspects economic,political,financial.
>> helps in what ??? (dvelopment) , aren't economic and financial same ??? (yes they are)
It helps the country develop in all aspects; economic, political and social.

I will do the rest when I find time.
(I will really appreciate if someone points out the mistakes I have made in this analysis)

Anabiya! Here are few suggestions for you.The topic is "Good Governance" so instead of confining it to Pakistan why not you write about good Governance with a global perspective in mind.You can quote examples from Pakistani Society but your sole focus should not be Pakistan.
By taking a global approach, you will not only have more material to write about but also will be able to present a bigger picture of your arguments.However, It was a nice attempt .Keep it up! (y)

Here is the sentence analysis of the remainder of your essay

good governance removes all the financial crisis of the country and helps to aggrandize the management,trade,transport,agriculture etc.
>> Crisis is singular, its plural is “crises”. So “all crisis” is wrong. Instead “all crises” should be used.
>> And I think crisis is not removed. It is solved.
So my version of this sentence would be:
Good governance can solve the financial crisis ((singular because I have omitted “all”)) of a country and helps aggrandize its various sectors including trade, transport, agriculture and management.

as a good governed country should be highly productive and perfectly managed , pakistan's govt is highly ill governed and poorly managed one,
>> “Pakistan govt. is highly ill governed”. A govt. is not governed. A govt governs. So this part should read “Pakistan is highly ill governed by its govt.”
>>I feel that something else is also wrong with the structure of this sentence but am unable to figure it out. My version of this sentence will be:
A good governed country is perfectly managed and is highly productive. Unfortunately, Pakistan is highly ill governed by its government and the management is very poor.

management is the back bone of a country which helps a country to flourish in agriculture,renewable resources, non renewable resources.
>>when you use “which”, place a comma before it. When you use “that”, there is no need of comma.
>>And it will be better if the second use of the word “country” is replaced by “it”
Management is the back bone of a country, which helps it to flourish in ………..
OR
Management is the back bone of country that helps it to flourish in …………
(notice that the sentence containing “which” has a comma and the sentence containing “that” has no comma)

a lot of resources in pakistan needs improvement.
>> here “needs” is used for “resources”. A lot of resources needs improvement. It is not used for Pakistan. But because “resources” is plural so the grammatically correct form should be: “A lot of resources need improvement”.
>> One other thing you need to look for is the correct use of words. Resources don't need improvement. The utilization/management/distribution of resources needs improvement.
My version of this sentence will be:
A lot of resources in Pakistan need improved utilization, management and distribution.


pakistan has worlds largest coal deposit of 185 billion tons. natural gas production is at high level in pakistan. 80% of coal is produced by govt and 20% by private sector. there are estimated to be equivalent to 618 million barrels of crude oil. this is more than twice if we compare it with the oil resources of saudi arabia.
>> I think “deposit” should be “deposits”.
>> “there are” should be “these are”

one of the cause in poor management is corruption.
>> It should be “one of the causes of….. “

the harm that corruption has caused to pakistan no other thing had harmed pakistan.
>> No other thing has harmed Pakistan so much as corruption has.
OR
The harm that corruption has caused to Pakistan is greater than that caused by anything else.

a good governance follow the policy to give equal rights to the whole nation.
>> “Follow” should be “follows”
A good governance follows the policy…..

pakistani people are very poor in attaining justice.
>>The meaning conveyed by this sentence is that it is the fault of the people of Pakistan themselves, not the fault of the system or government.
Pakistani people are unable to attain justice

This poverty is highly caused by unemployment.
>> Major cause of this poverty is unemployment.
OR
The most important reason for this poverty is unemployment.

growth population,poor education system,energy crisis are the cause of unemployment.
>> are the causes of unemployment

the country is inside faced with interprovincial conflicts.
>> The country in itself is facing inter-provincial conflicts.
OR
There are inter-provincial conflicts within the country.

even today the govt has failed in resolving the interprovincial disputes.
>> “failed in resolving” should be “failed to resolve”
even today the govt. has failed to resolve the inter-provincial disputes.

thank you so much both for your kind help and suggestions... please share your outline and essay too in this thread so that i would have a more clear concept of essay....

Its a good attempt, always try to start from broad area then encapsulate it to the level of Pakistan , like you should start from the globe, you can add some historical examples of past Muslim's and all other regimes etc , it would give you more information's

"Amna", I didn't know red is prohibited. I will surely be careful in the future..