tenses problem i.e., s/es use...

Ok would you mind identifying that tenses problems...???

@seher. your essay with minor amendments.

Pakistan,s War on Terror
Please Check whether the elements under each head is properly placed???... i am confused little bit about sociological impacts.

7. Impacts of War on Terror on Pakistan
(a) National impact
(i) Internal displaced person (s)
(j) Flight of International humanitarian sector
(k) Loss of National Pride
(l) (Colossal)Human losses
(b) Economical impact
(i) Unemployment
(ii) Diminishing (look awkward)Tourism
(iii) Declining Foreign Direct Investment
(iv) Flight of businesses from Karachi(already explained above)
(c) Psychological Impacts
(i) Depression ? write full sentence
(j) Demoralization and pessimism
(k) Desensitization
(d) Sociological impacts
(i) Clear (omit)division of Pakistani society
(j) Withering away of state-society relations
(k) Health is on stake (restructure)
(l) Public life-style is threatened (threat to public life)
(m) Food insecurity
(n) No Educational activities (setback back to education sector)
(e) Political impact
(i) Threats to Politicians
(j) Division of Politician (s)over the `ownership` of the war
(k) A halt to Political activities

@ Nazi Orakzai.
I guess u scored 31 in Islamiat in CSS 2010, If that was ur score card which I came across while randomly checking the marks sheets of failed candidates.I failed twice in Essays, scored 30 in CSS 2010 and obtaied 29 in CSS 2012, however I cleared remaning papers with good marks on both occasions. hope u wont mind to share ur attempted essays and secured marks in CSS 2010 AND 2012.
Wsalam.

Waqar it is pity that you faced such miserable moments in your previous attempts. Would you mind telling what went wrong in your essay papers?? it might prove beneficial for new comers.

sir,will you teach me? i am also living in islamabad.

too much busy now a days

I was confident enough on my first appearance in CSS 2010 that I almost neglected preparation for Essay paper and concentrated on other subjects which proved fatel. I attempted " Can women status be equal to men in Pakistan?
The blunder I made:
1. Started my Essay without outline.
2. Introduction was poor, I also made frequent cutting.
3. I felt during the couse of my paper that I had deviated from the sequence which I earlier kept in mind.
4. Conclusion was balanced.
5. Finally I think I had not prepared at all for the Essay paper in 2010

My attempted Essay in 2012 was " Energy Crisis : ........." poor topic selection.

salam madam,I am totally new here dear madam I am going to appear in css 2013,I don't have any idea about this examination even (didn't know much about css) I filled my from just two days before my English is not up to standard level,I didn't appear css examination before ,so could you please help me what should I do for this examination ,especially for English,so please tell me how should I practice for eassy writing If you give me some useful suggestion I will be thankful to you,thanks

bhae jan me kud nazi orekzi ko minten ker rae k mujhe english prha dain. ap mujh sa seekhny ka keh ray.